Hawk_eye_sax Posted January 22, 2008 Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 Here's a concept card for a set i am working on. I'm looking for constructive criticism. Please, if you feel as if it is over powered, make suggestions to fix it. I hope you enjoy! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted January 22, 2008 Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 hmm, it's ok, but the ocg is off, and the pic is not good =/7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rholowie Posted January 22, 2008 Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 Yankee said it all. Pic's from a video game. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hawk_eye_sax Posted January 22, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 wow, seems like the pic is what drives you people. I thought this forum was really about the abilities and the actual cards and not how well you can surf the internet to find a really cool image. Oh, if you read the beginning, CONSTRUCTIVE criticism please. What can I do to make it better? Also, if its not OCG enough for you please point out which part it is so i can fix it. Thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rholowie Posted January 22, 2008 Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 Don't contradict yourself because your overall card needs improving. Words need to be capitalized and your grammar is a bit off. Normal Summon Spell card not Magic Capitalize some words, too many for me to point out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hawk_eye_sax Posted January 22, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 You mean words like Defense and Battle Phase? I realize it has capitalization issues. No offense but are all you guys English majors or something? Its just a card. Chill out. If you were to take out the OCG errors and just look at the ability, what would you say? Again, it's a concept card. Sorry about the confusion. I really just wanted an opinion on the effect. Thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rholowie Posted January 22, 2008 Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 Battle Phase must be capitalized. Some wording could be changed. ATK not attack points...etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted January 22, 2008 Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 Yeah, now Rholowie said it all XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 22, 2008 Report Share Posted January 22, 2008 All i can say is Yankee and Rholowie, said it all ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Master Ingo Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 All i can say is Yankee and Rholowie' date=' said it all ^_^[/quote'] agreed :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(!Death!Reborn!) Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 hmm' date=' it's ok, but the ocg is off, and the pic is not good =/7/10[/quote'] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 Dang, I have been quoted a few times now! lolI can see it as a good card, kind of =/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JerryFreelance Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 "This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your hand and by Tributing 1 monster you control and by sending 2 Spell/Trap Cards on your side of the field to the Graveyard. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. When this card is attacked, decrease its DEF by an amount equal to the attacking monster's ATK. This card is destroyed if its DEF reaches 0. During the end of each player's Battle Phase, the DEF of this monster is returned to its original DEF." That's how the effect should be worded, with perfect OCG and all. Just pop that into the card maker, and you should be good. Use imageshack and image tags when you re-upload though. Great concept, but it is a bit overpowered. I would lower the stats a bit or up the level. Here's what I think you should do. The way I see it, you have a few options: Option A: Change Level to ~8. Option B: Change ATK to ~1800. Option C: Change ATK to ~2000 and change DEF to ~2000. Option D: Change Level to 4 and change ATK to ~1000 and change DEF to ~2000 Option E: Change Level to 4 and change ATK to ~1500 and change DEF to ~1900 Your call... Any of those options work though. Great idea. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hawk_eye_sax Posted January 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 Thanks you bhim xD, that was what I was looking for. Do you have to say that battle damage is applied normally or is it now assumed if you state it is not destroyed by battle? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kizzi Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 With the OCG and grammar fixes, it seems a great card! Just remember to upload it to Photobucket next time! ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 Wow Bhim, you do huge rates! lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas Maximus Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 Bhim Xd really did say it all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 No, really? lol, Geeze bhim, you just freaking reviewed it, XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RestLess-BoTics Posted January 24, 2008 Report Share Posted January 24, 2008 Some grammar and capitalization errors, and the picture could be alot better. Next time, when you make your cards, a great idea would be to put in a tiny bit more effort, so that you can get higher ratings, which will lead to you being an excellent cardmaker. You did a great job though! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kratos Aurion1 Posted January 24, 2008 Report Share Posted January 24, 2008 All i can say is Yankee and Rholowie' date=' said it all ^_^[/quote'] agreed :DI also agree Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted January 24, 2008 Report Share Posted January 24, 2008 Yay, again sombody agrees! yay! lol, sry, back to live action! XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elemental Hero Shadow Posted January 30, 2008 Report Share Posted January 30, 2008 nice job except for all the OCG crap. i've been berated for that too.overall 8.3/10 (ignoring OCG) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cyber Altair Posted January 30, 2008 Report Share Posted January 30, 2008 10/10 It's OKAMI!!!!!!!!!!!!! what? you know that OKAMI rocks and it's one of my fav. games. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Master of Dark Posted January 31, 2008 Report Share Posted January 31, 2008 I can't Stand That Picture!!! Anyway, good job, 7.5 /10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silencerleader Posted January 31, 2008 Report Share Posted January 31, 2008 To top it all off. My rating for the Okami card. 6/10...really expected more man, it was a cool game. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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