A New CARD!!!!!!!!!!

[The God of Darkness]

PLEASE RATE AND COMMENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Lore:This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set except by paying 1000 Life Points and Tributing 3 Dark-type monsters on your side of the field. When this card is Summoned, Special Summon 2 "Dark Solider Tokens" (Fiend-Type/Dark/Level 4/ATK 1800/DEF 0) these Tokens cannot attack the same turn they are Summoned. Once per turn, place 1 "Death Counter" on this card. For each "Death Counter" on this card increase this cards ATK by 300. Increase the ATK of this card by 600 per monster this card destroys. Once per turn, Add the bottom card of your Deck to your Hand.
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[moppmoppmopp]

Despair, not dispair.

[Myst]

no its actually uped (underpowered)

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set except by paying half your [b]L[/b]ife [b]P[/b]oints [b]and[/b] Tributing 5 [b]m[/b]onsters on your side of the field. When this card is Summoned[b],[/b] Special Summon 2 "Dark Solider Tokens" (Fiend-Type/Dark/[b]L[/b]evel 4/ATK 1800/DEF 0) these Tokens cannot attack the same turn they are Summoned. Once per turn, [b]p[/b]lace 1 "Death Counter" on this card[b].[/b] For each "Death [b]C[/b]ounter" on this card increase this cards ATK by 300. Increase the ATK of this card by 600 per monster this card destroys.

uhhh... i'm lazy, so i'll just fix half of it and THERE! now for the other extensions, plz wait for some1 else to do it. Well mostly the errors are capitallizing and UP'D so 7.5/10. When the errors are fixed, 8.5/10. Not the best but still good

[Squirrel Girl]

I find the card uped to. It can easily be destroyed cause of its low atk and def. Also there are ocg errors. I give this 5/10

[snowyash]

Too much drawbacks in summoning. I think you tried so hard not to OP it that you haven't done yourself justice. The main effect of the card is sound, but you ought to make it a bit easier to summon.

As it is the card would probably rate as 6/10

I would recommend:
- Easier summon conditions - e.g. 3 Dark-types on field
- Make it a bit stronger - 2500 ATK/DEF I think would be reasonable.
- Work on the OCG - swordfire206 has already posted an example of what you can change
- Effect - The Death Counter idea is effective, but (just an idea) 1 death counter per monster destroyed only - 500 ATK for each Death Counter.

[The God of Darkness]

[quote name='moppmoppmopp' timestamp='1287033642' post='4703933']
Despair, not dispair.
[/quote] oops thanks i changed it now but what do you rate this card?


[quote name='swordfire206' timestamp='1287126826' post='4706457']
no its actually uped (underpowered)This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set except by paying half your [b]L[/b]ife [b]P[/b]oints [b]and[/b] Tributing 5 [b]m[/b]onsters on your side of the field. When this card is Summoned[b],[/b] Special Summon 2 "Dark Solider Tokens" (Fiend-Type/Dark/[b]L[/b]evel 4/ATK 1800/DEF 0) these Tokens cannot attack the same turn they are Summoned. Once per turn, [b]p[/b]lace 1 "Death Counter" on this card[b].[/b] For each "Death [b]C[/b]ounter" on this card increase this cards ATK by 300. Increase the ATK of this card by 600 per monster this card destroys.uhhh... i'm lazy, so i'll just fix half of it and THERE! now for the other extensions, plz wait for some1 else to do it. Well mostly the errors are capitallizing and UP'D so 7.5/10. When the errors are fixed, 8.5/10. Not the best but still good
[/quote] ok thanks this better? I changed it now thanks for the rate also.


[quote name='^_^AxManBoy^_^' timestamp='1287127344' post='4706461']
I find the card uped to. It can easily be destroyed cause of its low atk and def. Also there are ocg errors. I give this 5/10
[/quote] you make a good point.... thanks for the rate though and is this better i changed it.


[quote name='SKizophrenIK117' timestamp='1287157972' post='4706834']
Too much drawbacks in summoning. I think you tried so hard not to OP it that you haven't done yourself justice. The main effect of the card is sound, but you ought to make it a bit easier to summon.As it is the card would probably rate as 6/10I would recommend:- Easier summon conditions - e.g. 3 Dark-types on field- Make it a bit stronger - 2500 ATK/DEF I think would be reasonable.- Work on the OCG - swordfire206 has already posted an example of what you can change- Effect - The Death Counter idea is effective, but (just an idea) 1 death counter per monster destroyed only - 500 ATK for each Death Counter.
[/quote] ya i see your point and good idea about the dark types their i changed it better now and thanks for the rate.

[Black W Mage]

easy way to fix this problem:
"This monster cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by tributing 3 Dark monsters and removing from play 3 Dark monsters in the graveyard..."

[Lexsuncion]

As a beatstick, this makes a lovely card. It has attack attack attack, and keeps gaining it! wee! as everyone has said, the summoning conditions are a bit heavy, but since everyone said that, No need to focus on it since you've addressed it!

The Death counter thing, and ATK/Destroyed monster effect should be condensed somehow, I feel, but I dont know how I would go about it, since they're two separate effects that seemingly achieve the same goal (ATK ATK ATK!!!)

I feel that its nice to see a good, straight-forward card, whose effects and flashy colors aren't its selling point. This card feels like a simple intentioned (KILL KILL KILL!) card, of which there are many of. Its simple, sweet(Or not, considering is a scary deemon!) and not so complicated as to make people confused as to all its applications and meanings.

7/10 from Lexy-poo! Not [i]super[/i] original and awe-inspiring, but it doesn't get wrapped up in its own effects and goals, making it versitile and fun to put in any evil doom deck!

[The God of Darkness]

[quote name='Lexsuncion' timestamp='1287376358' post='4714500']
As a beatstick, this makes a lovely card. It has attack attack attack, and keeps gaining it! wee! as everyone has said, the summoning conditions are a bit heavy, but since everyone said that, No need to focus on it since you've addressed it!

The Death counter thing, and ATK/Destroyed monster effect should be condensed somehow, I feel, but I dont know how I would go about it, since they're two separate effects that seemingly achieve the same goal (ATK ATK ATK!!!)

I feel that its nice to see a good, straight-forward card, whose effects and flashy colors aren't its selling point. This card feels like a simple intentioned (KILL KILL KILL!) card, of which there are many of. Its simple, sweet(Or not, considering is a scary deemon!) and not so complicated as to make people confused as to all its applications and meanings.

7/10 from Lexy-poo! Not [i]super[/i] original and awe-inspiring, but it doesn't get wrapped up in its own effects and goals, making it versitile and fun to put in any evil doom deck!
[/quote] thanks for the comment and rating!