Adramelech

[GHawk]

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This is my comeback card. Havn't made a card in a very long time so fix my errors please. Also, let me know what you think about it.

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[b]Lore:
As long as this card is in Defense Position, all WATER monsters switch positions. If this card is selected as an attack target, you can remove all FIRE mosters in your Graveyard to negate the attack. This effect can only be used once per duel.[/b]
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[RickiMinaj]

Adramalech consorts more to the storm then it does to fire. Your card is misnamed... and the first effect makes no sense...

[GHawk]

Adramalech means "King of Fire". And how doesn't it make sense? If this card is in Defense Position, switch all WATER monsters' position. So if there was a Defense Position WATER it'd be a Attack Position. If there was an Attack Position WATER, it'd become a Defense Position monster. Its not that hard to comprend.

[RickiMinaj]

[quote name='GHawk' timestamp='1295482244' post='4945564']
Adramalech means "King of Fire". And how doesn't it make sense? If this card is in Defense Position, switch all WATER monsters' position. So if there was a Defense Position WATER it'd be a Attack Position. If there was an Attack Position WATER, it'd become a Defense Position monster. Its not that hard to comprend.
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LoL.. it's comprehend btw...

and it makes no sense because of the wording. "If this card is changed to Defense Position" is what it should be. ;D

And through all the novels I've read, adramalech represents a beast of wind and storm. Huh...

[♠>:Stick-Man:<♠]

The card seems great and I see what your trying to say, but the OCG isn't written down correctly.

8' Fix the OCG and arrange it a little bit better and you got your self a 10. (That is if you care for 10s)

[GHawk]

I looked up the name and thats what it said.

And okie doke dude. :]

[♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥]

Why does it target Water monsters specifically? That doesn't really help it. What if your opponent doesn't use Water monsters? That blows the first effect to hell. Thats why I think most Specific Target cards arent worth much time. AoJ dont have sufficient support to make their effects more effective in all situation so they're not commonly run. A few are but not much.

It's last effect is ok. Flamvell. Neo Flamvell too. I think "all" is much and the once per duel is a pain. Needs 2 Tributes ): bahh~ Not searchable either );

[GHawk]

Thanks for the critic.

[Dandelo]

The card isn't quite incorrectly named. Adramelech is a Samarian sun god (which can be compared to fire, I suppose), and also a high-ranking demon in most demonology and Satanic worshippings. Although, he is supposed to resemble a mule with a plume peacock feathers as a tail, which doesn't seem too badass; so the picture serves as a more demonic look, which I like.

As for the card, it's usefulness is questionable, seeing as it's effect only serves to stall against WATER monsters. And it's second effect seems almost pointless: with a DEF of 3000, your opponent isn't going to even think of attacking it until they get a much stronger beatstick out.

[Skythief]

The effect is really awkwardly phrased.
"As long as this card is in defense position, all WATER monsters switch positions" doesn't contain a trigger. A trigger can either be a certain phase (Usually Standby Phase or End Phase, because that's basically what they are for) or an event, this can be basically everything from a drawn card to a summoned monster.
Another option is an activation timing, which means you can activate the effect manually (normally duringyour Main Phase) or an activation cost which also means you can activate the effect manually, by paying the cost.
If you don't want all that, a similar sentence which contains a trigger is "When this card is changed to defence position".

I hope this way in any way helpful?

[♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥]

[quote name='Skythief' timestamp='1295541243' post='4946749']
The effect is really awkwardly phrased.
"As long as this card is in defense position, all WATER monsters switch positions" doesn't contain a trigger. A trigger can either be a certain phase (Usually Standby Phase or End Phase, because that's basically what they are for) or an event, this can be basically everything from a drawn card to a summoned monster.
[b]Hello Gravity Bind[/b]
Another option is an activation timing, which means you can activate the effect manually (normally duringyour Main Phase) or an activation cost which also means you can activate the effect manually, by paying the cost.
If you don't want all that, a similar sentence which contains a trigger is "When this card is changed to defence position".

I hope this way in any way helpful?
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=/ Try rating the card, not editing it~ Thats not helpful at all.

Anyways, waters27 has a point. It's last effect most likely wouldn't have a chance to activate since your opponent wont attack it without a higher beatstick. Even then an opponent could still just use Hammer Shot or Smashing Ground to destroy this. Like I said, most specific targeting cards aren't very runable because their more of chance unless you make a deck specifically for Attribute control. Just slipping in a DNA or Scroll of Bewitchment is stupid and deck space waste.