Blood Boil

[Shadow-Master]

[img]http://img715.imageshack.us/img715/6159/338861.jpg[/img]

Rate.

[Y.M.R.creator]

The card isn't an equip card.

However,i think it's balanced

8/10

[Turmoil]

Good, its like a lower united we stand + double attack
could lead for direct attack OTKs

but equips are underrated anyway, its good. just needs to be an equip card

[Shadow-Master]

No, this isn't an equip card. Some cards like "H-Heated Heart" aren't equip yet it still increases the monster's attack and effect for one turn.

I deliberately made it non-equip just to show that once you use it, it is sent to the graveyard but the effect still lasts on the monster for that turn.

[Ghoulish]

? Why does it say "equip" when it's not even an Equip card? Wait maybe you meant to for it to be an Equip Card? But hang on then why didn't you make it one? It's not hard? Oh well, you may want to proofread your card before posting it as that is a pretty silly mistake. Okay when you post a card in "realistic Cards' make sure you post the effect under the card, Why? Because it makes it easier for people to do OCG corrections that you most desperately need. It's not hard simply copy the text in the effect section of your card creation and post it under the image code in the thread, okay? But this comes wit experience so don't be to hard on yourself.

OCG Fix, wow lots of errors, I'm still wondering why you called it "Equip Card" when it isn't one? is there a reason for this? Again Proofread your card prior to posting.

"Select 1 monster on the field. Increase the selected monster's ATK by 500 for every monster your opponent controls, the selected monster can ATK twice during your next Battle Phase. During your next Standby Phase Pay 1000 Life Points and destroy the Equipped monster."

As you can see alot of errors there, you have to specify whether you intend for it to be an Equip card or not, if you want I can give you OCG help as you look like you need it desperatly, it's okay though it's common with new members. i couldn't really make sense of the card while reading it, you may ant to check your grammatical skills prior to posting the card to see if it makes sense just reading it, but again it'a okay as this is a teaching forum in which other teach you of how to improve and not simply praise your work as some would expect.

Balanced? You could say it is, but then again you could say it isn't you've given it an ATK boost + extra ATK + inflicting damage effect. Get rid of the inflicting damage part it is unneeded and serves only as an attempt to OP the card. Otherwise it may pass as borderline balanced or slightly Op'd

Name? Again proofread your card "Blood Boil" "I activate Blood Boil!" see how you've done a future tense word? You may want to be abel to distinguish phrases that seperate past, present and future "Boiling Blood" That souns much better. it's okay if you don't know the difference but note that name can be extremly important.

Pic? I don't comment on the pics because that's silly.

Originality? here's a key area to learn, originality is the main source of a distinguishable and recognisable Yu-Gi-Oh! Card if you don't have originality ie: if you make a card liek this you won't score overly big with me as a focus on originality IMO is a nessecity, maybe read more cards and different effects? that way you can learn of innovative card effects that may seem at least moderatly original.

Usability? Its a generalizing card, so if most decks didn't have this then something would be wrong, this would be used often so for that it has a good usability rating.

Summary: This is a teaching forum in which im teaching you of where to improve, learn from your mistake and proofread your card prior to posting also be able to distinguish tenses and learn of better OCG, this will help you to become a better card maker, also remember originality is essential, anyway i won't give you a rating but I'd like a reply as to what on earth this card was supposed to be? an Equip Card? or a Normal Spell Card???

[Shadow-Master]

[quote name='Bluster Soldier' timestamp='1294095160' post='4909650']
[b]? Why does it say "equip" when it's not even an Equip card? [/b]

Gonna fix that.

[b]Wait maybe you meant to for it to be an Equip Card? But hang on then why didn't you make it one? It's not hard? Oh well, you may want to proofread your card before posting it as that is a pretty silly mistake. [/b]

Proofread? What are you talking about? I proofread it, all right. I just made a mistake of making it equip. But otherwise the spelling and grammar is okay. Proofreading means you correct English mistakes.

[b]Okay when you post a card in "realistic Cards' make sure you post the effect under the card, Why? Because it makes it easier for people to do OCG corrections that you most desperately need. It's not hard simply copy the text in the effect section of your card creation and post it under the image code in the thread, okay? But this comes wit experience so don't be to hard on yourself.[/b]

Lol, I have posted card descriptions before, just not this one. If your eyes can't see THAT large of a text, then maybe you need glasses.

