†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 Okie Dokie, Going to try to make this quick. Anyhow, I got bored today and figured I'd make some cards. I didn't make any sets so to say, So I'll just post a topic where i can post all of my random cards. Alrighty, Enough talk and more cards, Here you go! [b][size="5"]P.S. TRUE Constructive Criticism = +Rep![/size][/b] [Spoiler=Monsters 5/??] [Spoiler=Rogue of Despair] [img]http://img703.imageshack.us/img703/4118/353548zv.jpg[/img] Lore: For every DARK monster on the field, Increase the ATK of this monster by 300. If this card reaches 3500 ATK or higher, Tribute 1 level 4 monster to keep this card. [/Spoiler] [Spoiler=One With Flames] [img]http://img573.imageshack.us/img573/2080/353548.jpg[/img] Lore: You may tribute 1 level 4 monster to attack your opponent directly with this card until the the end phase this effect is activated. If your tribute has a FIRE attribute, make it 2 End Phases. [/Spoiler] [Spoiler=One with Machines] [img]http://img51.imageshack.us/img51/8959/353548x.jpg[/img] Lore: This card is also treated as a Warrior-Type. You may decrease the ATK of this card by 800 to Special Summon a Level 4 or less Machine-Type monster from your Deck onto the Field in Face-Up Attack position. Once done so, this card cannot attack until the End Phase of your next turn. [/Spoiler] [Spoiler=One with Beasts] [img]http://img511.imageshack.us/img511/4353/353548o.jpg[/img] Lore: You may tribute one Beast-Type monster to add that card's ATK to any Warrior-Type monster. The card that got the ATK increase is now treated as a Beast-Warrior-Type card. [/Spoiler] [Spoiler=Water-Born Samurai] [img]http://img266.imageshack.us/img266/2080/353548.jpg[/img] Lore: You can Special Summon any monster with a WATER attribute from your Graveyard. If selected monster has Level Stars equal to this card's, increase this card's ATK by 1000 until the End Phase of this turn. [/Spoiler] [/Spoiler] [b][size="5"]Sacrifice of Defense, and Re-Draw's pictures are made by ME, So they might be crappy.[/size][/b] [Spoiler=Spells/Traps 3/??] [Spoiler=Sacrifice of Defense] [img]http://img253.imageshack.us/img253/4530/353548a.jpg[/img] Lore: The equipped monster's ATK is raised by 1000 for every Spell card on your side of the Field. The defense of the equipped card will then reduced to 0. This effect will end in the next 2 End Phases. [/Spoiler] [Spoiler=Re-Draw] [img]http://img502.imageshack.us/img502/2080/353548.jpg[/img] Lore: During your Draw Phase, You may send the card you drew to the bottom of your Deck to draw another card. [/Spoiler] [Spoiler=Negation of Negation] [img]http://img338.imageshack.us/img338/2080/353548.jpg[/img] Lore: When your opponent uses a effect of any card to negate the increase of one of your card's ATK, Negate that negation. [/Spoiler] [/Spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 *BumP* [b][size="5"]Added 2 new monsters! Check 'em![/size][/b] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 Besides the generally poor OCG and names, the art looks awesome for the monsters, and the effects are really something as well. The One with Fire looks like he can generally work together with the Gadgets. Summon and Tribute it, and add another Gadget. So he is pretty good, maxing out a good 4000 damage, or 6000 damage if they happen to have a FIRE monster. Rogue of Despair can easily be Summoned through the effects of deck searchers, like Mystic Tomato. His effect is also pretty good, as having 2 DARK monsters make him 2000 ATK already, and with DARK monsters being a very popular type of Deck, and possibly with Mystic Plasma Zone, this card can easily become very powerful. And the Tributing part isn't hard to do, since all you have to do is Summon a Level 4 monster, as soon as before he becomes 3500 ATK. One with Machines is very powerful. You can use his effect twice, bring in a super powerful Machine-Type, then Summon a Machine-Type Tuner monster, then use this card and the Tuner for a Synchro Summon. And you could just Summon multiple copies of this card, to be able to Summon more. Though, his effect does not say where it is Special Summoning from, so I'm just gonna believe its from your hand. Though, the only unplayable card is Re-Draw, as it is a Normal Spell, so it is not fast enough to use its effect, might I suggest it a Quick-Play. Too be honest, I do not want to comment on Sacrifices of Defense, considering how broken it is, just use 3 of these on 1 monster, then you'll have a 9000+ ATK monster on the field. I give it a 7/10 as they are generally not as good as they can be with effects limiting to only certain Types of cards, except for One with Machines, being possibly too powerful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 [quote name='DHeroDogma' timestamp='1296882465' post='4988805'] [FEEDBACK] [/quote] Holy crap, This is probably the best feedback i've ever gotten on any of my