Joey Miles Posted December 24, 2010 Report Share Posted December 24, 2010 To love an Assassin Ok for all of you who like being grammer and spelling nazi's heres an upadated version on this ty microsoft word Also for the record this was originaly rated m for mature but i plan on taking out all the bad scenes. also the man couple is gay in this but theres no worrys anything that you wouldnt like to read is gonna be taken out. if you want the un edited version of things please pm me otherwise dont worry about it Prolouge [spoiler=prolouge]I sat down the principle's office scowling as usual and the principle scowled back at me. It was just another typical Monday in my life unfortunately. It just seemed like I was attracted to trouble and honestly I loved it. "Mr. Miles do you know why you were called into my office today?" The old windbag asked me. You could hear it in his voice the urge to want to keel over and die. Mr. Taylor was almost 89 years old and has been on my case since I first entered this school three years ago. "Why no Mr. Taylor I haven't the foggiest idea why I'm here I was hoping you were gonna tell me that you were retiring." I told him sarcastically. Ok I know its a bit stupid of me but I've been in this office so many times now that you would have thought they would have expelled me.... oh wait they cant. In fact nobody from this school can be expelled. "Rainer you know perfectly damn well why your here!!" He yelled at me. "You nearly shocked that kid to death today in library! Not to mention the sparks caught a few books on fire! If it wasn't for Mrs wholehouser that whole building would have burned down!" He yelled at me. Now if your wondering what I meant earlier when I said no one could be expelled the here's the scoop. I live in a town and go to a school completely populated by humans with super powers. Most of the people that live here are teenagers who cant control their powers. We are sent to S.P.R.C. or the super power rehabilitation center to gain control over our powers. The whole idea started in the 1950's when people with powers started to become a 'menace to society' as they called it. So they gathered us up without our approval and started this. If you gain control over your powers you can live with the rest of the world if you don't you stay till you do. So far its had a 100% pass rate. I plan on breaking that record though. Its not like I can't control my power to produce and manipulate electricity its I'm not allowed back out but that's another story for another time. "Look Mr. Taylor we can argue all day about this but we both know its gonna get us no where so can I just leave all ready." I complained to him. It was true every time I do something I never get punished its just don't do it again. After a few minutes he huffed his breath at me and waved me off. "One of these days Mr. miles you will find a reason to return to that world that rejected you." Mr. Taylor told me making me stop at the door for a second. "I wont ever be able to return you and I both know that." I said quietly as I walked out. I felt my wolf tail sag between my legs and my wolf ears lay low on my head. No I had no chance at ever returning to the real world. I walked to a nearby bathroom and looked in the mirror there. In front of me stood a image I was still getting used to even after 12 years of looking at this form. I stood at 6'9 with a large body builders muscles. My hair was jet black and was grown down to the small of my back. My body had tattoos of lightning all over it some of them hidden by the tight white muscle shirt I wore. My wolf ears stood in my ear pricked and I looked at my eyes i saw the same sight I knew that I would see or the rest of my life. The glowing garnet red eyes begging to kill. I punched the mirror shattering it into a million shards my hand not even scratched by the glass..........I wont ever be able to return because unlike the others in this school I'm a half demon. Something no one will accept.[/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted December 24, 2010 Report Share Posted December 24, 2010 I'm dyslexic and my spellchecker is "down" (whatever that's supposed to mean) and I don't feel like waiting to get a working spellchecker or asking someone to proofread this, so I'm just going to throw some illegible nonsense up on the internet instead of making the slightest effort to make it readable. Fortunately, it's just boring generic self-fanservice, so nobody cares. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joey Miles Posted December 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 24, 2010 thank you agian crab helmet. look my spell checker is mircosoft word and i need to get a new version of it. as for getting someone to check it no one will and being dislexica mean I CANNOT SPELL! i actually have a problem with my brain that messes with the phonetics of words. so give me a break if you dont like it then just tell me what you didnt like not about my spelling because i consider that a blow bellow the belt. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted December 25, 2010 Report Share Posted December 25, 2010 [url]http://www.spellcheck.net/speller/[/url] Hey, look. Online spellchecker. USE IT. :'D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joey Miles Posted December 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 25, 2010 Thanks anyone else wanna make a comment about the spelling. look if an online spell checker was usable i would use it but i am currently posting things from a wii so give me a break. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted December 25, 2010 Report Share Posted December 25, 2010 Most people, upon finding that they have a flat tire, would change the tire so they could drive normally. You would slash your other three tires and then complain about how unfair the world was for giving you four flat tires. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joey Miles Posted December 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 25, 2010 now thats just bashing me unfairly i just bought a new version of microsoft word so that i could fix my spelling and upadted my computer. I was only asking to lay off the spelling because i didnt have anything that wouldnt crash my laptop to use so you wanna appoligize now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JG. Posted December 25, 2010 Report Share Posted December 25, 2010 Crab Helmet doesn't apologize. One of the big rules on YCM. As for the Fic, it looked good until I got to the "school complety populated by humans with super powers". Get something more original. Please? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joey Miles Posted December 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 25, 2010 lol its all i could come up with for the moment. its gonna be changed later on and i dont care if crab helmet doesnt appoligize i will not be bashed about something i cannot help. I am Dislexic i was born unable to read and spell properly due to this and i work hard to be able to do what little i can. i will not be contunlsy attacked for something i cannot help Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted December 25, 2010 Report Share Posted December 25, 2010 There is nothing here that you cannot help. Poor spelling due to dyslexia could easily be fixed with a spellchecker or just by getting someone else to proofread. Spellcheckers are available online, so it is impossible not to have access to one, despite your repeated complaints to the contrary. And if you don't have a single friend willing to read what you've written, then that indicates either that your stories are so worthless that not even your friends want to read them or that you have no friends; in either event, you have bigger problems than people pointing out that you were too lazy or stupid to use a spellchecker. And as JG noted, spelling is hardly the only problem here; your fanfic seems completely devoid of originality. Does dyslexia cause that, too, in the same way that it apparently causes too-stupid-to-use-google-to-find-a-spellchecker-itis? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joey Miles Posted December 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 25, 2010 well thank you for actually bothering to critize the story and not my spelling. and as far as my spelling goes go bash someone else for spelling because its not welcome here. i dont care who you are but if you really dont like the story or my spelling that much dont bother to make a comment because you just waste both of our . you obviously dont like this story just like you didnt like my poem and i can respect that but go bash someone else because im not gonna bother with you anymore and if enless you want to actually critize the story and give me a bit of pointers on how to make it better then dont bother commenting. so have fun bitching at somebody else but let me tell you its not gonna be me anymore understand and enless you actually have the balls to appoligize for actually like a complete ass towords me and bashing a disabled person i suggest you get the f*** out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted December 26, 2010 Report Share Posted December 26, 2010 Let's see, the story seems way too unoriginal. If it's an academy with super powers, give it originality. For instance, the "Index" Novels involved a war between those people with super powers and magicians. No, don't copy that. I just want to say that it's too orthodox, not to mention boring. The "im a demon lololol" part is way too lame. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joey Miles Posted December 26, 2010 Author Report Share Posted December 26, 2010 ty ive actually been working on a diffrent thing for this i just need someone to bounce it off of. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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