FIXED POKEMON CARDS

[thesasukecursemark]

I TRIED TO FOLLOW ADVICE


FIXED aggron

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FIXed charizard


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magmortar




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electivire


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outlet ritual




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[Kravenwolf]

Hi. There are quite a few grammatical errors on your cards. Touching up the grammar a bit on your cards would probably be the best place to start. Be sure to capitalize the first letter in every word at the beggining of a sentence, always end a sentence with proper puncuation, and etc. If you have Microsoft Word, I suggest copy/pasting your card effects' into Word, running a spell check (F7), and then copy/paste the corrected text back into the Card Maker.

Try to stay consistant with official terms as well. Alway capitalize the word 'Graveyard', change LP to Life Points, and so on. Just my two cents.

[thesasukecursemark]

i don't have word

[Ieyasu Tokugawa]

You can use any kind of program that has spellcheck, like MS works word processor. Really, you just need proper English grammer with some extra words capitalized.

Ignoring grammer, for damage you have to specify when the damage is inflicted. Does the effect activated during the Standby Phase? Main Phase? When the card is Summoned?

Also, since Electivire is Summoned via Ritual Summon, it needs to be a Ritual Monster. Check other Ritual Monsters to see how the tributing sentences are written.

Finally, you don't have to make all your cards inflict damage. Try some effects that represent the monster itself, like for Aggron, you could use an effect that decreases battle damage done to you, since it's Defense stat is so high in the Pokemon games.

Hope this helps, and keep trying. You'll get better as time goes on.