Ice Dragon

[YGOTASrules]

When this Card is Special Summoned you can add 1 Dragon-Type Monster from your Deck to your hand, As long as this card remains face-up on your side of the field you can Special Summon 1 Dragon-Type monster from your hand to the field you can only use this effect once per turn, When this card is removed from the field destroy all Monsters Special Summoned by this effect.


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i want to start a dragon set tell me what is wrong with my OCG. and if this is a good effect, cause i thought the lv 5 underpowered it.

somebody comment?

[SSStylin']

Here's your OCG correction:

[i]When this card is Special Summoned, you can add 1 Dragon-Type monster from your Deck to your hand. While you control this face-up card, once per turn you can Special Summon 1 Dragon-Type monster from your hand. When this card is removed from the field, destroy all monsters Special Summoned by this effect.[/i]

[u]OCG correction notes[/u]:
- use periods instead of commas to separate each effect (for the most part)
- [font="Georgia"][i]"card"[/i][/font] is not capitalized
- [font="Georgia"][i]"monster"[/i][/font] is usually not capitalized (as far as I remember in the most recent OCG)
- [font="Georgia"][i]"As long as this card"[/i][/font] is now shortened to [font="Georgia"][i]"While this card"[/i][/font]
- [font="Georgia"][i]"this card remains face-up"[/i][/font] can be and is usually abbreviated in current OCG as [font="Georgia"][i]"this face-up card"[/i][/font]
- [font="Georgia"][i]"your side of the field"[/i][/font] has changed to [font="Georgia"][i]"you control"[/i][/font] when referring a monster on your field
--> in instances where [font="Georgia"][i]"you control"[/i][/font] does not properly convey the effect and/or where mentioning your field is necessary, [font="Georgia"][i]"your field"[/i][/font] is used instead of the lengthy [font="Georgia"][i]"your side of the field"[/i][/font]
- when mentioning a Special Summon to your field, it is usually not necessary to state [font="Georgia"][i]"to your field"[/i][/font] (such as in the context it is used in your card's effect)

Hope that helps you out. Yes, I know it's detailed & highly scrutinized, but no, I'm not trying to be obnoxious or mean.


[u]Comments[/u]:
I like the swarming effect, although Red-Eyes Darkness Metal Dragon already fills the role of the Dragon-Types' swarmer. The effect is fair; perhaps a bit UP compared to REDMD.

I think the Level 5 stat balances it, considering it's current ATK & DEF. If it were a Level 4 or lower monster, it would be on the OP side.

If you intend to change its Level to 4 or lower, you need to lower the ATK.

[YGOTASrules]

thanks a lot for the helpful comment, its really useful! but i wanted to make an "Ice Dragon" Deck so that's why i used this card to fill the role of RDMD.