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OK, so I was looking at some of the older Ritual Monsters, and I realized that these beings, past their prime, need an upgrade.

[center][Spoiler=The Story (READ THIS FIRST)][/center] [left]In a dark corner of a big city, the Ritual Monsters felt abandoned in the Yugioh Universe. The only one of them who was successful in Hero City was Demise, King of Armageddon, and against his word, left the rest of the Rituals to Rot. No luxury, no light, very little food and water, but plenty of time, most of which the Ritual Monsters spent reminiscing about better times.

So that was how they lived, in the ghetto of a Yugioh metropolis. Until one day something so amazing, so phenomenal, so outright unbelievable happened that every single one of their lives changed for good.

Ruin, Queen of Oblivion was scouring the rubble for something good to eat. Suddenly, a glimmer caught her eye. It seemed to be an old lamp of some sort. She brought it back to the rest of the Ritual Monsters.

"What on earth could it be?" wondered Black Luster Soldier, running his hand down the side of the lamp. Suddenly, a green mist filled the air, and who should emerge from the lamp but La Jinn, the Mystical Genie of the Lamp!

"I see a great tragedy has befallen you, brave Ritual Monsters," La Jinn said. "I have decided to help you. Normally, I give a total of 3 wishes. However, I will make an exception. Each of you gets 1 wish, but it needs to be a transformation wish. What is your deepest desire to become?"

And that's how it began.[/left]
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[Spoiler=EN001] [img]http://img832.imageshack.us/img832/1971/59945t.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your hand or Deck by sending 1 "Relinquished" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 1 or more from the field or your hand. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, it is treated as a Field Spell with the effect "all monsters on the field become Level 1 and their ATK and DEF become 0." If there is an active Field Spell on the field, this effect is not applied.

[Spoiler=His Wish] "I wish my eye sees all, and under it, everyone becomes as weak as me." [/spoiler]
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[spoiler=EN002] [img]http://img717.imageshack.us/img717/8130/59945.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Ruin, Queen of Oblivion" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 8 or more from the field or your hand. Each time this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, it can attack once again in a row. If this card is in Attack Position, it cannot be destroyed by battle (damage calculation is applied normally).

[Spoiler=Her Wish] "I wish I was restored and refreshed back to the days of my youth." [/spoiler]
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[spoiler=EN003] [img]http://img109.imageshack.us/img109/2496/59945v.jpg[/img]

lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Black Luster Soldier" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 8 or more from the field or your hand. Once per turn, the player who Summoned this card can switch control of this card between you and your opponent. This card cannot attack your opponent directly. Whoever has this card on their side of the field during their End Phase loses 1000 Life Points.

[Spoiler=His Wish] "I wish I was free from my loyalty and Code of Honor- even if it costs me my freedom." [/spoiler]
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[spoiler=EN004] [img]http://img833.imageshack.us/img833/7781/59945k.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Elemental Mistress Doriado" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 3 or more from the field or your hand. The Attribute of this card is also treated as WIND, WATER, FIRE, and EARTH while it is face-up on the field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle with an EARTH, WATER, FIRE, WIND, or LIGHT monster. (Battle Damage is still inflicted to players.)

[spoiler=Her Wish] "I wish I could use my elemental powers as energy- like my idol, Five-Headed Dragon." [/spoiler]
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[spoiler=EN005] [img]http://img684.imageshack.us/img684/8130/59945.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "The Masked Beast" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 8 or more from the field or your hand. Once per turn, you can skip one of your phases (excluding your End Phase). If you do so, your opponent skips that same phase during their next turn. You can pay 500 Life Points to Remove this card from play and Special Summon 1 "The Masked Beast" from your Graveyard until the End Phase.

[spoiler=His Wish] "I wish my knowledge and power was not bound by my era of existence." [/spoiler]
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[spoiler=EN006] [img]http://img441.imageshack.us/img441/8130/59945.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Magician of Black Chaos" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 8 or more from the field or your hand. If this card is in Attack Position, it cannot be destroyed by battle. This card cannot attack.

