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Teh ZWOOTS

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This card can only be activated when your opponent has 1 monster Type occupying all 5 Monster Card slots on his/her side of the Field. As long as this card is face-up on your side of the Field, all monsters of that Type will treated as Zombie-Type monsters. Also, all Zombie-Type monsters will lose 500 ATK and DEF. Once per turn, during your opponent's Draw Phase, you can and must roll a 6 die. If the result is 1-2, inflict 100 points of damage to your and your opponent's Life Points for each Zombie-Type monster in his/her own respective side of the Field. If the result is 3-4, have your opponent select 1 Zombie-Type monster on his side of the Field, and destroy it. If the result is 5-6, destroy all Zombie-Type monsters on the Field. If, at the beginning of your Battle Phase, your opponent does not have any Zombie-Type monsters on his/her side of the Field, destroy this card.

Looking for [b]constructive[/b] criticism, specifically on OCG. I am hoping to refresh my familiarity with OCG before I make any more cards for this set.
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[quote name='LiAM' timestamp='1291495865' post='4829238']
What else is there to comment on?

You made a weak Normal monster.

Effects would help the card.
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So, basically, you're telling me that normal monsters are boring? That's really helpful. Maybe, just maybe, you could give advice on how to make the description more captivating?
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[quote name='LiAM' timestamp='1291496527' post='4829268']
My opinion is that Normal monsters are boring.

I'm judging it on terms of playability, not story-telling.

Nothing wrong with Normal monsters, as long as they're strong or within a set...
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If that is your philosophy, wouldn't you say that your posting here is a bit pointless?
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I would say that your post here would be a bit pointless if you're going to respond like that.

People want to see new and cool effects with unique features that could possibly become playable.
They don't want to see weak normal monsters without any support.
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[quote name='LiAM' timestamp='1291497222' post='4829296']
I would say that your post here would be a bit pointless if you're going to respond like that.

People want to see new and cool effects with unique features that could possibly become playable.
They don't want to see weak normal monsters without any support.
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And I assume you speak for everyone in YCM? Back when I posted here daily, I knew plenty of people who appreciated vanillas for what they are.
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[quote name='LiAM' timestamp='1291497696' post='4829313']
That would be the vanilla society.

Though they are bland and pointless unless you do something with it.
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You have restated that [b]opinion[/b] in nearly every post you have made here. So far, you've only advised me to make it an effect monster, or to post it inside of a set, both contradictory to the point of posting this. I made it a vanilla because I want practice with vanilla monsters. I posted a single card in this thread because I have not made any other cards for this set. You obviously don't know how to rate a vanilla monster, so you should not be rating a vanilla monster. That is all I am saying.
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[quote name='jad2342' timestamp='1291499398' post='4829409']
what he's getting at is, make a set of these and they won't be so boring... see I've started doing the same thing... started with one vanilla and I thought about making a set and its slowly getting more popular since they are a vanilla SET
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Good for you. I just want a little critique on the aspects of this [b]one[/b] vanilla monster. I [b]don't[/b] want close-minded statements on how I should present the monster, and I don't want lectures detailing why effect monsters are better than vanilla monsters.
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[quote name='Teh ZWOOTS' timestamp='1291499855' post='4829437']
Good for you. I just want a little critique on the aspects of this [b]one[/b] vanilla monster. I [b]don't[/b] want close-minded statements on how I should present the monster, and I don't want lectures detailing why effect monsters are better than vanilla monsters.
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Then don't post it.
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[quote name='Teh ZWOOTS' timestamp='1291500362' post='4829460']
Why? Because [b]you[/b] don't have the writing skills to offer constructive criticism? No, thank you; I think I'll wait for somebody who does.
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I am fully well capable of writing skills, thank you.

I offered criticism of which everyone else would have said.

Kthnxbi.
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[quote name='jad2342' timestamp='1291502990' post='4829541']
I never said anything about disliking vanillas... ok how's this? I'd like to see more of this [color="#FF0000"][size="5"][b]possible[/b][/size][/color] set
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I wasn't referring to you when I said that specifically. Also, don't get me wrong, I am not suggesting that I want mindless praise. In the nutshell, all I want is to improve. Is that really to much to ask for?

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Changed original post.
To all possible new poster: Disregard this post and all posts before it.
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Not at all in fact if you want to make it more captivating Let me give you these tips:
1.Try not to make it look like an opinion is being said like for example saying Nay, at the beginning of a sentence.
2.Your story was kind of in a way "Out of sorts" it didnt make sense. Although i have no right to say this why dont try these examples if not its okay.

EX1. Intelligent Insectoid aliens who from losing their home-world invade other planets and steal all of their resources in an effort to survive.
EX2.A lost race of aliens who hunt down species who look different from them in an attempt to become the only race on their planet.

Thats my opinion.
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[quote name='tonymann' timestamp='1291504583' post='4829600']
Not at all in fact if you want to make it more captivating Let me give you these tips:
1.Try not to make it look like an opinion is being said like for example saying Nay, at the beginning of a sentence.
2.Your story was kind of in a way "Out of sorts" it didnt make sense. Although i have no right to say this why dont try these examples if not its okay.

EX1. Intelligent Insectoid aliens who from losing their home-world invade other planets and steal all of their resources in an effort to survive.
EX2.A lost race of aliens who hunt down species who look different from them in an attempt to become the only race on their planet.

Thats my opinion.
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I don't exactly understand the logic behind your statements, but I am hysterically grateful that I actually got some advice for my vanilla. I'll do my best to follow your advice, the best I can, next time I make a vanilla.


[quote name='jad2342' timestamp='1291504647' post='4829608']
OCG seems fine to me, except idk bout that first sentence...
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Honestly, I suspect the first sentence to be quite illiterate in terms of OCG, too. I haven't corrected it simply because I have no idea how to.
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