Kingdom Hearts - The Final Mix [An Original Fic] ~World 3's chapters up~

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Alright here's one of my other fics! Now, each chapters are set into different worlds (EX. World 1 - Yo Momma's House) it will consist on whatever chapters the characters are in. Anyway, without further ado...enjoy!

[spoiler=Prologue/Beginning Poem][i]Across the skies, through space and time
Is a heartfelt wish, that’s yours and mine.
We should never lose sight of what’s precious to us…
to you and me.
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[url="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tHuh0iyzOWc"]KH Re:Coded OST - Dearly Beloved[/url]

The Keyblade, a weapon with unimaginable power. It’s said that it chooses its wielder because of their hearts. Keyblade wielders of light and dark were revealed and then a great Keyblade War began. After the war, nothing was left, but the Keyblade lived on. It chose new wielders and with it a new tale began. But with a new tale, new darkness unfolds. Soon another small war broke out, between three wielders of the Keyblade, a master, and his apprentice. In the end, disaster was stopped, but not at the price of a few friends. One of the wielders lost his heart and found refuge with another’s heart. The second lost his heart and body to the master, who used his new body for his dark purposes. And the final wielder wandered in the dark realm forever.

[u]10 Years Later and Forward[/u]:

Soon peace was restored, but soon darkness returned and then a new Keyblade wielder was chosen. Him along with a king’s knight and mage sought other worlds and stopped the darkness. He even rescued his friend from darkness and saved his other friend by returning her heart to her. The wielder defeated the main cause of his friend’s darkness and closed the Door To Darkness. He left his other friend and told her that he’d return one day, with their friend. Soon he found out there was more than just the darkness that roamed the worlds. A threat known as the Nobodies ravaged the world, after he lost his memories and was sent to sleep. With Keyblade in hand, he took on this new threat and saved the worlds once again. Finally, the old master that challenged the three wielders returned and then fought against the new Keyblade wielder. Now a master, the wielder defeated the master with his friends, and at last the worlds were safe from the darkness.

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[spoiler=World 1 - Destiny Islands (Chapters 1-3)][spoiler=Chapter 1]Destiny Islands, a small island that was near the coast of a small town, there were a few kids in they’re teens were racing on the beach. The taller teen, which was at the age of 17, had red hair, light green eyes, a red choker around his neck, a pair of dark blue pants with a stud belt around his waist, wearing a pair of zipped up shoes, and wore a short sleeved white shirt with had about three buttons unbuttoned, showing his chest from his neck. “C’mon Shio!” the boy yelled behind him with a chuckle. “If you lose this time you’re buying the Sea-Salt ice cream!!”

The boy behind him, which was younger than the other by one year, had light brown hair, dark blue eyes, wore a pair of gray jeans, a light brown t-shirt, a dark red shirt that had black flames over his t-shirt, and a pair of skateboarding shoes. He also wore a small necklace with eleven straight lines; on his right wrist he wore a few wristbands and a small gauntlet-like glove and wore a ring on his middle finger. “Hey, we didn’t agree on that, Ryuusaki!!” he yelled back.

Ryuusaki, the boy in front, laughed and said, “Sorry Shio…but I’m gonna win and your buying the ice cream!!”

“Dude! You know I’m out of munny!” Shio yelled back, which made Ryuusaki stop in his tracks.

“Seriously??” Ryuusaki asked. “You’re broke and you have no munny??”

Shio smirked and then took this opportunity to run ahead of Ryuusaki. “As if!!” he yelled as he crossed a small line, which they made the finish line. “Meaning, your buying the ice cream.”

Ryuusaki face palmed and said, “I can’t believe I fell for it…again.”

Shio looked at Ryuusaki and the both of them just began to laugh. They headed back to the boats and started to head back to the small town. They walked into a small store and then Ryuusaki bought two Sea-Salt ice creams on sticks. He handed one to Shio and said, “Here ya go!”

Shio took the ice cream and then began to eat it. “Ahh, the sweet taste of victory!” he said with a chuckle.

“You cheated…” Ryuusaki said grumbling.

Shio rolled his eyes and said, “What, you wanting a rematch?? Fine how’s this?? We’ll go to you’re place and then settle things with a little sword fight?”

Ryuusaki nodded and said, “Sounds good, I’ll just have to grab the wooden pirate swords from my room.” After a few minutes they finished the ice cream and headed towards Ryuusaki’s place.