[b]OCG Fix, wow lots of errors, I'm still wondering why you called it "Equip Card" when it isn't one? is there a reason for this? Again Proofread your card prior to posting.[/b]

Again, what are you talking about "proofreading"? That's for grammar and spelling mistakes only. Way to go by asking the same question again too about the equip card.

[b]"Select 1 monster on the field. Increase the selected monster's ATK by 500 for every monster your opponent controls, the selected monster can ATK twice during your next Battle Phase. During your next Standby Phase Pay 1000 Life Points and destroy the Equipped monster."[/b]

What? You just made it worse. The WHOLE point of Blood Boil is that you hurt your enemies and you hurt yourself. Therefore, you inflict damage to yourself too. Inflict is the key word. "Increase the selected" okay that's fine I made a mistake of not making it equipped. "your opponent controls" Why did you change that? Why? "every monster on your opponent's field" was just fine...there was nothing wrong with that. "During your next Standby Phase Pay" you know what's funny? You forgot to put the comma after the "Phase" part. It just goes to show how hypocritical you are to say "Oh lookie you made a mistake, check your mistake prior to posting it!!!" when you YOURSELF had an error while trying to correct my OCG. In fact, your whole post so far contains many errors. But that's not it. You made the worst mistake of all. "destroy the Equipped monster" I just laughed at that hard. Here you are asking me why I use "equip" in my description YET you used it yourself. Way to prove me wrong, bro.

"Pay 1000 Life Points" It's funny because it's not pay, it's inflict. Normally, when you are using "Pay" for Spell Cards you do it before you can use the effect. Here, you have to decrease your life points AFTER the effect has been done. So it is inflict, not pay. Inflict to my life points would make more sense considering this is "Blood Boil" and you hurt yourself in the act of hurting others. You don't "pay" for this hurt, you get damaged by it. Know what I'm saying?

[b]As you can see alot of errors there, [/b]

There are errors in your own POST. "alot" isn't even a word.

[b]you have to specify whether you intend for it to be an Equip card or not, if you want I can give you OCG help as you look like you need it desperatly, it's okay though it's common with new members. i couldn't really make sense of the card while reading it, you may ant to check your grammatical skills prior to posting the card to see if it makes sense just reading it, but again it'a okay as this is a teaching forum in which other teach you of how to improve and not simply praise your work as some would expect.[/b]

Fine, I will edit the card so it fits. I need YOUR OCG help? I'm sorry, but what kind of drugs must have you been smoking? You made more mistakes than I did! The only mistake I did was not make it an equip card. The OCG was fine, you just reworded it for some strange reason. And again with the new members...do you ever learn? It doesn't MATTER if I am a new member or not, I had experience with Yugioh just as well and I KNOW how to make the effects go well. Oh yeah, and way to go with spelling "desperately" "desperatly". You couldn't make sense with reading the cards? What, is your brain fried on something? Probably you couldn't understand how cards work in the first place? For god sakes, if there was any trouble with the card, it was the "equip" mistake. THAT'S IT. "you may ant to check your grammatical skills" You may ant? You may ant? You may ant WHAT? What the hell is "you may ant". Again, same unintelligible gibberish you are spewing out in your posts. And AGAIN, this is not a TEACHING FORUM, this is a freaking CARD MAKING FORUM. If you don't know the difference, you should probably not even be here. I find it very insulting to be criticized on my grammar for a person who can't even spell "CAN'T" right...never mind the other countless mistakes that person made trying to correct me.

[b]Balanced? You could say it is, but then again you could say it isn't you've given it an ATK boost + extra ATK + inflicting damage effect. Get rid of the inflicting damage part it is unneeded and serves only as an attempt to OP the card. Otherwise it may pass as borderline balanced or slightly Op'd[/b]

"ATK boost + extra ATK" Oh, thanks for repeating the same thing over for me. "ATK boost + extra ATK" They are the SAME thing, you freaking imbecile. Did you mean "Double-Attack", because it's not hard to say. "get rid of the inflict damage part" Did you not even see the effects AFTER what happens to this card? Apparently you didn't, so I have to play it Kindergarten style and say "THIS CARD GETS DESTROYED AFTER JUST ONE TURN, AND YOU GET 1000 DAMAGE INFLICTED TO YOUR LIFE POINTS". "H-Heated Heart" is an example of a card that not only increases a target monster's ATK, but it also has the inflict damage thing. However, that's an official card. If that can get released, then how is this card OP? In fact, this card is even worse. You lose this monster just after one turn and you get a whopping 1000 points off. If anything, this card is balanced because you gain a lot, but you also lose a lot.

