Just a random single- Overtarch of Misery

[Lord Doransk]

Just a single I made

[img]http://img13.imageshack.us/img13/4692/317513l.jpg[/img]

Please comment- this one was to try and perfect my OCG, so point out any and all mistakes!

[seattleite]

since you've asked for them, OCG fixes -


ATK, not ATK points

..that's all


The card is creative. It's slower but that's a good thing because it has a powerful effect, able to get massive ATK. I would, however, make the ATK 0, since you usually only use "?" when it's ATK will change when it's summoned.

9/10

[Manpole]

The only thing I noticed that might need changed is "This card cannot be destroyed by battle if it has ATK points less than 2000." change that too...
[b]"This card cannot be destroyed by battle if its ATK is 2000 points or less."[/b] - Fix

Overall the card is pretty cool and it isn't too easy to summon because it takes 5 monsters from the Graveyard. The only thing I might change would be not being able to be destroyed unless its ATK is over 2000, maybe change that effect too something like...
[b]"Negate any attacks that target this card until your opponents 2nd End Phase after this card was successfully Summoned."[/b]

Overall the card is pretty cool as is, but personally I think it would be a little better by changing its effect to what I have posted.
(Also, people may not be replying because you didn't post this cards lore, and its text is a little small. Post its lore beneath the card for more replies)


Edit: Also, seattleite is right, make this cards ATK 0.

[Killerdeathman101]

[quote name='Lord Doransk' timestamp='1292939389' post='4870495']
Just a single I made

[img]http://img13.imageshack.us/img13/4692/317513l.jpg[/img]

Please comment- this one was to try and perfect my OCG, so point out any and all mistakes!
[/quote]

Hey, how do i post my cards.

[seattleite]

[quote name='Killerdeathman101' timestamp='1292982434' post='4872325']
Hey, how do i post my cards.
[/quote]

ask in questions & help plz.