YuGiOh 'Body' Deck.

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Concept: Cool cards, I like the them. Maybe a little more swarming effects. I think "Back Trough Time" is overpowered. 7/10
Pictures: I like them, except "time keeper". "Frantic Release" has an awesome picture! 9/10
OCG: Some little mistakes, but good. 8/10
Overall rating: 8/10
Extra: Just an idea, but I would set lores.

OCG correction:

Love Keeper: If you have more monsters on the field than your opponent, your opponent cannot attack your monsters.

Frantic Release: You can only activate this card when you have 4 Keeper monsters with different card names on the field. Tribute every monster on your side of the field to flip a coin. If you call the toss correctly, Special Summon 1 "Creature of Pure" from your deck or graveyard. If you call the toss wrong, Special Summon 1 "Creature of Corrupt" from your deck or graveyard.

Dangerous defusion: You can only activate this card by discarding 1 "Creature of Pure" or 1 "Creature of Corrupt" from your hand or deck to the graveyard. Increase the DEF of every Keeper monster you control by 500. Your opponent can only attack the monster with the highest DEF on your side of the field.

Creature of Pure: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by the effect of "Frantic Release". This card can only be destroyed as a result of battle with a DARK monster. Once per turn, you can reduce the ATK an DEF of this card to 0 until the end phase of your next turn, to increase your lifepoints by the original ATK of this card.

Creature of Corrupt: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by the effect of "Frantic Release". This card can only be destroyed as a result of battle with a LIGHT monster. Once per turn, you can decrease your lifepoints by up to 2500 points to increase this card's original ATK by the amount of decreased life points.

Me Instead: You can only activate this card when your opponent declares an attack against a keeper monster you control. Change the attack to a direct attack. Your opponent cannot attack again this turn. When this effect resolves, special Keeper monsters from your deck equal to the amount of keeper monsters on your side of the field.

Back Trough Time: You can only activate this card by tributing 1 "Time Keeper" from your side of the field. Your opponent have to return all cards he/she set on his/her previous turns to his/her hand.

[Son of Schmilsson]

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OCG correction:
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There is nothing wrong with what you have written in your "OCG correction", except for your limited use of capital letters when writing "special summon" etc.

When correcting OCG I think you should use correct OCG yourself. Of course, if your intention is to correct the [i]structure[/i] of the OCG you may not need to go about writing out all of the capital letters, but then you should at least make it clear that you are not doing it to the reciever of criticism to avoid confusion.
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As for the set, I think there are too few cards for me to write a full review, so I will just make some quick remarks.

First of all (and this is not about the set itself) I think you should consider the two following things: 1) put your cards in categorized spoilers (Monsters, Spells, Traps) for easier browsing. 2) Write the lore on some of the cards below them, some are hard to read due to the size of the text (ex. “Creature of Corrupt”).

50 percent of the monsters are vanillas, and that is too much for my taste. I hope you are planning on expanding this deck to maybe about thirty cards, but even so, three vanillas is just a bit too much for me.

The art is great, but a bit blurry sometimes, also there is some text on the pictures two of the cards (namely “Love Keeper” and “Dangerous Defusion”) but that is just nitpicking.

Overall you have some original ideas and effects, I would very much like to see a complete set. Great job!

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