[b]Name? Again proofread your card "Blood Boil" "I activate Blood Boil!" see how you've done a future tense word? You may want to be abel to distinguish phrases that seperate past, present and future "Boiling Blood" That souns much better. it's okay if you don't know the difference but note that name can be extremly important.[/b]

What. Are. You. Talking. About. Seriously, it's a NAME. It doesn't matter if it's past, present, or future tense. It's a CARD NAME. There are several hundreds of actual cards that have completely different uses of names. "You may want to be abel to distinguish" What is an "abel"??? My god, CHECK YOUR FREAKING SPELLING. No, not only that, your LOGIC AS WELL. In fact, if you cannot do any of these things STOP CRITICIZING ME ON MISTAKES YOU WOULD MAKE". "exremly important." Right, and it is "extremly" important you stop posting garbage like this.

[b]Pic? I don't comment on the pics because that's silly.[/b]

Oh right. It's because you're the better man right? That's what you're trying to establish so far. You're calling me a New User that pretty much doesn't know grammar and spelling yet you are the one lacking in this area. You deserve a medal for your superior ignorance.

[b]Originality? here's a key area to learn, originality is the main source of a distinguishable and recognisable Yu-Gi-Oh! Card if you don't have originality ie: if you make a card liek this you won't score overly big with me as a focus on originality IMO is a nessecity, maybe read more cards and different effects? that way you can learn of innovative card effects that may seem at least moderatly original.[/b]

It is taking me way too long to read your posts. I am just gonna save time and proofread your posts (damn I feel like an English teacher)

Capitalize the "Here" in "here's a key area"
It is "Recognizable" not "recognisable"
You're supposed to put a period after before the "if"
It is spelled "like" not "liek"
It is spelled "necessity" not nessecity.

I know I should not be correcting you, but god, AT LEAST, just AT LEAST make your posts readable and not a shocking pain to the eye.
"maybe read more card effects" Read more card effects? I am playing a video game on Yugioh right now for the DS and I have read PLENTY of cards for me to recognize the grammar in OCG. "moderatly" is spelled "moderately".

And how is this card unoriginal? Don't post random crap here and say my card is unoriginal because it isn't. Tell me, how many cards do you see this on a daily basis? Are there specific cards to this? No? Then this is fully original because it has an effect like no other and it doesn't mirror other cards at all. Maybe it has certain effects that are similar, but altogether it is one tied up concept that is completely original.

[b]Usability? Its a generalizing card, so if most decks didn't have this then something would be wrong, this would be used often so for that it has a good usability rating.[/b]

I'm going to tell you where this card ISN'T going to be used. Your deck. It's not going anywhere near the likes of you.

[b]Summary: This is a teaching forum in which im teaching you of where to improve, learn from your mistake and proofread your card prior to posting also be able to distinguish tenses and learn of better OCG, this will help you to become a better card maker, also remember originality is essential, anyway i won't give you a rating but I'd like a reply as to what on earth this card was supposed to be? an Equip Card? or a Normal Spell Card???[/b]

It. Is. Not. A. Teaching. Forum.
If this was a damn forum for teaching, there would be several lessons with threads in them, and no one would be allowed to post their cards because THAT WOULDN'T BE TEACHING. This forum is for SHARING YOUR CARDS/CARD IDEAS. Sure you can criticize, but that isn't teaching, if your brain could comprehend that.

Do not tell me to fix my mistakes. Do not. In fact, don't tell ANYONE to fix their mistakes because you don't know how to think. Do not lecture me on which mistakes I make because not only you make more mistakes, you point out things that aren't even true.

Overall:

You are an ignorant hypocrite. You say I make certain card mistakes on the basis of no logic. You try to correct ME, while I can see a million, perhaps a billion things I can say to correct you. You try to lecture ME on originality, for no absolute reason. You make tons of Spelling/Grammar errors. You ask me why it is not an Equip Card YET, YET, in the so called "corrected" version of my card's description you gave me, you say on the very last few words; "EQUIPPED MONSTER". If that isn't hypocritical and inaccurate at the same time, I don't know what is. You try to say I make mistakes because I'm a new user. Well, you are dead wrong. Just because I'm a new user doesn't mean you could just mozy around stereotyping me for being a noob on this forum. After this single post, I have realized that I am a WAY better card maker than you'll ever be, considering you make too many mistakes when correcting me AND you proving that you have little to no logic. Please, in future posts, do not make one of these rubbish posts again.

