Skythief Posted January 16, 2011 Report Share Posted January 16, 2011 Update: [spoiler=Flying Support Unit PT91] [img]http://img339.imageshack.us/img339/9360/163811.jpg[/img] [spoiler=Lore] When you draw this card, you can discard it to draw 1 more card. You can discard 1 card to Special Summon this card from your Graveyard. If you do, remove this card from play when it would be moved to the graveyard. [/spoiler] [/spoiler] -Removed a drawn card for more balance Added 2 new cards: Updated: great increase to pictures tried to throw in some balance as well [spoiler=Tear the Wound] [img]http://img833.imageshack.us/img833/9360/163811.jpg[/img] [spoiler= Lore] Activate only this card when a monster your opponent controls is sent to the Graveyard by battle. Discard 1 random card from your opponent's hand. [/spoiler] [/spoiler] [spoiler=Ruins of the Forgotten Heroes] [img]http://img593.imageshack.us/img593/9360/163811.jpg[/img] [spoiler=Lore] Activate this card by Tributing 1 monster on your side of the field. Special Summon a monster with a Level equal to or less than the Level of the Tributed monster + 2 from your Graveyard. Its effect is negated. When this card is removed from the field, destroy the monster. When the monster is removed from the field, destroy this card. [/spoiler] [/spoiler] Note: The picture is not mine. I found it on google. 2nd Note: The other pictures aren't mine either. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raine Posted January 16, 2011 Report Share Posted January 16, 2011 The picture is very good and your name is original but your effect is OP with very high amounts of draw power with an easy price to pay but I really don't like to focus on the balence of card's. Your OCG (Official Card Grammar) is pretty good for being new however I few things need to be fixed special summon is Special Summon and a few other things I really dont want to focus on (mostly because I'm too lazy to care about perfect OCG) Name: 4/5 Picture: 4/5 Balance: 6/10 Effect: 9/10 OCG: 9/10 (I give a slight handicap here (because I don't care right now)) 32/40 B great card especially for the first time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted January 16, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 16, 2011 Well, thanks for the fast reply and especially for your tips on balance. Will try to work on it when I feel like it^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted January 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 18, 2011 Update: [spoiler=Flying Support Unit PT91] [img]http://img21.imageshack.us/img21/1444/163811m.jpg[/img] [spoiler=Lore] When you draw this card, you can discard it to draw 1 card. This card can be Special Summoned from the graveyard by discarding 1 card. When this card has been Special Summoned by its effect, when it is Tributed for a Tribute Summon, remove it from play. [/spoiler] [/spoiler] -Removed a drawn card for more balance Added 2 new cards: [spoiler=Tear the Wound] [img]http://img163.imageshack.us/img163/9360/163811.jpg[/img] [spoiler= Lore] Activate only this card when a monster your opponent controls is sent to the Graveyard as a result of battle. Select one face-up monster your opponent controls, change it to attack position. The selected monster loses ATK equal to the ATK of the destroyed monster. [/spoiler] [/spoiler] [spoiler=Hall of Dead Heroes] [img]http://img821.imageshack.us/img821/9360/163811.jpg[/img] [spoiler=Lore] Activate this card by Tributing 1 monster on your side of the field. Special Summon a monster with a Level equal to or less than the Level of the Tributed monster + 4 from your Graveyard. Its effect is negated. When this card is removed from your side of the field, destroy the monster. When the monster is destroyed, destroy this card and draw 1 card. [/spoiler] [/spoiler] Again, not my pictures Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted January 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 19, 2011 Bump still hoping for comments Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chaosreaper Posted January 19, 2011 Report Share Posted January 19, 2011 ...........flying unit is a mirror of Lok, Vizier of Hunting from DM Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Y.M.R.creator Posted January 19, 2011 Report Share Posted January 19, 2011 not bad for a first card 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted January 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 20, 2011 [quote=chaosreaper]...........flying unit is a mirror of Lok, Vizier of Hunting from DM [/quote] Lok wattus? Don't think I've ever played that game. Is it a TCG? New cards will be updated to the first post now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