Meanwhile, on another world: Disney Castle,

“Max!! Maxie!!” A voice yelled through the halls of the castle. The yell came from an older dog like creature wearing armor and holding a shield. He looked around and saw a small white duck with a wizard’s outfit and holding a staff. “Hey Donald! Have you seen Max??” he asked.

The duck, Donald, shook his head and said, “Shorry Goofy, I haven’t sheen Max anywhere. I’m still looking for my nephew, Louie.”

Then the both of them heard a ruckus outside. They rushed outside and saw a small white duck in a green wizard outfit, casting thunder spells at a small dog that looked like Goofy. “MAX!! Get back here and apologize for ruining my date!!” the duck said.

The dog, Max, was riding a skateboard looked back and said, “Louie…I already said I was sorry!!”

Donald sighed and then lifted his staff and said, “Thundaga!!” As he said this, a strong bolt of lighting hit the ground between Louie and Max. They then fell on the ground and saw Donald, tapping his foot.

“Uh-oh…” Louie said with a gulp. “Sorry Uncle Donald…”

Donald shook his head and said, “Louie, I shaid you could home here to learn magic for helping the king…not to use it for your own entertainment!”

As Donald began scolding Louie, Max quickly tried to walk away. However, Goofy stopped him. “Max! What did you do this time??”

Max sighed and said rolling his eyes, “Kinda messed up Louie’s date…I already said I was sorry.”

Goofy sighed and then said walking away. “Yer, now you need to come with me, Max. The king wanted to see you and Louie!!”
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[spoiler=Chapter 2]Ryuusaki and Shio were now outside of Ryuusaki’s house. He tossed Shio a small wooden pirate sword and said, “Your weapon Shio!”

Shio caught it and then flipped it around and had the top of the wooden sword behind his arm. He held the hilt of the wooden sword tightly and said, “Now, you’re going to lose!”

Ryuusaki laughed and then held the hilt of the wooden sword with one hand and pointed it at Shio. “No way am I going to lose!” he said as fixed his hair.

Neither of them moved and just let the wind blow past them. Then suddenly Ryuusaki ran towards Shio and began to try and slash him. All that was heard was the sound of wood hitting wood. Shio had quickly brought his sword up to block Ryuusaki’s strike and then he hit his left leg and then hit his back.

Ryuusaki fell down on his face after Shio hit him and he slowly got up and said, “S-Seriously…was the hit on the back really necessary??”

“Maybe…” Shio said with a laugh. He tossed the wooden sword in the air and then caught it in his right hand. “Wanna try again??” he asked with a smirk.

Ryuusaki nodded and then pointed the wooden sword at Shio again. Then he ran towards him and then this time waited for Shio to try and hit him again. Shio smirked and then jumped to strike Ryuusaki, but saw him duck and then he felt the wooden sword hit his right arm. Shio fell on his back and dropped his wooden sword.

“So the score is 1-1…” Ryuusaki said with a laugh. He pointed his wooden sword at Shio again and said, “One more round and we’ll find out who the winner is!”

Shio jumped to his feet and quickly grabbed the wooden sword and held like he was. He then ran towards Ryuusaki, as he did the same. They both clashed wooden swords and neither one of them gave an inch on this fight.

Meanwhile, back on the world Disney Castle…

Goofy, his son Max, Donald, and his nephew Louie headed down the hallway towards a small door, which lead to the King’s office.

Donald knocked on the door and said, “Your majesty, King Mickey…we’re here!!”

A voice from the other side was heard saying, “Please come in!!”

Donald, Goofy, Max, and Louie walked in and saw sitting at a small desk a mouse with two big ears. He wore a red outfit with two big yellow shoes. He smiled and said, “Donald, Goofy, glad you both could bring you’re nephew and son here.”

Goofy smiled and said, “Gawrsh, yer majesty…what’s going on?? Is something going on with the worlds again??”

“Cause if it ish, we’ll be ready to save them again!” Donald said holding up his staff.

King Mickey chuckled a little and said, “Thank you both, but I fear that you two won’t be able to. Master Yen Sid, has an uneasy feeling that something bad is about to happen. Much to the same feeling he had all those years ago, when Xehanort was still around.”

Goofy and Donald both nodded. They knew about everything that happened and with how he was finally defeated by Sora when he returned.

