Skirts' (formerly Chigsweef) Synchro Card. Vampirism

[Skirts]

[center] Hey guys, you probably won't know me because I got a name change. I was formerly Chigsweef. Anyways. I decided to make a card, and this is my first one in a long time, so don't be too harsh. ; D Let me know what you think of it. Any OCG fixes would be cool, and any idea fixes, etc is appreciated.

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[b]Lore: [/b][i]1 Tuner + 1 or more non Fiend-Tuner monsters
When this card is Synchro Summoned place it in your Spell and Trap card zone. During each of your opponents Standby Phases, inflict 300 points of damage to you and your opponents Life Points. This card's attack is equal to the amount of damage inflicted (max 2500). On the 4th turn place this card in your Monster zone. When this card is destroyed by an opponents card effect, discard your hand to the Graveyard and remove this card from play[/i].[/spoiler] [/center]

[Skirts]

Oh jeez. C'mon people, it's been hours and no critiquing ? D:

[Skirts]

Bump ? oO

[.Starrk]

OCG: Lore: 1 Tuner + 1 or more non Fiend-Tuner monsters
When this card is Synchro Summoned[b],[/b] place it in your Spell and Trap card zone. During each of your opponents Standby Phases, inflict 300 points of damage to you and your opponents Life Points. This card's [b]ATK[/b] is equal to the amount of damage inflicted (max 2500). On the 4th turn place this card in your Monster [b]Card[/b] zone. When this card is destroyed by an opponents card effect, discard your hand to the Graveyard and remove this card from play.


I don't see the point in having this Synchro placed in the Spell or Trap zone.

In fact, it would be better if you took out the whole first sentence.

I don't see the point of having to having the limit the ATK of this card.


7.9/10

^^

[Big Lez]

[quote name='Coyote Starrk' timestamp='1289757466' post='4784346']
OCG: Lore: 1 Tuner + 1 or more non Fiend-Tuner monsters
When this card is Synchro Summoned[b],[/b] place it in your Spell and Trap [b][color="#FF0000"]C[/color][/b]ard [b][color="#FF0000"]Z[/color][/b]one. During each of your opponents Standby Phases, inflict 300 [s]points of[/s] damage to you and your opponents Life Points. This card's [b]ATK[/b] is equal to the amount of damage inflicted (max 2500). [s]On[/s]During the 4th turn place this card in your Monster [b]Card[/b] [color="#FF0000"][b]Z[/b][/color]one. When this card is destroyed by an opponent's card effect, discard your hand to the Graveyard and remove this card from play.


I don't see the point in having this Synchro placed in the Spell or Trap zone.

In fact, it would be better if you took out the whole first sentence.

I don't see the point of having to having the limit the ATK of this card.


7.9/10

^^
[/quote]
red corrections = mine ^^
still errors. But useless to correct them


Ehm.
ATK equal to the damage "THAT CARD" inflicted?
if yes. it would never be 2500. max. 900 (- 1 standbyphase during turn you summoned that..)
During the 4th turn?? - so what if you summon that monster in the 5th turn?..you mean 4th turn since that monster is on the field, right? - then add that
And the ATK increased by an amount equal to the damage inflicted due to this card's effect - (then 2500 would be possible). BTW, "(max 2500) isnt necessary - that card could never gain more, by this effect.

to many errors

[.Starrk]

[quote name='Dr.Gentle' timestamp='1289757948' post='4784373']
red corrections = mine ^^
still errors. But useless to correct them

[/quote]


Whoops. Missed those. Oh well you got it.

[danieldoo]

Shouldn't it be 1 or more Non-Tuner Fiend monster, not 1 or more non Fiend-Tuner monsters?

[Skirts]

Okay, thanks guys !