A New Dark Spell Card That Can Be Used in Any Deck!!!

[White Night Priest]

Please Rate My Very First Yugioh Card Created and Tell Me How to Make Improvements. Thank You.

A Deal With The Adversary

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When your opponent declares an attack, negate the attack and end the Battle Phase. Then reduce your life points to 0 to equip this card to one face-up monster you control. The equipped monster gains ATK and DEF points equal to your opponent's life points and is unaffected by the effects of Monsters, Spells and Trap cards. When this equip card is destroyed or the equipped monster is removed from the field in battle, the player who activated this card loses the Duel.

[Kyakan]

1: No attachments. Look up in the tutorials section to learn how to properly post your cards.
2: Reducing your Life Points to 0 is an instant loss, and this card does nothing to prevent you from losing.
OCG fix: When your opponent declares an attack, negate the attack and end the Battle Phase. Then reduce your [b]L[/b]ife [b]P[/b]oints to 0 [b]and[/b] equip this card to one face-up monster you control. [b]As long as this card is face-up on the field, you cannot lose the Duel.[/b] The equipped monster gains ATK and DEF [s]points[/s] equal to your opponent's [b]L[/b]ife [b]P[/b]oints and is unaffected by [s]the effects[/s] [b]Spell, Trap and Effect Monster effects[/b].[s] When this equip card is destroyed or the equipped monster is removed from the field in battle, the player who activated this card loses the Duel. [/s]
At least, that's how I would have done it.
Overall, I'd give it a 5/10 for a first card.

[Ieyasu Tokugawa]

[quote name='Kyakan' timestamp='1295800412' post='4954378']
1: No attachments. Look up in the tutorials section to learn how to properly post your cards.
2: Reducing your Life Points to 0 is an instant loss, and this card does nothing to prevent you from losing.
OCG fix: When your opponent declares an attack, negate the attack and end the Battle Phase. Then reduce your [b]L[/b]ife [b]P[/b]oints to 0 [b]and[/b] equip this card to one face-up monster you control. [b]As long as this card is face-up on the field, you cannot lose the Duel.[/b] The equipped monster gains ATK and DEF [s]points[/s] equal to your opponent's [b]L[/b]ife [b]P[/b]oints and is unaffected by [s]the effects[/s] [b]Spell, Trap and Effect Monster effects[/b].[s] When this equip card is destroyed or the equipped monster is removed from the field in battle, the player who activated this card loses the Duel. [/s]
At least, that's how I would have done it.
Overall, I'd give it a 5/10 for a first card.
[/quote]
Keep the last sentence, because you could just use Dian Keto.

[White Night Priest]

I have made changes to the card based on the comments posted. Thank everyone for their help.

A Deal with The Adversary


It now reads:

When your opponent declares an attack, negate the attack and end the Battle Phase. Then reduce your Life Points to 0 and equip this card to one face-up monster you control. As long as this card is face-up on the field, you cannot lose the Duel. The equipped monster gains ATK and DEF equal to your opponent's Life Points and is unaffected by Spell, Trap and Effect Monster effects. When this equip card is removed from the field, the player who activated this card loses the Duel.