white knight swordsman

[dratinimew2]

my white knight warrior i created

[img]http://img203.imageshack.us/img203/3/214585.jpg[/img]

please tell me what you think
any opinions or advice will be used when i create future cards

[Renzoku Kira-]

okay first off you really need a better pic or go in there and put a background for the knight.

This card would fit in with a classic deck since its effect helps Buster Blader you should prob. separate the effect and start them with a *

With a background its a 8/9 out of 10 without it 6/7 of 10

[dratinimew2]

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okay first off you really need a better pic or go in there and put a background for the knight.

This card would fit in with a classic deck since its effect helps Buster Blader you should prob. separate the effect and start them with a *

With a background its a 8/9 out of 10 without it 6/7 of 10
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Thanks for the advice

[The Greatness]

1. New pic or background.. and if you put the background yourself make sure the color schemes match.

2. Your OCG is bad... It's actually not that bad of an effect if you use it with the right deck but you need to make sure it uses proper card grammar. The effect should be:

This card gains 200 ATK fo reach Warrior-type monster on the field. When this card is sent to the Graveyard you can Special Summon 1 "Buster Blader" from your hand or Deck.

I'm not exactly sure where but there's an OCG thread somewhere where you can learn the basics like I did.

3. To make it a stronger effect you can say "When this card is removed from the field you can Special Summon 1 "Buster Blader" from your hand or Deck." which means once it is removed from the field you can Special Summon Buster Blader... So it necessarily doesn't have to go to the Graveyard.

4. Since you're just starting I won't rate this as I would normally so I give you a 8/10. Make sure you check out other people's realistic cards.. They can give you ideas of how to make your own cards especially reading the ratings and criticizes that goes along with the thread. Good luck on your future YCM card making!

[Ieyasu Tokugawa]

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3. To make it a stronger effect you can say "When this card is removed from the field you can Special Summon 1 "Buster Blader" from your hand or Deck." which means once it is removed from the field you can Special Summon Buster Blader... So it necessarily doesn't have to go to the Graveyard.
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The way it is right now, you can just use Raigeki break, discard this card and then you get Buster Blader. You don't even need to have this guy on the field to use its effect. Only reason it isn't OP'd is because Buster Blader needs more support anyway.

[Skythief]

The first effect is too much considering we are talking about a level 4 monster. Since it's Warrior-type itself, it gains ATK by itself, meaning you reached 1900 standart level 4 capacity already. With Marauding Captain you're at 2300, with Command Knigth you're at 2500 and with Marauding Captain to summon Command Knight you're at 2700. Make it 100 per Warrior or make it exclude itself and it's fine as you need a Warrior-setup to make something out of it that way.

The second effect is an absurdly easy level 7 monster for almost free to me. Skilled White Magician needs 3 spell cards, this one can just be descarded by Magic Jammer, Lightning Vortex or whatever. So consider thinking this over please.
I'll give you a 5/10 for now.