Egyptian Deities

[Hila Ⅰ]

Heres my Egyptian Cards

[img]http://img713.imageshack.us/img713/8899/anubisk.jpg[/img]

Lore: [b][i]As long as this card is face up on your side of the field all your cards that are sent to the graveyard are returned to the bottom of your deck. By tributing this and one other monster you can special summon one 'God' monster from your deck. You must tribute 1 monster per turn to keep this card on the field. If you do not this card is destroyed.[/i] [/b]

[img]http://img178.imageshack.us/img178/3295/horusv.jpg[/img]

Lore:[i][b]This card can not be normal summoned or set. This card can only be special summoned by tributing two level 4 or lower monsters on your side of the field. Once per turn you can discard your entire hand. If you do this all your opponents monsters battle positions are changed. You must tribute one monster each turn to keep this card on the field. If you do not this card is destroyed[/b].[/i]

[img]http://img100.imageshack.us/img100/9893/sethi.jpg[/img]

Lore:[b][i]Increase this cards ATK by 300 for every other monster on your side of the field. Once per turn you may discard 2 cards from your hand to the graveyard to destroy all face down monsters on the field. You must tribute one monster per turn to keep this card on the field. If you do not this card is destroyed[/i].[/b]

[img]http://img220.imageshack.us/img220/3872/khepri.jpg[/img]

Lore:[b][i]Once per turn you may pay 2000 lifepoints to remove all monsters on the field from play except this card. During your opponents next standby phase they return to the field. You must tribute 1 monster each turn to keep this card on the field. If you do not this card is destroyed[/i].[/b]

[img]http://img6.imageshack.us/img6/5995/sekhmetv.jpg[/img]

Lore:[b][i]This card can attack all your opponents monsters once each. At the cost of 1000 lifepoints increase this cards ATK and DEF by 1000 each. If there is another 'God' monster on your side of the field this card cannot be selected as an attack target.You must tribute 1 monster each turn to keep this card on the field. If you do not this card is destroyed[/i].[/b]

[img]http://img155.imageshack.us/img155/8056/84565820.jpg[/img]

Lore: [b][i]This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card can only be special summoned by tributing 5 face up 'God' monsters on your side of the field. By paying 1000 lifepoints destroy all monsters with less combined ATK and DEF points than this card on the field. You must discard the top 2 cards of your deck each end phase to keep this card on the field. If you choose not to activate this effect destroy this card[/i].[/b]

[img]http://img294.imageshack.us/img294/7074/ammut.jpg[/img]

Lore:[b][i]As long as this card is face up on the field players do not have to tribute monsters to keep 'God' monsters on the field. If this card were to be destroyed you can discard 2 cards from your hand to keep the card on the field[/i].[/b]

[Jaime Duferier]

This message was approved by Shiny azelf fan 333 at 18:52 pm:


I cannot be bothered to do the others, so I will just pick on ra:

First of all, there is a REAL winged [s]chicken[/s] dragon of [u]RA[/u] card. it is a god, and i guess so is the ra god of gods...
which brings us to my next point, i will now rate the name of this card:
"Ra - God of Gods"

This name is crap, to put it bluntly. How 'bout something like this:
"King Ra, Ruler of Egyptian Gods"

Longer, but in my opinion, better.

LORE: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned [b](great, even more nomi monsters)[/b] by Tributing 5 face up 'God' monsters [b](the chances of you drawing this card-ban listed!-let alone summoning it are VERY slim, so it is a dead draw)[/b] on your side of the field. By paying 1000 life points destroy all monsters on the field with less combined ATK and DEF points than this card [b](a dark hole for 1000 life points! bargain, but OP'd because this would destroy even the best of the best on a bad day. how about changing it to ORIGINAL ATTACK instead? hmm...)[/b]. You must discard the top 2 cards of your deck each end phase, or destroy this card [b](and we FINALLY find a slightly-less-than-okay drawback!)[/b].

this gets a rating of 5/10 from me.

