iron maiden eddie set

[Eddie \m/]

elo! this is my first topic so tell me if theres something wrong,so yes this is all about eddie from iron maiden please rate,it took me a month to make these:

[img]http://img708.imageshack.us/img708/8238/188075l.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img42.imageshack.us/img42/637/188075u.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img200.imageshack.us/img200/5992/188075.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img826.imageshack.us/img826/5992/188075.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img828.imageshack.us/img828/4163/188075d.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img840.imageshack.us/img840/5992/188075.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img837.imageshack.us/img837/8681/188075w.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img41.imageshack.us/img41/5992/188075.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img824.imageshack.us/img824/5992/188075.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img836.imageshack.us/img836/637/188075u.jpg[/img]

i'm a beginner so sorry they dont show up

[A.Prime]

NO NO NO!!
The OCG is off the pics are lame
and "The Iron Maiden Bass" it's a Electric Guitar...

-10/10

[Eddie \m/]

i told you im a beginer

o crap your right

sorry...

<sob>

[A.Prime]

ok..you are a beginer. Some tips then will be ok!!(I think..~_~iiiii)

1.Use pics with background. (The guitar pic is empty)
2.Use Capitalise for the cards tittle and for the card effects. (take a look at my Member Card into my Signature)
3.Try to use OCG correct. (Official Card Grammar)
4.Post the Lores of the cards. (Lore=Effect)
5.When you will post a lot of cards try to use "spoilers" (spoiler is a code)

exapmle:
[code][spoiler=something]IMG Code Here!![/spoiler][/code]

you will get something like that!
[spoiler=something]IMG Code Here!![/spoiler]

You can do a spoiler into an other spoiler:
[code][spoiler=something]IMG Code Here!!
[spoiler=something2]blablabla[/spoiler][/spoiler][/code]

then you will get that!
[spoiler=something]IMG Code Here!!
[spoiler=something2]blablabla[/spoiler][/spoiler]

[Eddie \m/]

okay is this right goyvannycapone

[img]http://img714.imageshack.us/img714/3922/188075i.jpg[/img]
1 "soul" tuner+1 or more non-tuner
monsters once per turn,you can special summon 1 fiend type monster from your hand

it didint let me do a spoiler :{

[A.Prime]

[spoiler=your Card][img]http://img714.imageshack.us/img714/3922/188075i.jpg[/img]
[spoiler=Lore]1 "soul" tuner+1 or more non-tuner
monsters once per turn,you can special summon 1 fiend type monster from your hand[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Correction]1 "soul" [b]T[/b]uner+1 or more non-[b]T[/b]uner monsters
[b]O[/b]nce per turn, ([i]during what Phase?[/i]), you can [b]S[/b]pecial [b]S[/b]ummon 1 [b]F[/b]iend[b]-T[/b]ype monster from your hand[b].[/b][/spoiler][/spoiler]

Too OP'ed "Over Powered"...ok Ihave this card on the field...so at my next turn I can Summon "Gorz" or "Summoned Skull" etc.

pic is ok.

-4/10 for the OP'ed
-2/10 the OCG

overall 4/10

[Eddie \m/]

i was thinking about the power and i thougth it was over powered too,anyway here is the new card:
[img]http://img696.imageshack.us/img696/5992/188075.jpg[/img]
lore:1 "soul" Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner's

Once per turn,during your draw phase, you can special summon 1 "fiend" type monster from your hand,if the monster is level 5 or 6,you do not need to tribute,if the monster is level 7 or more,you only need 1 tribute.

[A.Prime]

you still don't get it, do you?...take a look in my correction and yours..you will see differences about the writing part.

Here, take a look..
mine:
1 "soul" [b]T[/b]uner+1 or more non-[b]T[/b]uner monsters
[b]O[/b]nce per turn, during your [b]D[/b]raw [b]P[/b]hase, you can [b]S[/b]pecial [b]S[/b]ummon 1 [b]F[/b]iend[b]-T[/b]ype monster from your hand[b].[/b] [b]I[/b]f the monster is [b]L[/b]evel 7 or [b]higher[/b],you [b]must [/b][b]Tribute 1 monster on your side of the field.[/b]

yours:
1 "soul" Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner's
Once per turn,during your draw phase, you can special summon 1 "fiend" type monster from your hand,if the monster is level 5 or 6,you do not need to tribute,if the monster is level 7 or more,you only need 1 tribute.

[Eddie \m/]

ok now i am going to do it YOUR way

[img]http://img841.imageshack.us/img841/1724/188075n.jpg[/img]

[A.Prime]

ok. some tips you need to know

summon/ed=Summon/ed
special / normal / fusion / synchro / ritual = Special / Normal / Fusion / Synchro / Ritual
spell or trap card = Spell or Trap Card
light / dark / wind / water / earth / fire / divine monster = LIGHT / DARK / WIND / WATER/ EARTH / FIRE / DIVINE[b] M[/b]onster
all Sub-Types must writen like that: Fiend-Type or Pyro-Type or Spellcaster-Type [b]m[/b]onster etc.
all phases must writen like this: [b]D[/b]raw[b] P[/b]hase , [b]S[/b]tandby [b]P[/b]hase etc.

for now those tips are ok Ithink.. good luck at your new cards, I like to see them.

[Eddie \m/]

ok these are my new cards

[img]http://img828.imageshack.us/img828/3922/188075i.jpg[/img]

"dark eco"+"jak"+"metalhead"

During each Standby Phase,increase this card's atk and def by 3000

[img]http://img841.imageshack.us/img841/4163/188075d.jpg[/img]

When this card is summoned,you can choose to treat this
card's name as "dark eco"or"light eco"

i think i did this one wrong

[img]http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/5992/188075.jpg[/img]

[img]http://img827.imageshack.us/img827/9498/188075y.jpg[/img]

This card can only be summoned by tributing dark jak.If "toon world" is not on the Field,destroy this card.

[A.Prime]

ok, now some more tips.

atk / def = ATK / DEF (do not add the word points after the ATK or DEF... example: ...gains 500 ATK and DEF.)
when you make the cards try to use the 1st leters capitalise at the tittle and in the Sub-Type (example: toon dark jack = Toon Dark Jack) just like the 1st card you posted ay the post #11!!
there is no dark warrior type or ORB type, it's Warrior and beast or something else..
TRY YOUR PIC TO HAVE BACKGROUND AND NO WORDS (like the lastone!!

not bad..

6/10

[Eddie \m/]

that was the only pic that suit toon dark jak+i make cards for fun so i make up the sub type