Ridgen Posted December 8, 2010 Report Share Posted December 8, 2010 Would be this: [img]http://img257.imageshack.us/img257/4809/327437f.jpg[/img] It's not much, and I probably failed the OCG... But I want to know what people think of it. Then I'm going to try making a set Or at least, make better cards until I'm ready to attempt a set XP Sorry if there are any grammatical/spelling errors. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Face McShooty Posted December 8, 2010 Report Share Posted December 8, 2010 the only ocg error that i see is instead of saying the name of your monster in the effect just say this monster Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FTW (For The Wynn) Posted December 8, 2010 Report Share Posted December 8, 2010 [quote name='Ridgen' timestamp='1291798405' post='4837555'] Would be this: [img]http://img64.imageshack.us/img64/9348/327437.jpg[/img] It's not much, and I probably failed the OCG... But I want to know what people think of it. Then I'm going to try making a set Or at least, make better cards until I'm ready to attempt a set XP Sorry if there are any grammatical/spelling errors. [/quote] Well, it seems my gut feeling wasn't wrong. You'll be a good new member I think. Anyway, here's the corrected version: This card gains 100 ATK for every WATER monster you control. It's a wee bit too simple to be all that useful, but in the right deck it makes a decent beatstick. Not bad for your first card, keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ridgen Posted December 8, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 8, 2010 Fixed ^^ Thanks for the comments. Working on second card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teh ZWOOTS Posted December 8, 2010 Report Share Posted December 8, 2010 Good for a new member. Simple, but not bad OCG-wise. The card set isn't formatted correctly, a mistake that I finding more and more prevalent. Format it as so: (cardset) - ENXXX XXX represents the number of the card in your set. For example, the first in a card set is EN000; second is EN001. This continues until, I assume, EN999. If this monster gains 100 ATK for every WATER monster on the Field, it itself should not be a WATER monster. Either that, or it should have a clause which states that it does not gain 100 ATK from having itself on the Field. I'm not entirely sure about this, as I'm not as familiar with the rules of OCG as I once was, but I am sure someone (coughcoughjad2342cough) will trot by this message and set me straight. For a long-time member who has had time to create and experiment, I would give a four-out-of-ten, maybe a five-out-of-ten. However, considering this is your first card, I shall be lenient. 7/10 Good picture, by the way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ridgen Posted December 9, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 9, 2010 Fixed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teh ZWOOTS Posted December 9, 2010 Report Share Posted December 9, 2010 [quote name='Ridgen' timestamp='1291879468' post='4839513'] Fixed [/quote] Quotation marks should not be replaced by apostrophes. Other than that, I am happy with the changes. As said, I am not exactly familiar with OCG, but it seems as though the clause you added will not just prevent your card from feeding itself, but prevent it from feeding other Frost Manipulators. Nice work. EDIT: Also, I think you might want to include a comma after "control." It seems grammatically correct, but I am not sure how much actual grammar ties in with OCG. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ridgen Posted December 9, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 9, 2010 Fixed, methinks. Also, the quotation marks are already apostrophes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teh ZWOOTS Posted December 9, 2010 Report Share Posted December 9, 2010 [quote name='Ridgen' timestamp='1291881746' post='4839529'] Fixed, methinks. Also, the quotation marks are already apostrophes. [/quote] Quotation marks should [i]not[/i] be replaced with apostrophes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ridgen Posted December 9, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 9, 2010 Oh. My bad. XP Fixed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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