“But that’s where Max and Louie come in.” King Mickey said with a smile. “Yen Sid also has a feeling that a new Keyblade wielder will be arriving soon. I want you both to go to see Master Yen Sid and talk with him.”

Max scratched the back of his head and said, “Are you sure we’re capable of doing a mission like this?? I mean, from what you’re saying it sounds like you want us to find this new wielder.”

“Oh come on…” Louie said with a smile. “We’ll be fine! Don’t worry King Mickey, me and Max will take the new Gummi Ship and head off to the Mysterious Tower to see your master!”

Mickey smiled and said, “I’m glad to hear it. You two better leave on the double!”

Max and Louie nodded and turned to walk away, but Donald ran in front of them. “WAIT!!! Don’t forget the chronicler, Jiminy!” he said holding a cricket in his hand.

“Hey there! Cricket’s the name, Jiminy Cricket at your service!” Jiminy said as he hopped on Louie’s head.

Now with Jiminy with them, they both headed off to the main workshop to take the Gummi Ship to see Yen Sid.

Meanwhile, back on the world Destiny Islands…

Ryuusaki was lying on the ground panting. He looked over at Shio who was standing up, still holding his wooden sword. “L-Looks like you’re the winner…” Ryuusaki said almost out of breath.

Shio wiped the sweat off his forehead and said, “Oh yeah!! That’s twice I beat you today!!” He dropped the wooden sword on the ground and then helped Ryuusaki up.

They both smiled and were laughing about the day they had. Ryuusaki looked over at Shio and said, “Shio…don’t you wish there were other worlds and a way to leave this boring place??”

“Well…” Shio said scratching the back of his head. “I like the islands here…but the whole idea of having other worlds out there…would be awesome.”

Ryuusaki sighed and said, “Sounds like something that I’d expect you to say. But one day, I’ll find a way to prove that there are other worlds out there…and then I’ll leave this place.”

“You better at least tell me before you leave.” Shio said with a laugh.

The two laughed again and then they looked over in the distance, near the small islands, they saw a bunch of dark stormy clouds. “Looks like a storms coming this way…” Shio said looking at the clouds. “I better get home, see ya!”

Ryuusaki nodded as he watched Shio head home. Neither of them knew this, but that storm would send them on an adventure like they never imagined.
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[spoiler=Chapter 3]The storm raged around the island and then town. Shio was sound asleep, until a loud crack of thunder was heard. He woke up with a jump and then looked outside. He saw the ocean and then saw a small boat heading towards the island. “A boat??” he asked himself. “Ryuusaki!!” He quickly got dressed and snuck out of the house from his bedroom window and headed to the beach.

He ran to the beach and quickly got into a small boat and began to row towards the island. “I-I really hope Ryuusaki is alright…” he thought to himself.

Meanwhile, back at Disney Castle…

Max and Louie got in the new Gummi Ship that Chip and Dale made. Louie sat at the controls and said through the microphone. “This is Highwind Alpha to Chip and Dale!” he said. “You read me??”

Chip ran up to the mic and said, “This is Chip!” Then Dale ran up and said, “And Dale, we read ya loud and clear!!”

Louie nodded and looked back at Max. “Ready to get going, Max?” he asked.

“Yep!” Max said holding up a small shield.

Louie nodded and started up the Gummi Ship and they blasted off from the workshop hangar and flew away from Disney Castle. Louie began to press a few buttons and said, “Alright, course is now set for Yen Sid’s Mysterious Tower!!”

Meanwhile, back on Destiny Islands…

Shio finally arrived on the islands and saw Ryuusaki’s boat. “I knew he was here!!!” he said as he looked around. He looked and saw Ryuusaki near the small Paopu Fruit tree. He then ran to where he was at and said, “What are you doing?? We got to get back home!!”

Ryuusaki shook his head and said, “No…Shio. My father was working on some stuff and he said there are other worlds outside this one!” He laughed a little and said, “Meaning we can finally leave this place!!”

“W-What? Ryuusaki you’re not making any sense!” Shio asked with a puzzled look.

Ryuusaki turned to face Shio and said, “There are other worlds…and somehow this storm has opened a way to leave this world! We won’t have to see our parents again...this will be great!!”

Shio shook his head and said, “Dude, your freaking me out here…”

“Shio…whatever you do, don’t be afraid of the darkness…” Ryuusaki said turning his back on Shio.

