Des ＨＥＲＯ Posted December 28, 2010 Report Share Posted December 28, 2010 OK, Im planning on the Gym Leader app, but could the character be the 1st Gym Leader or 3rd Gym Leader (If late). Whens chapter 3 going to be ready ? I was asking if I could make an Rock Type Gym Leader, just in case Derrick's father was not. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Squidward Tentacles Posted December 29, 2010 Report Share Posted December 29, 2010 Name: Kiba Estrellas Age: 13 Personality: Kind and caring, protects his friends at all costs, very smart. Cool and calculating. Handsome. An excellent strategist, and is very quick. He has captured a bunch of Pokemon. appearance: 5'6", wears an electric blue shirt, blue jeans, green eyes, wears glasses.Somewhat muscular, often has a bright smile. Has long brown hair. Main Pokemon: Espeon Rest of Team: Luxray, Pidgeot, Heracross, Nidoking, Gabite Trainer Type: Normal (Maybe travels with the main character) Fang Estrellas Age: 15 Personality: Much like Kiba, he is kind and caring, cool and calculating, extremely smart. Much faster than most people. Captured much more Pokemon, better strategist. Appearance: 5'9", wears light lavender shirt, light lavender eyes, blue jeans, has short blonde hair. Main Pokemon: Nidoking Rest of Team: Muk,Nidoqueen, Venusaur, Venomoth, Drapion Trainer Type: Gym Leader Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted December 31, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2010 [quote name='Sonic Paladin' timestamp='1293581023' post='4890998'] Name: Kiba Estrellas Age: 13 Personality: Kind and caring, protects his friends at all costs, very smart. Cool and calculating. Handsome. An excellent strategist, and is very quick. He has captured a bunch of Pokemon. appearance: 5'6", wears an electric blue shirt, blue jeans, green eyes, wears glasses.Somewhat muscular, often has a bright smile. Has long brown hair. Main Pokemon: Espeon Rest of Team: Luxray, Pidgeot, Heracross, Nidoking, Gabite Trainer Type: Normal (Maybe travels with the main character) Fang Estrellas Age: 15 Personality: Much like Kiba, he is kind and caring, cool and calculating, extremely smart. Much faster than most people. Captured much more Pokemon, better strategist. Appearance: 5'9", wears light lavender shirt, light lavender eyes, blue jeans, has short blonde hair. Main Pokemon: Nidoking Rest of Team: Muk,Nidoqueen, Venusaur, Venomoth, Drapion there both accepted kiba will travel and fang will be the 3rd gym leader Trainer Type: Gym Leader [/quote][quote name='destruction hero' timestamp='1293578033' post='4890885'] OK, Im planning on the Gym Leader app, but could the character be the 1st Gym Leader or 3rd Gym Leader (If late). Whens chapter 3 going to be ready ? I was asking if I could make an Rock Type Gym Leader, just in case Derrick's father was not. [/quote] ok and he'll be the 1st gym leader and chapter 3 will be out around saturday or sunday because i havent had time my dad forgot to pay the internet and he barely paid it today[quote name='monkeylife2' timestamp='1293576071' post='4890796'] Awesome, but can you please keep porygon-z. It's your story so if you don't want ok but I would appreciate it if you keep it. Also you still haven't said yes or no to this guy. Name: Natsu Lagoon Age:16 Personality:Shy but likes to help his friends. He really doesn't have people skills, but he does have pokemon skills. Appearence: He is 5.6. He has long brown hair that covers his eyes. He wears blue jeans with a light blue t-shirt bio:He comes from a poor family and wishes to be the best of the best so the fame could hopefully bring his family money, but his shyness and lack of people skills hold him back. His first pokemon was Castform...well he grew up with it because Castform lived around the area he grew up in. He actually doesn't own castform because he never really caught it because there was no need to. Main Pokemon:Castform Rest of the team:Absol, Houndoom, Mighteyana, Luxray Type:Trainer [/quote] sure i'll put porygon z and hes accepted Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Des ＨＥＲＯ Posted January 1, 2011 Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 Heres my Application, sorry it is quite short compared to my last. [spoiler=My Application #2] [b]Name:[/b] Andrew Mogan [b]Age[/b]: 29 [b]Personality[/b]: He is mainly an positive excited Gym Leader, even when hes in an tough time. He is rarely depressed and he compliments his Opponents strategy and his Pokemon. He from time to time would relax and clear his mind to form strategies. [b]Bio[/b]: He was born in (Whatever the town or city is called). He has infact lived most of his life in (the town or city). His father was the previous Gym Leader, he felt inspired to capture Pokemon found nearby up in the mountains. One day, he found an strange Pokemon that was attacked by an evolved form of it. That Pokemon decided to follow him and eventually he captured it. With the Pokemon captured, he managed to capture a Onix and a Geodude. He soon ascended up the ranks and became the first Gym Leader in his hometown. [b]Appearance[/b]: He is an young muscular hiker. He has an small brown beard and an short black hair. His eyes are brown. He wears an large helmet and carries an rope on his left arm. He wears a white shirt and brown trousers. [b]Main Pokemon[/b]: an Gunia Region Pokemon of your choice (Rock/Steel) [b]Rest of Team[/b]: Onix and Geodude (Fairly common for an Rock Type Gym. You don't need to replace them since they are in every Pokedex, so they should be in the Gunia Pokedex) [b]Trainer Type[/b]: 1st Gym Leader [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted January 1, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 1, 2011 [quote name='destruction hero' timestamp='1293911333' post='4903780'] Heres