I know, it's simple ^_^
[spoiler=His wish] "I wish to atone for my bad deeds by becoming an undefeatable defender of the night."
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[spoiler=EN007] [img]http://img573.imageshack.us/img573/8130/59945.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Lycanthrope" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 6 or more from the field or your hand. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, you can look at all of your opponent's face-down monsters. This card is not affected by the effects of Trap Cards.

[spoiler=His Wish] "I wish to become a noble and brave Beast, able to see anything and be uncatchable."
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[spoiler=EN008] [img]http://img820.imageshack.us/img820/8130/59945.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Fortress Whale" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 7 or more from the field or your hand. Once per turn, this card can remove itself and all cards equipped to it from play. During your next Standby Phase, it moves to your opponent's Removed from play pile. During your 2nd Standby Phase after this card's effect is activated, it inflicts damage to your opponent's Life Points equal to this card's ATK and returns to your side of the field. You cannot activate this card's effect the turn it returns to your side of the field.

[spoiler=His Wish] "I wish I could roam through the galaxies and Dimensions as a powerful battleship."
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[Spoiler=EN009] [img]http://img821.imageshack.us/img821/1577/59945b.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Shinato, King of a Higher Plane" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 8 or more from the field or your hand. This card is not affected by the effects of other cards. 50 turns after this card is Summoned, flip a coin. If Heads, you win the duel. If Tails, the duel ends in a draw. This effect can be negated.

NOTE: this card was made because I was feeling creative. If you don't like it, please don't take points away from the final score.
[spoiler=His Wish] "I wish to rule over the entire Universe!" Shinato said rashly. Little did he realize this would make it impossible for him to connect at all with smaller affairs, and all of his powerful abilities took an insanely long amount of time to work. However, for the most part, he was content.
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[spoiler=EN010] [img]http://img255.imageshack.us/img255/8445/59945a.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Super War-Lion" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 7 or more from the field or your hand. When this card is Summoned, select 1 monster on your opponent's side of the field and equip it to this card as an Equip Spell (this effect can only be used once per turn and you can only equip 1 monster at a time to this card). This card gains ATK and DEF equal to the equipped monster's ATK and DEF and at each of your End Phases, your opponent loses Life Points equal to the equipped monster's Level x 100. (If this card would be destroyed by battle, destroy the equipped monster instead.)

wow.
[spoiler=His Wish] "I wish that I was a ferocious beast that only needs one source for all of his energy."
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[spoiler=EN011] [img]http://img831.imageshack.us/img831/8333/59945o.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Dark Master Zorc" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 8 or more from the field or your hand. Each time you draw a card, show it to your opponent and activate the appropriate effects, based on the type of card drawn:
-Monster: Special Summon 1 "Underworld Token" (Fiend-Type/DARK/Level 1/ATK 2000/DEF 0) to your side of the field in Attack Position. During the End Phase that it was Summoned, its ATK becomes 0.
-Spell: Your opponent draws a card. If it's a Monster Card, you gain Life Points equal to that card's ATK.
-Trap: Discard up to 2 cards in your hand. Destroy a number of Spell and Trap cards on the field equal to the number of cards you discarded.

I really outdid myself on this one XD
[spoiler=His wish] "I wish to be an all-powerful ruler of the entire UNDERWORLD... world... world..."
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[spoiler=EN012] [img]http://img821.imageshack.us/img821/1971/59945t.jpg[/img]
lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your Extra Deck by sending 1 "Hungry Burger" from your side of the field to the Graveyard and Tributing monsters whose total Level equals 6 or more from the field or your hand. When this card is Summoned, Special Summon 1 "Fry Token" (Plant-Type/LIGHT/Level 3/ATK 1000/DEF 0) and one "Soda Token" (Aqua-Type/LIGHT/Level 3/ATK 0/DEF 1500). When this card would be destroyed, you can destroy a "Fry Token" or a "Soda Token" instead.

[spoiler=His Wish] "I wish I was a cute hamburger, not a... a... a monster!" Hungry Burger said, and started to sob. He was very sensitive.
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[spoiler=Waiting list]
Due to many requests, I've decided to make a waiting list. If you have a request, PM it to me or post it. I take 2 requests at most per person and only 5 at a time.