Shio looked at Ryuusaki and said, “W-What??” But before he could say anything else, he noticed something happening at Ryuusaki’s feet, a small pool of dark energy.

It then began to grow, until Ryuusaki was no longer there. Soon the dark energy tried to take Shio with it. Shio pulled back, but he couldn’t leave. The dark energy then surrounded him, but a small glimmer of light appeared. The energy left and in Shio’s hand, was a weird key like sword. “W-What the heck??” he said looking at the weird weapon.

Then he saw a few black creatures with yellow beady eyes appearing before him. Shio gulped a little and then held this new weapon like the wooden sword. “I-I have no idea what you are…but your going down!!”

The creatures leapt and attacked, but Shio moved and then slashed the creatures with the weapon in his hand. He then saw them disappear after one slash. “Whoa!” he said as he looked at the weird weapon again.

Then a vicious wind picked up and then blew Shio away from the island. This wind, however, was not a normal wind. It was taking him away from his world…and bringing him to a different one.
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[spoiler=World 2 - Mysterious Tower (Chapters 4-6)][spoiler=Chapter 4]As Louie and Max flew in through the Lanes Between, they flew towards a small world with a tower on it. “There it is Max, Master Yen Sid’s place….Mysterious Tower!” Louie said as he continued to fly towards the small world.

Max grabbed his shield and said, “Awesome!!”

As they got ready to land on Yen Sid’s place, a very strong special current blew past them. The Gummi Ship did begin to rock a little, about to fly off course.

Louie grabbed the controls and made the Gummi Ship stay on course. “What the heck was that??” he asked looking back at Max.

“I really don’t know but it looked like that current was heading straight for Mysterious Tower!” Max said looking back at Louie.

Louie nodded and continued to head towards the tower. What they didn’t know, was the current held a person that landed face first on the ground in front of the tower.

Shio, who had been carried by the current, slowly got up and held his head. “OK…did anyone get the license of that truck??” he asked himself with a groan. He shook his head and then saw the tower behind him and said, “OK, I’m definitely not home anymore...”

Soon the Gummi Ship landed a little bit away from the tower. Max and Louie hopped out and then Max said, “So what now??”

Then both Louie and Max saw a bunch of black creatures with yellow eyes and then creatures with solider armor on, surrounding a teenage boy. “I don’t know who that is…but he’s surrounded by a bunch of Heartless!!” Louie said taking out his staff. “Come on Max!”

Max nodded and then him and Louie began towards the group of Heartless. “Get away from there!” Max said to the teenage boy.

Shio heard someone’s voice and then saw the same creatures on the islands. He then saw a walking and talking dog and duck. He then was about to move, but the weird key shaped weapon appeared in his hand.

“Max…look at the kid’s weapon!!” Louie said pointing. “It’s the Keyblade!!!”

Max looked and said, “We gotta help him out.” He then saw a Heartless try and attack the boy and then threw his shield at them. “Dude, we’re here to help. Just don’t get in our way!”

Shio looked at the dog and then flipped the so called, “Keyblade”, behind his arm and held it. “Whatever, I’ve fought with my friend a bunch of times!” Then he rushed towards a Heartless and then slashed upward.

Another bunch of Heartless was about to strike Shio, but then someone yelled, “FIRE!!” Then a fire ball engulfed the Heartless group. Shio looked behind him and saw the duck twirling his staff in his hand. “Oh yeah, I have the moves!” he said with a smirk.

Soon the Heartless were gone and then Shio’s weapon disappeared from his hand. “OK…what the heck just happened? What were those? Who are you? And what the heck was that in my hand??”

Louie sighed and said, “Well to start from the beginning…those creatures were called Heartless. The inky ones where Shadows; while the others were called Soldiers.”

“Heartless, what the heck is that??” Shio asked with a puzzled look.

Max sighed and said, “Heartless are formed from the darkness in peoples hearts.”

“Ahhh…” Shio said with a nod. “Alright back with the questions.”

Louie nodded and said, “Right, I’m Louie Duck, the King’s royal mage…in training.” He looked over at Max and said, “And that’s Max, the son of the King’s royal knight.”

“Sup!” Max said with a wave.

Louie continued and said, “And finally, that thing in your hand was called a Keyblade. A powerful weapon with unimaginable power, that chooses its wielder. And for some reason…it chose you.”

Shio nodded and said, “A Keyblade…so where the heck are we?? Is this another world??”