[/quote]

[Homunculus Gluttony]

I'ts like metamorph, when used it is equiped, it doesn't need to say equip card.

[Turmoil]

You can't really say equipped, if it's not an equip card because its essentially not equipped. Because normal spell cards are sent to the Graveyard after the chain they are in is resolved. How about "Destroy the selected monster and take 1000 damage."? for the last sentence

[Ghoulish]

Listen man if you can't taske criticism then GTFO and don't come back, your card, in terms of Name, Originality and OCG especially, is ridiculous, you don't like feedback? don't post a card okay? I understand it's because your new but you get no where if you don't take things on bored, oh and FYI, i don't comment on the picture because, 1) You didn't make it, 2) you didn't edit it, 3) it's not yours, 4) You simply compied it, 5) it does nothing for the card 6) it doesn't affect the card's usability, 7) it's simply to make it loook pretty.

[b]Lol, I have posted card descriptions before, just not this one. If your eyes can't see THAT large of a text, then maybe you need glasses.[/b]

I guess if you weren't an idiot you'd realise it's so people can correct your horrible OCG, that's "Official Card Grammer" you know? The thing you put in the effect section of the card?

[b]What? You just made it worse. The WHOLE point of Blood Boil is that you hurt your enemies and you hurt yourself. Therefore, you inflict damage to yourself too. Inflict is the key word. "Increase the selected" okay that's fine I made a mistake of not making it equipped. "your opponent controls" Why did you change that? Why? "every monster on your opponent's field" was just fine...there was nothing wrong with that. "During your next Standby Phase Pay" you know what's funny? You forgot to put the comma after the "Phase" part. It just goes to show how hypocritical you are to say "Oh lookie you made a mistake, check your mistake prior to posting it!!!" when you YOURSELF had an error while trying to correct my OCG. In fact, your whole post so far contains many errors. But that's not it. You made the worst mistake of all. "destroy the Equipped monster" I just laughed at that hard. Here you are asking me why I use "equip" in my description YET you used it yourself. Way to prove me wrong, bro.

"Pay 1000 Life Points" It's funny because it's not pay, it's inflict. Normally, when you are using "Pay" for Spell Cards you do it before you can use the effect. Here, you have to decrease your life points AFTER the effect has been done. So it is inflict, not pay. Inflict to my life points would make more sense considering this is "Blood Boil" and you hurt yourself in the act of hurting others. You don't "pay" for this hurt, you get damaged by it. Know what I'm saying[/b]

You "pay" 1000 Life Points, you don't inflict 1000 Life Points to yourself, ask anyone about tha if you don't believe me, again your new so it's understandable that you would argue.

Also i left the Equipped in there on purpose you fool, know why? because I couldn't understand if 1) You were to retarded to change it to an equip card via not knowing how to. 2) You thought it was treated as an Equip card while in the Graveyard. And again your are wrong about the inflicting damage to yourself.

[b]Fine, I will edit the card so it fits. I need YOUR OCG help? I'm sorry, but what kind of drugs must have you been smoking? You made more mistakes than I did! The only mistake I did was not make it an equip card. The OCG was fine, you just reworded it for some strange reason. And again with the new members...do you ever learn? It doesn't MATTER if I am a new member or not, I had experience with Yugioh just as well and I KNOW how to make the effects go well. Oh yeah, and way to go with spelling "desperately" "desperatly". You couldn't make sense with reading the cards? What, is your brain fried on something? Probably you couldn't understand how cards work in the first place? For god sakes, if there was any trouble with the card, it was the "equip" mistake. THAT'S IT. "you may ant to check your grammatical skills" You may ant? You may ant? You may ant WHAT? What the hell is "you may ant". Again, same unintelligible gibberish you are spewing out in your posts. And AGAIN, this is not a TEACHING FORUM, this is a freaking CARD MAKING FORUM. If you don't know the difference, you should probably not even be here. I find it very insulting to be criticized on my grammar for a person who can't even spell "CAN'T" right...never mind the other countless mistakes that person made trying to correct me.[/b]

I probably have mistakes in my post because I don't care about the occasional error, why? I find that trying to get the message across about why your card sucks is more important. You can keep targeting my typos all you like it doesn't excuse the fact that your simply trying diverge your critisicm and try to make it obsolete by targeting the few errors I make, your card needs work and is not perfect deal with it loser.