posts. Thank you very much. Anyhow, I really haven't studied Spells/traps etc. so that is one excuse. But i'm going to go through and look at what you've said and edit the cards so they're 'better'. Once again, I really appreciate the comment, So a +rep to you. (Where'd the other rep come from?...) Anyway, look forward to edits and new cards! =3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 Rogue of Dispair: This can easily be searched for and made very strong after. Maybe make him 1700-2000 ATK and instead lower the amount he gets per monster as it is very easy to bring him out. 7/10 One with Flames: Make it 1 turn, if FIRE atrribute 2 turns, seems a bit unfair in a fire deck as you will basically never run out of direct attacks with 3 per monster. However, the idea of the monster is good and reminds me of one of my favorite Fire cards, Blazing Sprite. 8/10 One with Machines: You [s]may[/s] can decrease the ATK of this card by 800 [b]to Special Summon a Machine-Type monster[/b] in face-up Attack Position. [b]From where?[/b] This is very important and has to be on the card. Also, OP. First, once per turn is max for things like this. Second, restrict the level of the summoned monster (to 4 would be okay I think, maybe 5) and third, make the cost higher. Make it so this card may not attack if you do this. 5/10 Sacrifice of Defense: United we Stand has been removed from the banned list, so I think this should be allowed too. Very powerful card and good in many decks, like Flamvell or X-Saber. Probably the most original card out of all and in my opinion the best one. 9/10 Re-Draw: This has to be a trap card I think, like Drop Off which does about the same to your opponent. Now this is not really fair. It would be if the card you send to the Graveyard would be rendered useless by that, but it isn't. Make it so the card you drew first is put at the bottom of your deck. 6/10 35/50, that's 70%. Good job, but can be quite a bit better. Especially some cards have to be more balanced. In the rating, I didn't take your OCG into account. It's pretty bad, but that will get better I guess. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 [quote name='Skythief' timestamp='1296923079' post='4989804'] [FEEDBACK] [/quote] Once again, holy crap! I did not believe i could get this much feedback that is this good. I really appreciate it, Updating the cards ATM. About the Re-Draw, I didn't think it was a trap card..Anyhow, I really appreciate all this feedback though, and know i'm going to show it. To show it, I will now edit and update cards. Once again, Thanks! =3*Bump!* (Not really a bump, Just a update..) Anyhow, Updated what i saw i should of. (Pretty much every card but Sacrifice of Defense.) Anyway, Hope you guys enjoy the updates, and I am currently thinking around for new card ideas. So be alert! =3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boss Z Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 I love the cards, but on "One With Flames" i would personally change this "You may tribute 1 level 4 monster to attack your opponent directly with this card until the the end phase this effect is activated. If your tribute has a FIRE attribute, make it 2 End Phases." to something along the lines of "You may tribute 1 level 4 monster to have this card attack your opponent directly, if you do half the damage this card deals until the end phase. If you tribute a FIRE attribute monster the damage is not halved." Its much more realistic of a card that way Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 [quote name='Boss Z' timestamp='1296926448' post='4990003'] [FEEDBACK] [/quote] Thanks for the feedback mate. Awesome idea, and i agree that it would probably make it more realistic. I'll think about what I can do to make this happen. =3 _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Anyhow guys, [b]Added a new monster![/b] [size="5"][b]'One with Beasts'[/b][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skythief Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 So yes, me again. Rogue of Despair Has been fixed well, well enough to leave out the last sentence, but if you wanna keep it anyway, it should be: If this cards ATK is 3500 or higher, Tribute 1 Level 4 or higher monster or destroy this card. 8/10 One with Flames Has been fixed perfectly. Only that the last sentence has to be rephrased. [s]If your tribute has a FIRE attribute, make it 2 End Phases.[/s] If you Tributed a FIRE monster, this effect ends during the End Phase of your next turn. Not sure if my version is correct, but I'm sure yours is wrong 9/10 One with Machines [s]Once done so[/s], [b]If you do, [/b]this card cannot attack until the End Phase of your next turn. Other than that, this is good now as well. 8/10 One with Beasts The Sirocco for Beasts. However, there aren't many warrior decks that feature beasts or vice-versa. This is good, but not very playable. 