“Well, yes this is another world.” Max said walking over to Shio. “This is the home of Master Yen Sid…an old friend to our King.”

Shio nodded and said, “Well maybe he can help me find my friend Ryuusaki and get me back home!”

“Maybe he can.” Louie said with a smile. “By the way, we never got your name.”

Shio smiled and ran his fingers through his hair and said, “The name is Shio! Now how about we go talk to that Yen Sid person.”

Louie and Max nodded and then all three of them walked into the tower foyer. High above in a small room in the tower, an older man with a long beard, a blue robe and a wizard’s hat stood in the window watching the three walk in.

“So, the King has sent Goofy and Donald’s apprentices.” The man said. “And the boy with the Keyblade has arrived as well…” A small smile appeared on his face and he went away from the window and sat down in his chair.
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[spoiler=Chapter 5]Shio, Louie, and Max walked inside the tower foyer and looked around. They looked forward and saw a spiraling staircase.

Shio whistled and said, “Wow…that’s a lot of stairs. Hasn’t this dude heard of an elevator?”

“I highly doubt that.” Max said with a chuckle.

Then all three of them ran up the stairs and entered a small room. The door behind them closed and then in front of them, Heartless appeared.

Louie took his staff out and said, “More Heartless? Master Yen Sid needs to take care of these!”

“Unless he wants us to do it.” Shio said as his Keyblade appeared in his hand. “You two back me up??”

Max grabbed his shield and said, “We got your back!!”

Then all three of them ran towards the Heartless group and began to attack them. Max bashed a few Heartless with his shield and then threw it at a Heartless on his side. He caught and then shielded himself from another attack.

Louie twirled his staff and then yelled, “Blizzard!!” From his staff shot out a ice cold blast, freezing the Heartless. “There all yours Shio!!”

Shio nodded and then threw his Keyblade at the frozen Heartless and watched them shatter into a million pieces. Then he watched his Keyblade return to his hand. “Wow…this thing is very loyal!” he said with a smirk.

“Well, it is only able to be wielded by its chosen master.” Louie said as the door opened. “Looks like we’re heading up again!”

The three left the room and continued upwards through the spiraling staircase. They continued to run into rooms with Heartless, but they fought on and finally reached the last door. They opened the door and saw a medium sized room, with shelves and books on them. In front of them was a small table and a chair. Sitting in this chair was the old man that watched them walk into the tower.

Max and Louie quickly walked in and stood up straight and then bowed a little. “Master Yen Sid, we have arrived!” Louie said.

Shio looked at the old man that Louie called Yen Sid. He walked up between Max and Louie and said, “Sup old dude!”

“Shio!! Respect!!” Max said hitting him in the back of the head.

Shio glared at Max and said, “The hitting wasn’t necessary!!”

Yen Sid looked at the three and said, “It is alright. So, Louie and Max, it is good to finally meet you. Mickey has told me about how your training is going. I hope you both will be able to continue with this task.”

Louie and Max both nodded and then said, “Yes sir, Yen Sid!”

“Now for you.” Yen Sid said looking at Shio. “The Keyblade has chosen you and the reason you are here is because I brought you here.”

Shio shook his head and said, “Say what?! You brought me here from my island!!”

“Yes, as for your friend…I didn’t do anything.” Yen Sid said as he stroked his beard. “Now as for why you are here, there is a task you must do as a Keyblade Wielder.”

Louie nodded and said, “Yeah. As the Keyblade wielder, you have to defeat the Heartless and lock all the key-holes in every world that we visit.”

Yen Sid nodded and said, “Louie is correct. And from what I see, your Keyblade is much different from those of past wielders and masters. Would you mind showing me the Keyblade??”

“Um…sure.” Shio said with a shrug. He held his hand out in front of him and then his Keyblade appeared.

“Ahh, so that is the Keyblade…” Yen Sid said with a nod. “A Keyblade like that I haven’t seen in a while. The Divine Remnant Keyblade, a weapon given to a warrior of a higher class.”

Shio looked at the Keyblade and said, “I see…” Then the Keyblade disappeared and said, “So…can you explain to me what I’ll face?”

Yen Sid nodded and waved his hand. Soon there was a vision of a small Heartless. “This is, as you know, a Heartless. The creatures are created by the darkness within people’s hearts.” He waved his hand again and then there was a silver-slender creature with a zipper mouth.

“The heck is that??” Shio asked looking at the new creature.