my Application, sorry it is quite short compared to my last. [spoiler=My Application #2] [b]Name:[/b] Andrew Mogan [b]Age[/b]: 29 [b]Personality[/b]: He is mainly an positive excited Gym Leader, even when hes in an tough time. He is rarely depressed and he compliments his Opponents strategy and his Pokemon. He from time to time would relax and clear his mind to form strategies. [b]Bio[/b]: He was born in (Whatever the town or city is called). He has infact lived most of his life in (the town or city). His father was the previous Gym Leader, he felt inspired to capture Pokemon found nearby up in the mountains. One day, he found an strange Pokemon that was attacked by an evolved form of it. That Pokemon decided to follow him and eventually he captured it. With the Pokemon captured, he managed to capture a Onix and a Geodude. He soon ascended up the ranks and became the first Gym Leader in his hometown. [b]Appearance[/b]: He is an young muscular hiker. He has an small brown beard and an short black hair. His eyes are brown. He wears an large helmet and carries an rope on his left arm. He wears a white shirt and brown trousers. [b]Main Pokemon[/b]: an Gunia Region Pokemon of your choice (Rock/Steel) [b]Rest of Team[/b]: Onix and Geodude (Fairly common for an Rock Type Gym. You don't need to replace them since they are in every Pokedex, so they should be in the Gunia Pokedex) [b]Trainer Type[/b]: 1st Gym Leader [/spoiler] [/quote] accepted Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I am Fate. Embrace me. Posted January 8, 2011 Report Share Posted January 8, 2011 Bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Squidward Tentacles Posted January 8, 2011 Report Share Posted January 8, 2011 i like chapter 3. can't wait for the next one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted January 9, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 9, 2011 bump chapter 4 will be up probably tomorrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I am Fate. Embrace me. Posted January 9, 2011 Report Share Posted January 9, 2011 Cool. I expect more of Phoenix soon. And maybe every once in a while, can Draco accompany Phoenix? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted January 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2011 sorry people ive been to busy with final exams but i promise ill post ip chapter 4 tomorrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Number: Card Master Posted January 15, 2011 Report Share Posted January 15, 2011 Hey this Fan Fic is cool I have made one for the last gym leader (If you make it go all the way) Name: James Grey Age: 18 Personality: Tough powerful apponent. Always calculating stratgeys in his head. Will never turn down a battle Bio: He was born in Blackthorn City in Jhoto. He has been studing Dragons in Dragon's Den since he was a little kid. After that he traveled the world researching Dragon's. He has met all of the Best Dragon users. He has collected pokemon from all the reigon's to craft his team. Has finally settled down as the Gym Leader of (whatever city the final gym will be at). Though he is always training so he can become strong enough to beat the Champion. Appearance: He is a young man. He has long blonde hair. Shining Blue eyes. Where's Summer based clothes. Main Pokemon: Dragonite Rest of Team: Salmence, Grachomp, Kingdra, Sazandora, (A dragon Pokemon From this Region) Trainer Type: Last Gym Leader Also i would like to make a Elite Four member if thats cool And you should also put a Accepted Apps section in your post Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted January 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2011 [quote name='CardMaster24' timestamp='1295072958' post='4935379'] Hey this Fan Fic is cool I have made one for the last gym leader (If you make it go all the way) Name: James Grey Age: 18 Personality: Tough powerful apponent. Always calculating stratgeys in his head. Will never turn down a battle Bio: He was born in Blackthorn City in Jhoto. He has been studing Dragons in Dragon's Den since he was a little kid. After that he traveled the world researching Dragon's. He has met all of the Best Dragon users. He has collected pokemon from all the reigon's to craft his team. Has finally settled down as the Gym Leader of (whatever city the final gym will be at). Though he is always training so he can become strong enough to beat the Champion. Appearance: He is a young man. He has long blonde hair. Shining Blue eyes. Where's Summer based clothes. Main Pokemon: Dragonite Rest of Team: Salmence, Grachomp, Kingdra, Sazandora, (A dragon Pokemon From this Region) Trainer Type: Last Gym Leader Also i would like to make a Elite Four member if thats cool And you should also put a Accepted Apps section in your post [/quote] accepted and thanks and sure you can make an elite four Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supreme Gamesmaster Posted January 15, 2011 Report Share Posted January 15, 2011 Um. Um. ... Stop. Just stop writing this now before I have to actually say how awful the writing is in this. It's really bad. Really, really bad. I can assume you're prepubescent since my prepubescent sister is a better author than this. The syntax is a nightmare. The descriptions are awful. The characters are two-dimensional caricatures and the plot is painfully lazy (though I had to struggle through the reading because your grammar is far worse than most of the non-native English speakers' stories I've read). Your profile and 'schedule' suggest you're actually a year older than me, though you write like you're half my age, so I don't feel too horrible about reviewing this. But honestly, it's so bad I still hesitated to post this. Just stop writing for now and lrn2english, as they say here on the Interwebz. Come back after reading a novel or twenty. I mean, really. There's zero evidence of effort anywhere in this fic. You could at least try. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted January 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2011 chapter 4 is up[quote name='Supreme Gamesmaster' timestamp='1295120843' post='4936426'] Um. Um. ... Stop. Just stop writing this now before I have to actually say how awful the writing is in this. It's really bad. Really, really bad. I can assume you're prepubescent since my prepubescent sister is a better author than this. The syntax is a nightmare. The descriptions are awful. The characters are two-dimensional caricatures and the plot is painfully lazy (though I had to struggle through the reading because your grammar is far worse than most of the non-native English speakers' stories I've read). Your profile and 'schedule' suggest you're actually a year older than me, though you write like you're half my age, so I don't feel too horrible about reviewing this. But honestly, it's so bad I still hesitated to post this. Just stop writing for now and lrn2english, as they say here on the Interwebz. Come back after reading a novel or twenty. I mean, really. There's zero evidence of effort anywhere in this fic. You could at least try. [/quote] well sorry i try my best but i havent written stories that much ok Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Number: Card Master Posted January 16, 2011 Report Share Posted January 16, 2011 Here is a Elite Four Name: Jason Grey Age: 18 Personality: Laid back though very powerful. Dosen't have a strategy's planned just comes up with them as he goes. Will never turn down a battle Bio: He is the identical Twin brother of James. He was born in Blackthorn City in Jhoto. He has been studing Ice types in Ice Path Den since he was a little kid. His brother alway's wished he could beat him though because of the type diffrence he never could. After that he traveled the world researching Ice Type's while his brother Researched Dragon's. He has met all of the Best Ice Type users. He has collected pokemon from all the reigon's to craft his team. He has made it into the elite four of this reigon. He has been waiting for his brother to challenge. Appearance: He is a young man. He has shorter hair than his brother. Shining Blue eyes. Where's Winter based clothes(because he is always at Ice Cold Places). Main Pokemon: Mamoswine Rest of Team: Glalie, Delibird, Tsunbear, Jynx, (Ice type from this reigon) Trainer Type: Last Elite Four And a Rival Name: Jasmine Grey Age: 13 Personality: Fighter, Always looking for a challenge. Always wanting to beat her brother's. Burning with Compassion. Bio: She is the younger sister of Jason and James. She was born in Blackthorn City in Jhoto. She has always loved to play with fire. Almost burnt down her parents house. She wishes she could beat her brother's. When she was 11 she ran away from home and travelled the world searching for fire types. She has collected pokemon from all the reigon's to craft his team. She now wishes to become the champion of this region to prove that she is better than her brothers. Appearance: She is a girl. She has long blonde hair. Shining Blue eyes. Where's Sumer based clothes(because he is always at boling Places). Main Pokemon: At the present time it is Cyndaquil though it will evolve into Typhlosion by the end Rest of Team: Magby (will evolve into Magmortar), Torkoal, Vulpix (will evolve into Ninetales), Darumakka(will evolve into Darmanitan), (Fire type from this reigon) Trainer Type: Rival Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted January 16, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 16, 2011 all accepted Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cthonian Posted January 16, 2011 Report Share Posted January 16, 2011 I know that I haven't posted in a while, but I really like the story and can't wait for my character to appear. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Piercer of the Heavens Posted January 16, 2011 Report Share Posted January 16, 2011 So far I like the story, even if I haven't commented. I've been busy but yeah... it's a good story so far. can't wait till the next Ch. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I am Fate. Embrace me. Posted January 24, 2011 Report Share Posted January 24, 2011 bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I am Fate. Embrace me. Posted January 29, 2011 Report Share Posted January 29, 2011 BUMP. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted January 29, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 29, 2011 guts just so you know im going on vacation for 3 days so if i get internet ill work on the story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I am Fate. Embrace me. Posted February 2, 2011 Report Share Posted February 2, 2011 bump. while Dark is gone, I can't let his fanfic die! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beefman Posted February 2, 2011 Report Share Posted February 2, 2011 After watching the original pokemon, this is already unoriginal. Also, you should really have better grammar. I can't read a single sentence without finding, like, 3 errors. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheDarkKingBringerOfDark Posted February 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 3, 2011 [quote name='I am Fate. Embrace me.' timestamp='1296612529' post='4980251'] bump. while Dark is gone, I can't let his fanfic die! [/quote] thanks im back now i guess ill post chapter 5 tomorrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I am Fate. Embrace me. Posted February 6, 2011 Report Share Posted February 6, 2011 bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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