[b]"ATK boost + extra ATK" Oh, thanks for repeating the same thing over for me. "ATK boost + extra ATK" They are the SAME thing, you freaking imbecile. Did you mean "Double-Attack", because it's not hard to say. "get rid of the inflict damage part" Did you not even see the effects AFTER what happens to this card? Apparently you didn't, so I have to play it Kindergarten style and say "THIS CARD GETS DESTROYED AFTER JUST ONE TURN, AND YOU GET 1000 DAMAGE INFLICTED TO YOUR LIFE POINTS". "H-Heated Heart" is an example of a card that not only increases a target monster's ATK, but it also has the inflict damage thing. However, that's an official card. If that can get released, then how is this card OP? In fact, this card is even worse. You lose this monster just after one turn and you get a whopping 1000 points off. If anything, this card is balanced because you gain a lot, but you also lose a lot.[/b]

Again that first line either falls in 1 of the following 2 categories, 1) You're new, 2) You're an idiot. What i meant was obvious, yes, sometimes my errors come from the misuse of "ATK" to describe a monster's ATK and "attack" to describe a monster attacking, a person seeking to learn would hope see past the errors and continue learning, someone as thick as you wouldn't know that, The removing the paying 1000 Life Points part was my bad, for a second there I thought it was inflict to your opponent, again this falls under your lack of proper OCG, i'll admit mine wasn't perfect, but it was alot better than yours. And stop with the caps, your making yourself look like an idiot.

[b]It is taking me way too long to read your posts. I am just gonna save time and proofread your posts (damn I feel like an English teacher)[/b]

Hey that's nice I feel like a card making teacher with a dumb ass student.

[b]Capitalize the "Here" in "here's a key area"
It is "Recognizable" not "recognisable"
You're supposed to put a period after before the "if"
It is spelled "like" not "liek"
It is spelled "necessity" not nessecity. [/b]

Why are you trying to escape the fact you can't take critiscim?

[b]I know I should not be correcting you, but god, AT LEAST, just AT LEAST make your posts readable and not a shocking pain to the eye.
"maybe read more card effects" Read more card effects? I am playing a video game on Yugioh right now for the DS and I have read PLENTY of cards for me to recognize the grammar in OCG. "moderatly" is spelled "moderately".[/b]

Okay the Caps again *sighs* expect nothing less from someone new. Oh Btw "OCG. moderatly" is spelled "moderately". Make sure you make "Moderatly" a capital after a full stop okay teach?

[b]And how is this card unoriginal? Don't post random crap here and say my card is unoriginal because it isn't. Tell me, how many cards do you see this on a daily basis? Are there specific cards to this? No? Then this is fully original because it has an effect like no other and it doesn't mirror other cards at all. Maybe it has certain effects that are similar, but altogether it is one tied up concept that is completely original[/b]

"And how is this card unoriginal? Don't post random crap here and say my card is unoriginal because it isn't." ? Wait teach...are you saying it's original or it isn't? Cause you kind of agreed with me there. Your card gives ATK boosting + extra attack at the cost of Life Points and card destruction, where the hell is the originality? I'll go make a card that increases a monster's ATK by 654, would that be original? I mean sure there are similar cards but none give that exact ATK so it's original right? Wrongggg.

[b]I'm going to tell you where this card ISN'T going to be used. Your deck. It's not going anywhere near the likes of you[/b]

How about GTFO you gimpy loser. if you can't even reply properly to Positive points about your card, wtf are you?

[b]It. Is. Not. A. Teaching. Forum.
If this was a damn forum for teaching, there would be several lessons with threads in them, and no one would be allowed to post their cards because THAT WOULDN'T BE TEACHING. This forum is for SHARING YOUR CARDS/CARD IDEAS. Sure you can criticize, but that isn't teaching, if your brain could comprehend that.[/b]

Okay so giving positive/negative reinforcement on an individual's work on both where to improve and what they did well isn't a form of teaching? You post card to learn where to improve not so people can go "Bad card" "Good Card" Again this comes with experience in the forum.

[b]Do not tell me to fix my mistakes. Do not. In fact, don't tell ANYONE to fix their mistakes because you don't know how to think. Do not lecture me on which mistakes I make because not only you make more mistakes, you point out things that aren't even true. [/b]

Like how you wrote "Equip" in the Effect of a non-Equip card?

