Rebirth Graveyard Spell Card

[aydane]

here is another spell card i have made, i should make these cards into a set LOL? might need fixing up on the effect

[img]http://img696.imageshack.us/img696/7705/117323o.jpg[/img]

Lore: If a level 5 or lower monster is destroyed by battle, return that monster to its owners Deck after Damage Calculation.

[War Chess]

Your OCG and your RLG(real life grammar) need to be fixed.
But the effect is cool !
8/10

[aydane]

plz point out the parts that need fixing?

[Ieyasu Tokugawa]

[quote name='War Chess' timestamp='1292327875' post='4851546']
Your OCG and your RLG(real life grammar) need to be fixed.
[/quote]

No one cares that much about RLG. OCG however...

My version: If a level 5 or lower monster battles, return that monster to the owners Deck after Damage Calculation.

That's going off of your effect, I would actually say to return it from the field to the Deck, like how Gladiator Beasts say it to prevent abuse of things like Sangan. Still cool though.

[aydane]

i do make good spell cards but i always need help making them sound real thxs for the help

[War Chess]

Now that was fixed, better.

[The Sleeping Dude]

My version of this OCG:[b] If a Level 5 or lower monster battles, return that monster to the owner's Deck after Damage Calculation.[/b]
that should be nice enough

[Ieyasu Tokugawa]

[quote name='War Chess' timestamp='1292333657' post='4851606']
Now that was fixed, better.
[/quote]

I'm sure you could've helped.

Still not sure if it should say from the field to the Graveyard or not to avoid abuse, like your opponent destroying your face-down Sangan, then you get his effect and return it to the deck.

[The Sleeping Dude]

wait a minute so in other words if two monsters battle then they both return to their owners decks?
if so, ocg is wrong

[aydane]

well that card is posted to get better and high rating but i alway try to keep the cards effect close to the original

[quote name='ks2ill34' timestamp='1292333959' post='4851618']
wait a minute so in other words if two monsters battle then they both return to their owners decks?
if so, ocg is wrong
[/quote]

no only the destroyed monster is sent back

[The Sleeping Dude]

ok then this should be the ocg

If a Level 5 or lower monster [s]battles[/s] [b]is destroyed by battle[/b], return that monster to [s]the[/s] [b]its[/b] owner's Deck after Damage Calculation.

thats all

[aydane]

ok fixed