Louie put his hand to his bill and said, “Uncle Donald told me about these, they’re called Nobodies!”

“Correct…” Yen Sid said. “You see when a person loses their heart to darkness, a heartless is born. But when a strong willed body is left as a shell, a Nobody is created. These will be the main two forces you will face.”

Max nodded and said, “And the Heartless are still controlled by Maleficent and her lackey Pete.”

Yen Sid nodded and said, “It is unsure who is controlling the Nobodies, as Organization XIII was destroyed long ago.”

“So what you’re saying is…” Shio said scratching the back of his head. “Some unknown person is controlling the Nobodies??” He saw Yen Sid nod and he then said, “Alright, I’m in. Besides, I might find Ryuusaki in one of the many worlds!”

Yen Sid smiled a little and said, “Good…now in the door on my left, are three fairies. I want you to go see them before you head out.”

Shio, Max, and Louie nodded and headed towards the door that Yen Sid directed them to.
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[spoiler=Chapter 6]Shio opened the door and looked around. The three saw a room full of mirrors with sheets over them. In the middle of the room they saw three women talking to each other, one wearing red, the second wearing blue, and the third wearing green.

Max looked at Shio and Louie and then said, “I take it they’re the three fairies??”

“Well duh…” Shio said rolling his eyes. “Isn’t it that obvious??”

Soon the three fairies turned around and saw Shio, Max, and Louie. The woman in the red, named Flora, walked over towards them and said, “Hello there. We’re the Good Fairies. I’m Flora, the one in the green is Fauna, and the one in the blue is Merryweather.”

Shio smiled and said, “Hi…um I’m Shio, this is Louie Duck, and that’s Max Goof.”

“I take it Yen Sid sent you to see us.” Flora said with a smile. “Well since you’re here, let us give you some new clothes. Fauna, would you give Louie a new outfit please?”

Fauna nodded and said, “Of course, dearie.” She waved her wand and then pointed it at Louie, who’s out fit now changed into a green hoodie with a black heart and a green hat. Around his waist was a black belt with a small case on the side.

“W-Wow!!” Louie said looking at his new outfit. “I look awesome!!”

“The case on the side holds a set of ear phones and a small computer.” Fauna said with a smile. “Yen Sid wanted me to give you those, since you’re the smartest out of the three. That and there will probably be worlds that you’ll have to split up. Now you can always stay in touch.”

Louie smiled and said, “Thank you very much!”

Fauna smiled back and then walked back with the other fairies. Flora looked at Max and said, “Merryweather, give him some blue pants. I’ll give him a red shirt.”

“Shouldn’t it be a blue shirt?” Merryweather asked.

Flora shook her head and said, “Please don’t start this again…”

Merryweather sighed and then both her and Flora waved they’re wands in the air and then pointed them at Max. Max’s outfit was now changed to a red hoodie with a black vest over top and blue jeans with a yellow strip down the side. Then there appeared a pair of knee pads on his knees, in his hands appeared a helmet and skateboard.

“Yen Sid knew you were an extreme person.” Merryweather said. “So he gave you those.”

Max smiled and then said, “Thank you both…this is pretty cool.”

Now all three fairies looked at Shio. “You know, he reminds me of him!” Fauna said. Merryweather shook her head and said, “How would you figure??” Flora cut in and said, “Well both of them have brown hair and blue eyes.” Merryweather nodded and began to agree with the others.

“Umm…excuse me??” Shio said politely. “What about me??”

Flora smiled and then all three of them waved their wands and pointed them at Shio. A bright light was shown and then it slowly died. Shio looked at himself, but he was still wearing the same clothes.

“Hey! What gives?” Shio asked. “I didn’t get a cool looking outfit like the other twos!”

Flora nodded and said, “You were fine the way you were. We just gave you a little something. You’ll figure out what that something is on your way through the worlds.”

“Thanks…” Shio said with a sigh. “See ya later.”

The three of them left the fairies and returned out to see Yen Sid. They saw him turn around and looked straight at them.

“I see you’re finally ready.” Yen Sid said with a small smile. He looked out his window and the Gummi Ship was floating there. “Now, I suggest you go to one closest world near here, Radiant Gardens.”

The three nodded and stood up straight and saluted Yen Sid. “Thank you for everything, Master Yen Sid!” Louie said.