[b]Overall:

You are an ignorant hypocrite. You say I make certain card mistakes on the basis of no logic. You try to correct ME, while I can see a million, perhaps a billion things I can say to correct you. You try to lecture ME on originality, for no absolute reason. You make tons of Spelling/Grammar errors. You ask me why it is not an Equip Card YET, YET, in the so called "corrected" version of my card's description you gave me, you say on the very last few words; "EQUIPPED MONSTER". If that isn't hypocritical and inaccurate at the same time, I don't know what is. You try to say I make mistakes because I'm a new user. Well, you are dead wrong. Just because I'm a new user doesn't mean you could just mozy around stereotyping me for being a noob on this forum. After this single post, I have realized that I am a WAY better card maker than you'll ever be, considering you make too many mistakes when correcting me AND you proving that you have little to no logic. Please, in future posts, do not make one of these rubbish posts again[/b]

Okay then you think so? I hope you realize your reactions to me calling you a new user have been very entertaining! let me just say i got a good laugh out of it, if you promise to keep replying like you have I will continue with that term, also you are better then me eh? Alright no worries I'll PM you a 1v1 K? Then we'll let others decide lol and you better not say no loser.

[infinitysqrd]

As Turmoil said good OTK card I like it
also where did you find that awesome pic?

[DARKPLANT RISING]

Bluster, you can't say that. You know what I mean. Or did you apologize? Anyways my review:

[b]Blood Boil
Normal Friggin Spell
Select 1 monster on the field. Increase the selected monster's ATK by 500 for every monster your opponent controls. The selected monster can ATK twice during each of your Battle Phases. During your next Standby Phase, destroy the Equipped monster. You take 1000 points of damage. Or something like that. Who cares. *Sleeps*[/b]

Well, first of all, while everyone here is writing long paragraphs that no one will ever read and yet will make its writers look so internetly genius and awesome, let me say 1 thing.

This is useless even as an Equip card. Yes, unlike all the others here I actually care to take a look at the real-life cards and meta. I suppose that's stupid, but anyways.

Being an Equip Card is much, much better in many ways than being a Normal Spell in the case where it has to revolve around a singular monster anyways, much better than you think. Equip Cards can be searched. Power Tool, Hidden Armory, blah, blah, blah, blah, blah, who cares. Regardless of whether anyone is reading even at this point since they're so hilariously lazy, let me say this, there's a reason why Equip Cards have all the support.

It's the utter fact their traits suck. The traits depressingly suck. They depend on a monster for existance, don't give immidate +1's, and they rot in the hand easily. That was the whole reason Konami decided to become kinder upon them even in their drugged and slightly maddened state, so the kids will someday become stupid and start running 10 equips per deck and give the company a bit more money to waste upon.

As it happens, at this point in the metagame some equips are pro. Mark of the Rose is a staple for many competivive decks, and Supervise is epic in the GigaVise I often play. Why? They generate immidate +1's and stuff. But then again, how many Equips beside that are used? None, I could say easily. Since Ben Kei is long dead the only real metaworthy deck I see running many equips are Plants and Gusta FTK. So for equips to be good it has to be just as strong as the aforementioned two.

Anyhow, onto reading.

...*Reads*

Sucks hard.

The first advantage it creates is the u-get-500-4-every-enemy-lolololol-i-win effect. Hell, how many monsters are your opponent going to have? If you're activating this that means you're in a state of almost winning, since it kills the monster it selects soon. Unless you don't want to be raped by your opponent in several turns you ought to be killing him before that. Or her. Who cares. I don't see this being used against a JD and 2 Wulfs.

Well, back to the point, most likely your opponent will have 2 at best in normal decks. And well, just ATK increase is so deathly horrible. The meta is hungry for destruction. Like DAD. Woot I love him. In general the increase sucks, but I'll go on.

That monster can attack twice in the same Battle Phase, it says. Basically it gives the monster an extra head. Cybertwin is always fun, isn't it?

If it were up to here I'd just simply adore you. I'd send you a package of fresh reps and points and all that meaningless stuff. I love competitive cards.

But hey, this has more. It destroys the monster during your next Standby (more evidence this was created for the sole purpose of suckish and highly inconsistent OTKs). Then you take 1000 damage.

What the hell are you saying?

