Fire Pheonix cards

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Hi guys here is my very first cards plz comment!





Monster


TheGoldenFlarePheonix

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[Face McShooty]

there's nothing here.... please read how to post cards...

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Thanks alot i apreciate it:)

[Teh ZWOOTS]

Hate to say it buddy, but this card ain't too hot.
1. Vanilla(normal) monster with twelve stars are just kind of irritating.
2. Spelling errors and Vanilla text just don't make a good mix. Sorry to be a d*** about this, but it does make Vanillas less pleasurable to read.
3. Spaces, please. Put spaces in titles, circulation, and type.
4. The entire world will probably disagree with me on this, but, the second part of a set ID should be formated like this:
EN00X
X is equal the number of the card in the set.[s] For example, if this card was the first in the set, it would be EN001. Tenth would be EN010. Hundredth would be EN100.[/s]
5. Use some more compelling descriptive language. You know those really vivid parts in a book? Write it like that.
2/10
Sorry, mate. I wish you the best luck in the future, though. Remember: Around here, the best trait a card maker can have is persistence. Never give up and you'll make to the top.

[Face McShooty]

his description is from an Egyptian God, but idk which one and no the first card in a set is EN000

[Teh ZWOOTS]

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his description is from an Egyptian God, but idk which one and no the first card in a set is EN000
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That's a bit tedious, isn't it? Either way, the ENXXX format is proper.

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thanks for all your honest comments. i will take them on board and update my card:)
i will take all tips onboard.

[quote name='Teh ZWOOTS' timestamp='1291589595' post='4832823']
Hate to say it buddy, but this card ain't too hot.
1. Vanilla(normal) monster with twelve stars are just kind of irritating.
2. Spelling errors and Vanilla text just don't make a good mix. Sorry to be a d*** about this, but it does make Vanillas less pleasurable to read.
3. Spaces, please. Put spaces in titles, circulation, and type.
4. The entire world will probably disagree with me on this, but, the second part of a set ID should be formated like this:
EN00X
X is equal the number of the card in the set.[s] For example, if this card was the first in the set, it would be EN001. Tenth would be EN010. Hundredth would be EN100.[/s]
5. Use some more compelling descriptive language. You know those really vivid parts in a book? Write it like that.
2/10
Sorry, mate. I wish you the best luck in the future, though. Remember: Around here, the best trait a card maker can have is persistence. Never give up and you'll make to the top.
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thanks for the info and tips ill try to improve my card:]

Note: All the previouse comments are from a different version of the card.