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[The God of Darkness]

take a look and please tell me if i typed the effect right

Light/Level 12/Spellcaster/ATK 5000/ DEF 5000




This card cannot be Normal Summoned or set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by paying halve your life points and tributing 3 monsters with 3000 ATK or more if this card is to be destroyed you can choose 1 of the following effects -Discard your entire Hand instead.
-pay half your life points instead. -Offer 1 other monster on the field instead. Once per turn, Increase your life points by 1000. When this card battles a monster the monster is switched to defense position (Before damage calculation.).

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nice effect thats one hell of a cost to summon... id put the two effects at the bottom b4 the effect that activates to prevent its destruction simply because that effect has multiple choices and dont forget your grammer in all the parts there should be a period after "3000 atk or more" and a comma after "when this monster battles a monster"; not to mention a comma after "if this card is to be destroyed"

[Bahamut - Envoy of the End]

First of all, you forgot to give this card a name.

OCG fix below since you wanted it.

[quote name='The God of Darkness' timestamp='1296629655' post='4981051']
This card cannot be Normal Summoned or [b]Set[/b]. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by paying [b]half[/b] your [b]L[/b]ife [b]P[/b]oints and [b]T[/b]ributing 3 monsters you control with 3000 ATK or more. [b]During your Standby Phase[/b], increase your life points by 1000. When this card battles a monster, the [b]attack target[/b] is switched to defense position (Before damage calculation). If this card [bwould][/b] be destroyed, you can [b]activate[/b] 1 of the following effects:
-Discard your entire hand instead.
-Pay half your Life Points instead.
-Offer 1 other monster [b]you control as Tribute[/b] instead.
[/quote]

Indestructible monster with 5000 ATK, that the only practical way I think of to summon it is to use 'De-Fusion' to get three 'Blue Eyes White Dragons' out, or something.