I mean, come on, this is rediculous. Think logically. To sum this up, you can't use this against Quickdraw for the sake of Fluff Tokens. It's also highly vunerable to attack negotation, recruiters like the Tomatos, blah blah blah blah blah. To add, Battle Fader is commonly run in many a locals.

Summary: hei iv got an idea lets run laitnin borteks insted whoooo

But most of all, I want to say WTF to the utter idea of not making this an friggin Equip. OTKs have to be at least a bit consistent to be run. That's why Exodia Underdogs suck. Can't you like, add a bit more of usefullness? Hey! Hey! HEY!!!!!!!

Overall, though it has an e-pic, I rate it 7/10. Piece of friendly advice that saves you from reading all the utter Ancient Egyptian: Make it a friggin Equip card already.

[Lord Ursus]

Please refrain from using this negative language folks.

New members should be treated as it.

Shadow-Master, you don't have to take the advice given here, but it can be very useful to listen to it.

Your OCG is rather off, so you should look at cards that do similar things and mimic their OCG.

I'll help you with this one, however:

Corect OCG:
Select a monster you control. It gains 500 ATK for each monster your opponent controls. That monster can attack twice during this Battle Phase. During the next Standby Phase after this card's activation, destroy the selected monster and take 1000 damage.

As for the image, I'd say it is fitting, though if you looked further, I'd suspect you'd find an image of better quality.

The effect is nice. Simple, but nice. It gives you a very powerful one-shot window to blast your opponent's to smithereens. The down-side, as mentioned is its vulnerability to interactions, but as such, refraining to play a powerful card just because it [b]can[/b] be foiled is just plain silly.

Solid work.

G.

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[quote name='Lord Ursus' timestamp='1294150818' post='4911077']but as such, refraining to play a powerful card just because it [b]can[/b] be foiled is just plain silly.
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I activate the Curse of the Speedy Meta. If you use cards that aren't staples OR cards that fit the deck's concept you can't win.

[WattGirl]

First off, guys, PLAY NICE!!! Y'all (yes, dang it, I say y'all) should know better than to start arguing like this. As the chick here, I say quit it with the testosterone poisoning...

Shadow-Master, if you can't take the heat then get out of the kitchen. You post cards here knowing that some people will shred them to bits. Report it if they're flaming, and don't start PMSing if they're being halfway respectful about it. Attacking someone because they're trying to suggest changes in card wording to more accurately resemble current card language is NOT okay. Btw, really good proofreading doesn't only address mistakes; it helps point you towards clearer language as a whole. If you listen and consider the advice, you might learn something. Bluster Soldier had a good point about the card name, and I agree with him on that; one of the criteria I rate based upon is how the name sounds and whether it complements the card's effect, stats, and art. Additionally, this forum IS a teaching forum. People come to post cards and get constructive criticism so they can learn and produce even better cards in the future and, hopefully, pass on what they've learned to less experienced members. Also, TYPOS HAPPEN!!! Forgive and forget them when they're not pervasive...

Bluster Soldier, you need to chill. You're the more senior member, and I know you're just trying to help but if Shadow-Master doesn't want anything to do with it then it's his own freaking problem and you can just walk away instead of letting yourself get baited into this type of thing. Don't rise to the challenge. If the dude's not listening then the dude's not listening. Chillax. Go rate something else. If you repeatedly challenge someone's convictions then you're only going to make them dig in their heels even more. Also, there is value in rating the pics in part because, whether we like it or not, we judge things based in large part upon their appearance. If they go and find a great image for the card in question, it's completely reasonable to acknowledge it whether or not they actually produced the image. The same goes for if it's of poor quality or doesn't fit the card; let them know so they can learn. You were the one going on about how this is a teaching forum. Side note: make sure your intended meaning lines up with the connotation of the language you're using. Just saying...

Now, you both need to appologize to each other if you haven't already!

IN ANY CASE...*cough cough cough* I'll move onto my review now that I've gotten that out of my system...

I like your choice of card art. It conveys the gist of the card and looks good doing it. Yes, there's probably a better image out there, but you're good with what you have.

I agree with Lord Ursus's OCG suggestion. "Select a monster you control. It gains 500 ATK for each monster your opponent controls. That monster can attack twice during this Battle Phase. During the next Standby Phase after this card's activation, destroy the selected monster and take 1000 damage." Couldn't have put it better myself.

