Ozuma_lord_of_the_fire Posted October 24, 2010 Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 Hi to everyone! I like to show a few cards I have maded on the card maker. The story of the Lord of Darkness is this one: "[font="Book Antiqua"]At a long long time ago... When the world has the first civilization... The people of this world were bored because there does'nt exists enemies. The Power of the Light become very and very bored... The people of this civilization wanted more... So they decide to create the dark power... To do that there was neded 60000 human tributes to create 6 dark creatures... Some years passed but the people of that civilization could'nt make the necessary tributes... So they go to the most easy mode... By destroying the Tower of the Space.. Were contains all the dark creatures in the universe... But if they do that by this way the creatures will became out of control, but they do that at the same, and powerfull creatures apeared in this world and destroyed it. And the creatures of darkness could kill exactly 60000 humans, so they could create the 6 Lord of Darkness... But civilizations of others planets try to destroy them, but the power of the Darkness was too much powerfull. Until in your days the dark power is around us."[/font]. Please coment the cards, If somebudy could help me by creating the pack of the lord of darkness, please contact me. REMEMBER: Everyone can copy the images of the cards becaus I "steal" some images and I bag sory for that [img]http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOCN9W2ojI/AAAAAAAAALk/KSNmq1m5wT8/s1600/democifjf.jpeg[/img] [img]http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOCSz3Ja1I/AAAAAAAAALo/M8uIZ9gRzUs/s1600/Lord+of+Darkness+-+Vampire+Queen.jpeg[/img] [img]http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOCZbN6LGI/AAAAAAAAALs/Gz7R7DmKnxY/s1600/gfgrtr.jpeg[/img] [img]http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMODqRxlEEI/AAAAAAAAALw/FZkRfklV8Nc/s1600/fgftgrdtrt.jpeg[/img] [img]http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOD69n_szI/AAAAAAAAAL0/2NRrpRTp4y0/s1600/fsdjnt54.jpeg[/img] [img]http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOEZpLqpQI/AAAAAAAAAL4/7JdHWFmgQ8k/s1600/q5436tfr.jpeg[/img] [img]http://1.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOElLncZSI/AAAAAAAAAL8/pX7eYTxLmt8/s1600/0000.jpeg[/img] [img]http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOEuz8NboI/AAAAAAAAAMA/x3oHhxh31lo/s1600/aaaaaaaa.jpeg[/img] [img]http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOE62vB8LI/AAAAAAAAAME/JjvdrbhE9qk/s1600/1111111.jpeg[/img] [img]http://1.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOFJ9qhXKI/AAAAAAAAAMI/7vEe-50HObk/s1600/0000065.jpeg[/img] [img]http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOFRog-S8I/AAAAAAAAAMM/1B3kl26MYIc/s1600/6it9yjjh.jpeg[/img] Here I have used the card "Offearing to the Immortals" [img]http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOFaxJYXuI/AAAAAAAAAMQ/DpvWI-tI9kQ/s1600/ry676878.jpeg[/img] [img]http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOFkl1Q9YI/AAAAAAAAAMU/A0oq1ma3vrk/s1600/mmnmnmn.jpeg[/img] [img]http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOF-HTsghI/AAAAAAAAAMY/mYq3J3dqxBI/s1600/tyhtj.jpeg[/img] [img]http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOGFW3IxTI/AAAAAAAAAMc/xC8pE8jLsEI/s1600/435rd.jpeg[/img] [img]http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_XomVeT2ulNc/TMOGSGDUkaI/AAAAAAAAAMg/rB3D96YbxcI/s1600/utyuyuyu.jpeg[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
snowyash Posted October 24, 2010 Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 I think you posted this topic 3 times... OCG doesn't look great, most of the pics are nice. I'd put more but I'm about to turn off the comp and sleep. I'll probably have more detail for you in 8-?? hours. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venom Posted October 24, 2010 Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 Be warned, there is another guy in this forum who already made Virus monsters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yoshi Member Posted October 24, 2010 Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 Ehem..... One of the pics on your cards were made by a member here. You should credit him. OCG: Almost standard. Practise a bit and view OCG phrases. =D Pics: Good,though you used some from a member. Balance: Not too much. 4.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozuma_lord_of_the_fire Posted October 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 Well there was an error by posting this topic 3 times Adn I am not Enlish or American.... And it is very dificult to write cards in English Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
snowyash Posted October 24, 2010 Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 OK, said I'd look at the cards, you even reminded me to do so. I'll look at the first few for now as I have a couple of pressing matters at home. [b]Demonic Statue Gedo - Darkness Lord[/b] OCG - Don't think there's anything specifically wrong, just capitalize - Special Summon and Set. Also, change "incerages" (i think that's what you put) to increase. 8/10 Pic - Seems fine, but none of the pictures really mesh with the rest of the set. 5 or 6/10 Stats - Doesn't really matter. Not with the effects it's got. 2/10 Name - An Archetype within an Archetype and the name looks catchy. 9/10 Effect - Broken. You've got it so it can't be destroyed under any circumstance, doesn't take battle damage, and can potentially throw 3000 ATK about. That'll need changing. I'd recommend that you leave it as no battle damage, can't be destroyed as a result of battle. Replace attack boost with switching attack target to this. That'd make it playabe and great support, while still making it vulnerable and therefore, more balanced. As an afterthought, you can probably take out the "Lord of Darkness" stipulation as it doesn't apply to this card. 0/10 24.5 / 50 [b]Lord of Darkness - Vampire Queen[/b] OCG - Again looks fine just capitalize the Summon and Set in the first sentence again. "level" also needs capitalizing - Level. Also "susfully" - successfully (I think) 7/10 Pic - Could have been good, but is very blurred. Like before, doesn't really mesh with other cards. 4/10 Stats - Look fine for a Level 8. Could be dropped to accomadate the large destruction effect. 6/10 Name - Looks like it fits in great with the Archetype 10/10 Effect - Can be a real game turner. Reminds me a little of Chaos Emperor Dragon, just lower scale. Maybe add that it can't attack the same turn it uses the effect, and like I said earlier, maybe drop ATK to help balance. Maybe 2300. 7/10 34/50 - Much better this time. [b]Lord of Darkness - Mysterius Duck Master[/b] OCG - Standard dropped a bit here. Again capitalization is the main problem. "summon", "set", "traps" "efect monsters" all need capitals and "efect" needs an extra f. Also Psycic - Psychic. 5/10 Pic - Horribly blurred. Still doesn't fit in with other cards. 4/10 Stats - Seem fine. No problems here. 9/10 Name - "Mysterius Duck Master"? Not so sure it's the best name you could have chose. 5/10 Effect - Might want to change the destruction conditions to the "the effects of Spells, Taps..." etc. Just helps clarify. Also, I'd recommend you change LP changes to a set number. 1000/1500 each way would probably help. 7/10 30 / 50 I'll leave it there for now. At the moment, I'm pretty busy. My parting comment is this: "Please find better pictures!" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozuma_lord_of_the_fire Posted October 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 ok I am working on that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maliki Posted October 24, 2010 Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 Um two of those images are from duel masters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozuma_lord_of_the_fire Posted October 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted October 24, 2010 I know that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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