7/10 Sacrifice of Defense It's good, but it was good before anyway. 9/10 Re-Draw A Quick-Spell should do the trick too Fixed, not much more to say. 8/10 Overall equals 49/60, that is 81% Well done! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Smesh Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 Rogue of Despair: Not worth playing. It has no effect besides lolATK, and the above 3500 requirement kills it even more. One With Flames: May = can. Once again not playable since it's so easy to work around and really has no effect besides attacking directly, which requires Tributing. One With Machines: Can get out Tuners easily and makes an easy sync. But sadly, it's OP'd. Too easy to use and would cause too much mayhem. One With Beasts: Situational and once again lolATK. Not good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 [quote name='Skythief' timestamp='1296934160' post='4990388'] [FEEDBACK] [/quote] Now that I realize it, Your right. With "One with Beasts" theres not going to be a combo of warriors and beasts..I was a little meh with the effect when i first made it, I might change the whole effect..IDK..Anyhow, Thanks for the rating, I'm glad i decided to update, and not forget about it. =3 [quote name='Smesh' timestamp='1296934653' post='4990408'] [FEEDBACK] [/quote] Rogue of Despair: lolATK? What's that? One with Machines: Yeah, I also believe it's OP'ed...Not sure how to fix that one though... _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Anyhow guys, Working at new cards as we speak, And thanks for the feedback everybody! Hopefully i don't run out of reps for awhile... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Smesh Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 lolATK = has no effect besides increasing ATK. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 [quote name='Smesh' timestamp='1296937393' post='4990541'] lolATK = has no effect besides increasing ATK. [/quote] Okee, Thanks - Learn something new every day eh? Anyhow, Do you think i should edit/add effects of this or any other cards? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♠>:Stick-Man:<♠ Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 I see poor OCG and lore, also "With" in the card names should be capitalized. On to the review though. All the effects only have something due to increasing ATK, which I like to do the best, but the card's effect can be negated by some card's that stop increasing ATK effects. Try making a Spell or Trap Card, maybe a Monster Card, that prevents that from happening. Anyways my review is short but has a point, hope this set goes well for you and I'll be awaiting a card of what I just specified. 7' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 [quote name='♣Master♣' timestamp='1296937891' post='4990568'] I see poor OCG and lore, also "With" in the card names should be capitalized. On to the review though. All the effects only have something due to increasing ATK, which I like to do the best, but the card's effect can be negated by some card's that stop increasing ATK effects. Try making a Spell or Trap Card, maybe a Monster Card, that prevents that from happening. Anyways my review is short but has a point, hope this set goes well for you and I'll be awaiting a card of what I just specified. 7' [/quote] Lovely idea my friend! I am on it! (Sorry for such a short post...Sad face? ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♠>:Stick-Man:<♠ Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 No problem man; can't wait to see it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 [quote name='♣Master♣' timestamp='1296938143' post='4990581'] No problem man; can't wait to see it. [/quote] Alrighty, I got it! So that means...EPIC BOLD WORDS TIME! [size="5"][b]Added "Negation of Negation!"[/b][/size] P.S. Pictures crappy, and i didn't make it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Smesh Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 You should, but I don't help people out with that normally. It's your card, and if I did fixes for you...It wouldn't be your card xD So take what me and the others said and use that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♠>:Stick-Man:<♠ Posted February 5, 2011 Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 Good card although I don't think your OCG is correct, but I managed to understand the effect of the card; glad you took my advice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 Yeah, I knew i had something wrong with it. Oh, and thanks for the idea, It was yours after all. =3 +Repped! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
†Marksman† Posted February 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2011 Added a new monster! =3 Check 'em! EPIC BOLD LETTERS! [size="5"]Added, [b]"Water-Born Samurai"[/b][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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