[Hila Ⅰ]

Firstly I know the name is crap, I rushed it.
For the effect u wud have already had to give up alot of reasonable monsters to summon it so it will be slightly OP'd and by ATK and DEF i did mean original so thats my bad.
Also the winged dragon of Ra is a [b]Dragon[/b] so it is technically a dragon embodieng ra not ra itself. Shame u just homed in on the bad points of 1 card but thanx 4 the critisicm i appreciate it

[Inferno I20]

[u]Anubis[/u]
As long as this card is face up on your side of the field[b],[/b] all your cards that are sent to the graveyard are returned to the bottom of your deck. By [b]T[/b]ributing this [b]card[/b] and [b]1[/b] other monster [b]you control[/b], you can [b]S[/b]pecial [b]S[/b]ummon [b]1 "God"[/b] monster from your [b]D[/b]eck. You must [b]T[/b]ribute 1 monster [b]during your End Phase[/b]. [b]If you do not, destroy this card.[/b][/i] [/b]

[u]Horus[/u]
This card can not be normal summoned or set. This card can only be [b]Special Summoned[/b] by [b]T[/b]ributing [b]2[/b] level 4 or lower monsters [b]you control[/b]. Once per turn[b],[/b] [b]you can discard 2 cards in your hand to change the battle positions of all face-up monsters your opponent control[/b]. You must [b]T[/b]ribute 1 monster [b]during your End Phase[/b]. [b]If you do not, destroy this card.[/b][/i] [/b]

[u]Seth[/u]
[b]This card gains 300 ATK[/b] for [b]each[/b] other [b]monster you control[/b]. Once per turn[b],[/b] you can discard 2 cards from your hand to the graveyard to destroy all face[b]-[/b]down monsters on the field. You must [b]T[/b]ribute 1 monster [b]during your End Phase[/b]. [b]If you do not, destroy this card.[/b]

[u]Khepri[/u]
Once per turn[b], you can pay 2000 Life Points[/b] to remove all monsters on the field from play[b],[/b] except this card. [b]During your opponent's next Standby Phase, return all monsters removed by this effect to their original positions.[/b] You must [b]T[/b]ribute 1 monster [b]during your End Phase[/b]. [b]If you do not, destroy this card.[/b]

[u]Sekhmet[/u]
[b]This card can attack all monsters your opponent controls once each.[/b] [b]You can pay 1000 Life Points to have this card gain 1000 ATK and DEF.[/b] [b]If you control another face-up "God" monster, this card cannot be selected as an attack target.[/b] You must [b]T[/b]ribute 1 monster [b]during your End Phase[/b]. [b]If you do not, destroy this card.[/b]

[u]Ra[/u]
This card cannot be [b]N[/b]ormal [b]S[/b]ummoned or[b] S[/b]et. This card can only be [b]S[/b]pecial [b]S[/b]ummoned by [b]T[/b]ributing 5 face[b]-[/b]up [b]"God"[/b] monsters [b]you control[/b]. Once per turn, you can pay 1000 Life Points to destroy all monsters with a combined ATK and DEF less than the ATK of this card. [b]During your End Phase, you must discard the top 2 cards of your deck. If you do not, destroy this card.[/b]

[u]Ammut[/u]
As long as this card is face up[b],[/b] [b]you[/b] do not have to Tribute monsters [b]during your End Phase[/b] to keep "God" monsters on the field. If this card [b]would[/b] be destroyed, you can discard 2 cards from your hand [b]instead[/b].


There you go, all correctly edited. If not, they are close to it.
A very good drawback, dangerous to keep many out
I would make Ammut super weak, say 0 ATK 0 DEF or 500 ATK or 500 DEF so it balances them out.
Another advice is to change the archetype "God". God just seems to generic, you can do "Divinity", "Lord", "King". You can also do different languages.

Personally I like Divinity or King
Hope this helped

[Hila Ⅰ]

thanx! the only reason i made amut strong for its level is because of its appearance and what it actually was there for in egyptian religion but i do like the different archtype names thanx a lot