endphase Posted January 20, 2011 Report Share Posted January 20, 2011 Well, for your first cards, they're great[img]http://public.yugiohcardmaker.net/public/style_emoticons/default/smile.gif[/img]. 9/10 because you're new. If you would not be, 8/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted January 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 20, 2011 Heh, thanks man^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lexadin Posted January 20, 2011 Report Share Posted January 20, 2011 [center]Let's give this a rating. [b]Flying Support Unit PT91[/b] OCG fix: [i]When you draw this card, you can discard it to draw 1 [b]more[/b] card. [s]This card can be Special Summoned from the graveyard by discarding 1 card. When this card has been Special Summoned by its effect, when it is Tributed for a Tribute Summon, remove it from play.[/s] [b]You can discard 1 card to Special Summon this card from your Graveyard. If you do, remove this card from play when it is removed from the field.[/b][/i] Great name and pic. Basicly a ballanced [url="http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/PSZ"]PSZ[/url]. Even though, I see loads of use with this in Exodia and Machine Decks. But whatever you do [b]DON'T[/b] change it to a Tuner, because then it would be a OP copy of PSZ. A 8.2/10 [b]Tear the Wound[/b] OCG fix: [i]Activate only[s] this card[/s] when a monster your opponent controls is sent to the Graveyard as [s]a result of[/s] [b]by[/b] battle. Select [s]one[/s] [b]1[/b] face-up monster your opponent controls[s],[/s] [b]and[/b] change it to [b]A[/b]ttack [b]P[/b]osition. [s]The selected monster loses ATK[/s] [b]Decrease the selected monster's ATK by an amount[/b] equal to the ATK of the destroyed monster.[/i] The pic is bad and I even think it's from a Game? The name's ok. This is OP. It's effect basicly gives a free Attack for (one of) your beatsticks to inflict loads of extra damage. Try adding a cost to ballance things out some more. A 6.3/10 [b]Hall of the Dead Heroes[/b] OCG fix: [i][s]Activate this card by Tributing 1 monster on your side of the field[/s] [b]Tribute 1 monster you control[/b]. [b]Then[/b] Special Summon [b]1[/b] monster from your Graveyard with a Level equal to or less than the Level of the [b]t[/b]ributed monster + 4. Its effect is negated. When this card is removed from your side of the field, destroy the monster. When the monster is destroyed, destroy this card and draw 1 card.[/i] Name is mehish, and the pic (though clear) is horrible. It looks like it was taken from an mediocre game. Again this card is horribly OP, as you can prety much bring back any lost boss in your grave for the mere cost of a Low level. Then when your opp manages to destroy this card, you still benefit from it. When ballancing, try removing the "+ 4" part or decreasing the Summoned Monster's ATK/DEF a bit (like 500-1000 should do the trick). A 6/10 Overal pretty basic newcomer cards. Try searching on [url="http://www.deviantart.com/"]DeviantArt[/url], [url="http://s825.photobucket.com/albums/zz178/JazinKay/"]Jazin Kays archives[/url] or [url="http://www.magicdeckvortex.com/art_catacombs.htm"]The Art Catacombs[/url] for better pics. They really give better results then Google . [/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted January 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 20, 2011 Ah, finally some things to work on. [quote] [s]This card can be Special Summoned from the graveyard by discarding 1 card.[/s] You can discard 1 card to Special Summon this card from your Graveyard. [/quote] This is not actually wrong OCG but probably old. It's like this this on Gigantes and Garuda the Wind Spirit, to name some. Same goes for "as a result of battle". Not wrong, but probably old. Many (older) cards have "as a result of battle" in it (like Giant Rat, Mother Grizly...) I'll correct those. [quote] [s]The selected monster loses ATK[/s] Decrease the selected monster's ATK by an amount [/quote] Copied from Mask of Weakness, also an old card, so yeah. [quote] This is OP. It's effect basicly gives a free Attack for (one of) your beatsticks to inflict loads of extra damage.Try adding a cost to ballance things out some more. [/quote] WIll think of some price. [quote]try removing the "+ 4" or decreasing the Summoned Monster's ATK/DEF a bit [/quote] Sounds reasonable. Thanks for the big deal of help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lexadin Posted January 20, 2011 Report Share Posted January 20, 2011 Np. Also try using more recent cards for your OCG references as lots of the OCG has been updated. You can find most of them on the [url="http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Main_Page"]YGO Wikia[/url]. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ruby_Mansi Posted January 20, 2011 Report Share Posted January 20, 2011 Nice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted January 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 20, 2011 [quote]Also try using more recent cards for your OCG references as lots of the OCG has been updated.[/quote] I used Airbellum this time, guess that's recent enough? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted January 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2011 Bump, still looking for some comments, since the cards have been ajusted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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