Yen Sid nodded as he watched the three hop into the Gummi Ship and blast away from his tower. “He is like him…like Sora.” Yen Sid said as he thought about Shio. “That boy may yet become a Keyblade master…just like him.”

Meanwhile, on another world: Castle at the End of the World…

In a dark room, a small round table with a hologram of the Gummi Ship was shown for the creatures in it. The Heartless backed away from the hologram, but then a feminine laugh was heard from the darkness. From the darkness, came a woman with pale skin, a black robe and horns on her head. In her hand was a scepter, which held a sense of dark magic within it. She laughed again and said, “Why Pete…it seems that the Keyblade has risen again.”

Behind the woman, came a fat dog-like creature in a suit with armor on it. The dog-like creature, Pete by name, looked at the woman and said, “Yep…and it seems that King sent out his two friend’s apprentices. This will be even easier for you to beat, Maleficent.”

The woman, Maleficent, glared at Pete and said, “Fool! I said that about that boy, Sora, and his two friends. I won’t make that mistake twice!!”

“Does this mean you want me to go ‘round the worlds and get you that special Heartless army?” Pete asked.

Maleficent smirked and said, “Yes. But if you fail this time…”

Pete then gulped and said, “I-I-I get ya…” He then ran off into a dark portal that was created and disappeared from the room.

Maleficent looked at the hologram and said, “Soon I will rule all worlds…this time no one will stand in my way. The Mistress of All Evil shall reign again!!!” She laughed as she finished this sentence. Her evil laugh echoed throughout the corridors and the hallways of the castle.[/spoiler][/spoiler]

[spoiler=World 3 Radiant Garden (Chapters 7-9)][spoiler=Chapter 7]Louie piloted the Gummi Ship through a small asteroid field in the Lanes Between as Shio was sleeping and Max was polishing his shield. The ride got bumpy as Louie began to dodge and evade the asteroids.

Shio was still sleeping, when the ship turned a hard right and made him suddenly wake up. He got up and looked at Max, saying, “What the heck is going on??”

“Well…Louie is flying through an asteroid field.” Max said continuing to polish his shield.

Shio blinked a couple of times and said, “And you’re not freaked out by any of this??”

“Nah” Max said with a smile. “When he first did this on the way to Yen Sid’s place…it scared me half to death. But after a while, ya get used to it.”

Louie then successfully piloted the Gummi Ship out of the asteroid field and then saw a small world in front of them. “Guys, we’ve arrived at our destination!!” he said with a smile.

Max and Shio quickly moved up to where Louie was and saw the world. “So, that’s Radiant Gardens??” Shio asked.

Louie nodded and said, “Yeah. Though it was also known as Hollow Bastion, since the Heartless took over there…but soon it returned to normal. And it’s all thanks to him!”

“That’s the second time I heard you guys say ‘him’…who are you talking about??” Shio asked wanting to know.

Max sighed and said, “We’ve been talking about the Keyblade master that was around before the Keyblade chose you.”

“Wait...there was another one??” Shio asked with a surprised look on his face.

Louie put the ship on auto-pilot and said, “Yes. Uncle Donald and Max’s dad worked with him. His name was Sora…”

Shio nodded and said, “Sora…so he was the master before I was chosen…” He sighed and said, “From the way you two are talking about him…I-I doubt I’m even in the same class as he is.”

“Not exactly true.” Louie said as the ship finally landed on Radiant Gardens. “You heard Yen Sid; the Divine Remnant Keyblade is given to a high level wielder. Some where inside you…is a power ready to be used.”

Shio nodded and said, “Yeah…well let’s get going!”

Then the three of them walked out ship and walked from behind a small structure and walked into the main square. This world was destroyed long ago, but thanks to everyone returning and fixing everything…they brought this world back to the way it was before: A lush and beautiful world with everyone being happy and without a care.

Shio looked at Louie and said, “Looks like the Heartless are exactly here…”

Louie shook his head and said, “No…they’re here. But, thanks to the town’s technician, Cid Highwind, he created a defense mechanism to combat the Heartless.”

Shio now had a confused look on his face. Then he saw something digitally appear then disappear. “What the heck was that??” he asked.

Max face palmed and said, “Umm that was the defense mechanism Louie was talking about…”

“Ohhh…” Shio said scratching the back of his head.

Louie shook his head and said, “Just come with me. I know this place personally!”

