jak cards

[Eddie \m/]

these are some of my jak cards.please correct my OCG,im a bigginer so please rate and tell me if theres somthing wrong:

[spoiler=Dark Jak][img]http://img3.imageshack.us/img3/5992/188075.jpg[/img][/spoiler]

lore:"dark eco"+"jak"+"metalhead"

During each Standby Phase,increase this card's ATK and DEF by 3000

[spoiler=Metalhead][img]http://img831.imageshack.us/img831/9498/188075y.jpg[/img][/spoiler]

[spoiler=Toon Dark Jak][img]http://img827.imageshack.us/img827/2590/188075a.jpg[/img][/spoiler]

lore:This card can only be summoned by tributing dark jak.If "toon world" is not on the Field,destroy this card.

[spoiler=Erol][img]http://img832.imageshack.us/img832/8906/188075dy.jpg[/img][/spoiler]

lore:1 Tuner+1 or more non-Tuner monsters

[spoiler=Erol/Assault Mode][img]http://img831.imageshack.us/img831/637/188075u.jpg[/img][/spoiler]

lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except with its own effect or with "Assault Mode Activate". You can Tribute this card to negate the activation of a Spell Card and destroy all card's on your opponent's side of the field. If you destroy your opponent's cards this way, you can Special Summon this card from your Graveyard during the End Phase. When this card on the field is destroyed, you can Special Summon 1 "erol" from your Graveyard.

[spoiler=Jak][img]http://img830.imageshack.us/img830/5992/188075.jpg[/img][/spoiler]

[spoiler=toon light Jak][img]http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/1724/188075n.jpg[/img][/spoiler]

lore:This card can only be summoned by Tributing "light jak".If "toon world" is not on the field,destroy this card.

[Eddie \m/]

more cards will be coming

[♠>:Stick-Man:<♠]

First off, you need practice in OCG which will develop over time (trust me), better pictures for the cards, and try more interesting effects, also hardly anyone on YCM likes vanilla monsters. 4'

[bigdrummerboi13]

hey. so i definatly made jak cards first and i have over 50 so you should not copy me if you did. im sure you looked at mine first.

[Ieyasu Tokugawa]

Dark Jak is too powerful, during your opponent's Stanby phase, he's a 3300 killing machine, then your turn he becomes a 6300 destroyer.

For dark toon jack, how do we get his attack?

Erol is pointless, without any kind of effect.

Also, assault mode monsters are generally 2 levels higher than the original and have 500 more attack points as well as an upgraded effect. Besides that, he's basically an Uber Stardust.

Jack is boring as a vanilla. If your going to do vanillas, incclude some support.

Also, you have to capitalize the types the cards are, the cardmaker doesn't do it for you.

[bigdrummerboi13]

sorry for the mean comment earlier. thanks for rating my cards high. some suggestions are that you should make 99% of your monster cards effect monsters and the other 1% ritual or fusion. also i think you could have made better effects for your cards. do some research on each character including the metal heads at jak and daxter wikia. its all about jak and daxter and provides good info. i used it to make my cards. be sure to look at more of my upcoming posts

by the way errol assault mode is the wrong name for him. its cyber errol. in case you wanted to know

[Eddie \m/]

ok thanks guys,i will do the corrections later

[lewis atherton]

Ok i have looked at all your cards some are far too underpowered and Toon dark jack doesn't make sence, their is no way of finding out its atc or def clearly you have tried something different though and you are a newbie so 5/10 and please keep trying, hope to see more of your creativity soon.