Zera the Mant
Garma Sword
Skull Guardian
Javelin Beetle
Crab Turtle
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[left]NOTE: I will only edit the lore of the cards, due to that being easier.

also, thanks to a smart suggestion by Spoon, the Revived Rituals reside in the Extra Deck.

Rate/Hate/Etc.


-tdloe[/left]

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9/10. I noticed some errors like not capitalizing certain words and other OCG mistakes.

When you say "monsters lose all their ATK and DEF." It should be "All monsters' ATK and DEF become 0."
Sorry, but that's just the proper way it is said in the Yugioh world.

Also, nice story at the beginning.
Althought I just think a lot of Ritual Monsters are worthless considering you need to have certain stuff on the field and on your hand that the whole duel pretty much passed by before you were allowed to summon a Ritual Monster. Nice concept, though. The only thing I like about Ritual Monsters is that they have a blue template.
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I love the story developing behind these, with the wishes and everything. I, too, noticed some OCG grammar issues but overall they are very well-worked, their effects referring back to the originals yet having their own twist. I would like to see more support. I say 8.5/10 for now. I'll reevaluate upon seeing more support! ^_^d
Btw, I get the whole unified name issue; I had trouble with that when starting my fisrt set...(which is still in progress as well)
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[quote name='Shadow-Master' timestamp='1294010877' post='4907410']
9/10. I noticed some errors like not capitalizing certain words and other OCG mistakes.

When you say "monsters lose all their ATK and DEF." It should be "All monsters' ATK and DEF become 0."
Sorry, but that's just the proper way it is said in the Yugioh world.

Also, nice story at the beginning.
Althought I just think a lot of Ritual Monsters are worthless considering you need to have certain stuff on the field and on your hand that the whole duel pretty much passed by before you were allowed to summon a Ritual Monster. Nice concept, though. The only thing I like about Ritual Monsters is that they have a blue template.
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THAAAANK YOOUUUU!!!!!!! I could not for the life of me get the right wording. Like I said, THAAAANK YOOUUUU!!!!!!!

[quote name='WattGirl' timestamp='1294012516' post='4907507']
I love the story developing behind these, with the wishes and everything. I, too, noticed some OCG grammar issues but overall they are very well-worked, their effects referring back to the originals yet having their own twist. I would like to see more support. I say 8.5/10 for now. I'll reevaluate upon seeing more support! ^_^d
Btw, I get the whole unified name issue; I had trouble with that when starting my fisrt set...(which is still in progress as well)
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Thanks =)

[quote name='~{Rochster}~' timestamp='1294013038' post='4907541']
I just realized something, there are 5 cards and the title says there arte 4.
Change that.
Do Herald of Perfection!!!
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I'll try, and I'm editing the title.
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[quote name='~{Rochster}~' timestamp='1294013038' post='4907541']
Do Herald of Perfection!!!
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Oooooooh yes...total agreement here. Magician of Black Chaos as well, for old time's sake (I know I know I know...it doesn't have an effect)...give it some effect that relates to its name, i.e. swapping monsters or cards in the hand etc.
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[quote name='~{Rochster}~' timestamp='1294013038' post='4907541']
I just realized something, there are 5 cards and the title says there arte 4.
Change that.
Do Herald of Perfection!!!
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I think the Ritual Monsters revived are the ones no longer used. SO I'd say Perfect is a no here.

[font=arial, verdana, tahoma, sans-serif][size=2][quote name='WattGirl' timestamp='1294019676' post='4907869']
Oooooooh yes...total agreement here. Magician of Black Chaos as well, for old time's sake (I know I know I know...it doesn't have an effect)...give it some effect that relates to its name, i.e. swapping monsters or cards in the hand etc.
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[/size][/font][font=arial, verdana, tahoma, sans-serif][size=2]This is a good one to be done.[/size][/font]
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[quote name='BackupFrogodile' timestamp='1294020292' post='4907916']
thanks for your input, tdloe will be away for a little while due to an unfair 2-day ban, so don't expect any cards in the next 2 days.
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I'm afraid to tell you it was not unfair, obviouslynottdloe; [i]heandnotyou[/i] actually spammed a spammer's thread.
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