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Lore:
Activate only if a Warrior-Type monster you control is destroyed, This card becomes an Equip Card, and equip it to a monster you control, It gains 500 ATK. Destroy this card during your next End Phase after activation.

Fixed OCG

I cant find a better pic look though about 50 pages of ggogle and looked though deviant art as well.
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I like this card. :)

But a Trap Card can't be an Equip Card, right? OK, there is Blast With Chain and Metalmorph, but they not have the equip card symbol. They have a text with: "After activation, this card is treated as an equip card."

And if the effect applies for 1 turn only, I would set this effect:
This card can only be activated when a warrior monster is destroyed. Increase the ATK of 1 monster you control until the end phase.

I would give you a [b]8,5/10[/b], but because it's your first Trap Card, I give you a [b]9/10[/b]. Good job!

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This card can only be activated when a warrior monster is destroyed. Equip this to one of your mosnter this card gains 500 att till the End Phase of your turn.

"When a Warrior-type monster on your side of the field is destroyed, choose a monster on your side of the field. That monster gains 500 ATK until your next End Phase."

Sorry to sound harsh, but your OCG is pretty sloppy, one might even say bad. Your picture is also pretty bland; I can't even tell what exactly it is supposed to be.

3/10
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OK, but is it not a little bit to hard for her first Trap Card? I understand the effect, that is essential.
There are so many cards with a OCG that is not so good. Yesterday I've seen a set with 5 cards in a set of 10 full of mistakes. I've spended an half hour correcting that cards :)

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i understand what the effect means but ocg is bad, pic is bad too.
here's an ocg fix:
Activate only if a Warrior-Type monster you control is destroyed, This card becomes an Equip Card, and equip it to a monster you control, It gains 500 ATK. Destroy this card during your next End Phase after activation.

Actually the last effect is not a equip based since it won't happen ever with the "until" effect so i added "destroy this card" effect instead.

4/10 for first trap try
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