Like it or not, I think Bluster Soldier was right about the name issues. Using active verbs in the present tense sounds WAY better. Trust me. Boiling Blood is a good suggestion. I'd actually even suggest a different tack, though; Blood Frenzy or something along those lines.

Overall, I have to dock points on the rating for the OCG issues, and I'm not thrilled with the name as it stands now. On the other hand, with good art selection and a balanced effect, it gains points. 7/10. I'd like to see a revised version if you decide to produce one!

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[quote name='WattGirl' timestamp='1294188916' post='4912191']*Friendship*[/quote]

But this is YCM...

[WattGirl]

[quote name='=Evangelion=' timestamp='1294189223' post='4912208']
But this is YCM...
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XD XD XD I love how you paraphrased me, but no. I'm not campaigning for friendship or anything; I'm just asking for a little civility ^_^d

[Drakus1111]

geeze, guys, chill out. this is a site that is supposed to be [i]fun[/i]

anyways, I like the effect, as it isn't broke. i do, however have a question: is the final decision to make it an equip card or not?

if it is an equip card, then upon the second attack, the equipped monster would lose 500 attack (as the first monster that was attacked would most likely be destroyed (with some specific exceptions)

if it is NOT an equip card, then the attack boost would remain, creating another important factor, based on what exactly you want the card to do.

finally, there are cards that can save the monster from destruction by skipping the standby phase (ex. Salomon's Lawbook).


the name seems fine to me (but, then again, it's just my opinion), the pic is a good choice (trust me, i know how hard it is to find a good pic to go with a card), the effect is well balanced, though it could use [i]some[/i] revision.

all-in-all, i give it an 8/10

[ldeshone]

[quote name='Bluster Soldier' timestamp='1294095160' post='4909650']
? Why does it say "equip" when it's not even an Equip card? Wait maybe you meant to for it to be an Equip Card? But hang on then why didn't you make it one? It's not hard? Oh well, you may want to proofread your card before posting it as that is a pretty silly mistake. Okay when you post a card in "realistic Cards' make sure you post the effect under the card, Why? Because it makes it easier for people to do OCG corrections that you most desperately need. It's not hard simply copy the text in the effect section of your card creation and post it under the image code in the thread, okay? But this comes wit experience so don't be to hard on yourself.

OCG Fix, wow lots of errors, I'm still wondering why you called it "Equip Card" when it isn't one? is there a reason for this? Again Proofread your card prior to posting.

"Select 1 monster on the field. Increase the selected monster's ATK by 500 for every monster your opponent controls, the selected monster can ATK twice during your next Battle Phase. During your next Standby Phase Pay 1000 Life Points and destroy the Equipped monster."

As you can see alot of errors there, you have to specify whether you intend for it to be an Equip card or not, if you want I can give you OCG help as you look like you need it desperatly, it's okay though it's common with new members. i couldn't really make sense of the card while reading it, you may ant to check your grammatical skills prior to posting the card to see if it makes sense just reading it, but again it'a okay as this is a teaching forum in which other teach you of how to improve and not simply praise your work as some would expect.

Balanced? You could say it is, but then again you could say it isn't you've given it an ATK boost + extra ATK + inflicting damage effect. Get rid of the inflicting damage part it is unneeded and serves only as an attempt to OP the card. Otherwise it may pass as borderline balanced or slightly Op'd

Name? Again proofread your card "Blood Boil" "I activate Blood Boil!" see how you've done a future tense word? You may want to be abel to distinguish phrases that seperate past, present and future "Boiling Blood" That souns much better. it's okay if you don't know the difference but note that name can be extremly important.

Pic? I don't comment on the pics because that's silly.

Originality? here's a key area to learn, originality is the main source of a distinguishable and recognisable Yu-Gi-Oh! Card if you don't have originality ie: if you make a card liek this you won't score overly big with me as a focus on originality IMO is a nessecity, maybe read more cards and different effects? that way you can learn of innovative card effects that may seem at least moderatly original.

Usability? Its a generalizing card, so if most decks didn't have this then something would be wrong, this would be used often so for that it has a good usability rating.

Summary: This is a teaching forum in which im teaching you of where to improve, learn from your mistake and proofread your card prior to posting also be able to distinguish tenses and learn of better OCG, this will help you to become a better card maker, also remember originality is essential, anyway i won't give you a rating but I'd like a reply as to what on earth this card was supposed to be? an Equip Card? or a Normal Spell Card???
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you have way to much time on your hands if your typing this much