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New card Idea :) Plz Rate Comment,Fix OCG. [img]http://img97.imageshack.us/img97/9936/330701.jpg[/img]<BR><BR><BR>Lore:This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by destroying Tributing 2 Angel monsters on your side of the field control. Once per turn, by paying 800 Life points you can switch the ATK and DEF of this monster and attack your opponent's Life Points directly. <BR>

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This is pretty awesome. Besides the fact that I've seen the pic before is OCG and you only have some orginality here, you get an 8/10! As for OCG:

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by [s]destroying[/s] [b]Tributing[/b] 2 Angel monsters on you[s]r side of the field[/s] control. Once per turn, by paying 800 Life points you can switch [b]the[/b] ATK and DEF of this monster and attack your opponent's Life Points directly.
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My OCG isn't that good, but I can pick up a few places where you can improve it:


This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by [s]destroying[/s] Tributing 2 [b]"[/b]Angel[b]"[/b] monsters [s]on your side of the field[/s] [b]you[/b] control. Once per turn, [s]by[/s] [b]you can [/b]pay[s]ing[/s] 800 Life points [s]you can[/s] [b]to [/b]switch the ATK and DEF of this [b]card[/b] [s]monster[/s] [b]until the End Phase, during the turn you activate this card's effect, you can [/b][s]and [/s]attack your opponent[s]'s Life Points[/s] directly.


Some of my corrections may not be perfect, but they are certainly large improvements. I also added the End Phase clause as I assumed the ATK & DEF would reverse afterward? Either way thats optional.

Other than the overwhelming amount of corrections needed, I must say, this is a very creative and fun card maple/LRL, well done. ;)


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I think it's UPed for have the ATK and DEF bit low and paying 800 to switch and attack, since tt will have its DEF as ATK you only dealing 500 damage extra more than the LP you paid, so either remove paying or increase the stats a tab bit like 2500 ATK and 1500 DEF then. Even if it does special summon the requirement Isn't generic.
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[color="#A0522D"][center][i][b][u]Original Effect[/u]:[/b]
his card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by destroying Tributing 2 Angel monsters on your side of the field control. Once per turn, by paying 800 Life points you can switch the ATK and DEF of this monster and attack your opponent's Life Points directly.
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[b][u]OCG Fix[/u]:[/b]
This card cannot be Normal Summoned or [b]s[/b]et. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 'Angel' monsters on your side of the field. Once per turn, by paying 800 Life points you can switch the ATK and DEF of this monster and attack your opponent's Life Points directly.

[b][u]My Personal Revision of your effect[/u]:[/b]
his card cannot be Normal Summoned or set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 'Angel' monsters on your side of the field. Once per turn, by paying 500 Life points you can swap the ATK and DEF of this card, until the end phase of the turn this effect is activated this card can attack your opponents Life Points directly.

[b][u]Review[/u]:[/b]
The picture is mediocre, the character is good but the background is extremely bland :/. The effect is creative in a few minor ways and the OCG is flawed but almost accurate =D. As Thantos stated it is kind of Up'd but IMO its your decision on hoe you fix that or if you do.

[b][u]The Rating[/u]:[/b]
8/10
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