My First Attempt

[Zesking]

My first Proper cards made! (Made in about July, but only just realised there was a Forum for the cardmaker!)
PLEASE rate me! And I really am looking for negative (but CONSTRUCTIVE) comments!

[color="#0000FF"][size="2"]The following cards are really for boosting tribute summons, but it costs LP to add a second emblem to your hand, and they are open to spell and trap, and moster card effects, so they aren't really overpowered. Nothing special, but I AM going to be making a set, so if i could have some info on how to do the Circulations, set ID's and improvements, the set won't neccessarily be on these few cards (lol) but I just want to know how I'm doing D;. Thanks.[/size][/color]

[center]Emblem of Obelisk ([color="#FF0000"]WATER[/color]/LV3/EFFECT/FAIRY)
[IMG]http://i55.tinypic.com/vhrmvp.jpg[/IMG]
[Fairy / Effect]
This card cannot be destroyed by battle. By paying 500LP, add 'Emblem of Ra' or 'Emblem of Slifer' [color="#FF0000"]from your deck[/color] to your hand. Battle damage dealt [color="#FF0000"]to the controller of this card[/color] in a battle involving this card becomes 0.

Emblem of the Ancients ([color="#FF0000"]LIGHT[/color]/LV6/EFFECT/FAIRY)
[IMG]http://i53.tinypic.com/nbvsbs.jpg[/IMG]
This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card can only be special summoned [color="#FF0000"]from your hand [/color]by [color="#FF0000"]removing from play[/color] [color="#FF0000"]a face up[/color] "Emblem of Obelisk", "Emblem of Ra" and "Emblem of Slifer" from your side of the field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. When tribute summoning a 'Divine-Beast' monster, this card counts as all of the [color="#FF0000"]required[/color] tributes. Once per turn, [color="#FF0000"]during your main phase,[/color] you may special summon one monster card with 'Emblem Of' in it's card name from your graveyard to your side of the field [color="#FF0000"]in face-up attack position[/color].

Emblem of Slifer ([color="#FF0000"]FIRE[/color]/LV3/EFFECT/FAIRY)
[IMG]http://i54.tinypic.com/97s1vl.jpg[/IMG]
This card cannot be destroyed by battle. By paying 500LP, add 'Emblem of Obelisk' or 'Emblem of Ra' [color="#FF0000"]from your deck[/color] to your hand. Battle damage dealt [color="#FF0000"]to the controller of this card[/color] in a battle involving this card becomes 0.

Emblem of Ra ([color="#FF0000"]WIND[/color]/LV3/EFFECT/FAIRY)
[IMG]http://i53.tinypic.com/icnz1d.jpg[/IMG]
This card cannot be destroyed by battle. By paying 500LP, add 'Emblem of Obelisk' or 'Emblem of Slifer' [color="#FF0000"]from your deck[/color] to your hand. Battle damage dealt [color="#FF0000"]to the controller of this card[/color] in a battle involving this card becomes 0.[/center]

[color="#800080"][size="2"](Red means text that's wrong (or missing) but I've corrected in written format.)[/size][/color]

[Bahamut - Envoy of the End]

For a first set of cards these aren't bad - in need of improvement obviously - but certainly above the standard of the average newbie. Better than my first cards, well more creative anyway.

Will try to help by being as in depth as I can.

The 3 emblems - nice idea and theme. They all flow together nicely, but possibly should share an attribute. The drawing effect is balanced, some may say overpowered but I like it. The reducing battle damage is good as well, but being indestructible is pushing it too far. It detracts from it's main focus as Tribute support and becomes a defensive card instead, a new Marshmallon if you will.

Don't like Emblem of the Ancients so much though. It's too easy to summon considering it's devasting Tribute effect. Bringing back the other Emblems is fine but there should be a cost to do so. Also try to avoid the Divine Attribute where possible.

OCG - Words such as Battle Damage, Graveyard, Deck, Special Summoned, Life Points, etc, should be capitalized. Another small adjustment would be to put similar effects together, meaning 'Emblem of Ra' should read with the indestructible effect and then the reduced Battle Damage effect after, as they are pretty closely related. Then the other effect on the end. But these are small things you just pick up around here, you're already pretty up on terminology and they are easy to understand.

Overall nice and tidy effort in need of a few tweaks here and there, but pretty creative and useful. Nice one, and welcome btw.

[Zesking]

Thanks very much! I will take all of these on board, especially the indestructable effect, I agree it does make them like Marshmallon a bit too much, and Emblem of the Ancients can have a few ways to make it harder to summon, I think removing the indestructable effect on the emblems themselves will make it MUCH harder to summon EotA, so thanks for your comments and Ill try to take them in as much as possible! ;D