Shio and Max just shrugged and followed Louie as he led them through the town. He soon led them to a small weird looking building. Louie stopped and turned around and said, “Uncle Donald says that there is one person you should learn magic from…besides him. In that house lives the wizard Merlin!”

As he said this, a puff of smoke appeared and when it cleared up, an old bearded man with a blue robe and a wizard hat, holding a wooden wand and wearing a pair of glasses was seen. He fixed his glasses and said, “Ah! The King told me you’d be here Louie!”

Louie smiled and said, “It’s great to finally meet you Merlin!”

“Likewise…” The old man, Merlin, said. He looked at Shio and said, “And you must be the Keyblade wielder.”

Shio nodded and said, “The name is Shio! So what are you gonna do exactly??”

“Why I’ve been instructed by the King and his royal mage to teach you and Louie some more magic!” Merlin said happily. “After all, the Keyblade can do a lot of magic.”

Louie smiled and stood next to Shio. “We’re ready to learn, Merlin-sir!” he said with a smile.

“Um…what he said.” Shio said, not knowing what else to say.

“Good, good…now enter my home when you’re ready.” Merlin said walking back into his home, waiting for Shio and the other two to enter.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Chapter 8]Shio, Max, and Louie entered Merlin’s house and they looked around. There were a lot of books and a small stone pedestal with a table, two chairs, and a tea set. On the right side was a small chalkboard and also a small computer with a bunch of numbers and codes on it.

“Wow…this place is kinda…weird.” Shio said scratching the back of his head.

Merlin cleared his throat and said, “What you call weird…I call my home. Now down to the point, Louie and Shio stand forward and you’ll start with the magic training.”

Louie nodded and pulled out his staff, ready for the training. Shio sighed and summoned his Keyblade. He looked straight at Merlin and said, “Um…I-I’m kinda new to this whole magic thing.”

“Ahh, I forgot that you’re new to the Keyblade thing.” Merlin said with a chuckle. He waved his wand in the air and then pointed it at Shio’s Keyblade. “Now, when I tell you to, say the word ‘Fire’.” Then he waved his wand in a circle motion and the furniture began to move around the room. “This shall be target practice. Attack the furniture with you’re magic, and don’t worry about the furniture. It won’t be destroyed.”

Louie and Shio nodded. They watched the furniture move around them and they began to focus on them. Louie started first, by looking at one of the chairs and yelling, “Thunder!!” The chair was blasted back, but continued with the other furniture.

“Nice shot!” Shio said with a smile.

Louie twirled his staff in his hand and said, “That’s how it’s done!”

Merlin turned toward Shio and said, “Alright my boy, your turn. Choose one of the pieces of furniture and wait till I give you the signal.”

“Right!” Shio said looking at a bookshelf. He looked at it and then glanced at Merlin, waiting for him to give him the signal to attack.

Merlin nodded and said, “Now!”

Shio backed up and spun his Keyblade in his hand and then pointed it at the bookshelf. He grinned and said, “Have a nice day! Fire!!!” When he said this, a fire blast ignited from his Keyblade and blasted the bookshelf.

Merlin smiled and said, “There ya go, my boy! Now you can use magic in any situation.”

“Awesome!!” Shio said as his Keyblade disappeared from his hand. “Thank you very much, Merlin!”

After Shio said this, an explosion was heard and screams were heard as people were running. Shio, Louie, Max, and Merlin ran out of the house and saw a pillar of smoke going up into the sky. “I say, that looks like is coming from the castle!!” Merlin said looking at the castle in the distance.

Shio smirked and said, “Louie, Max….we’re gonna go and see what we can do to help!!”

Max and Louie nodded and ran towards the bailey to get over to the castle gates. As they arrived in the bailey, a group of silver-slender creatures appeared in front of them.

The three grabbed their weapons and was about to attack, when the creatures surrounded them. Shio looked at them and said, “Nobodies….how do we attack, Louie?”

“Like we normally do with the Heartless…” Louie smiled as he shot a fire ball at the creature from his staff.

Max and Shio nodded and rushed forward to attack the Nobodies as well. Max quickly took out his skateboard as he rushed and then bashed the Nobodies with his shield one, by one.

Shio tried to hit one of them with his Keyblade, but somehow it dodged. He glared and then saw it about to attack. Then out of nowhere, he heard a faint voice that said, Quickly move behind it…use the reversal to attack it…

Shio heard the voice and then shook his head. He saw the Nobody ready to attack and then he quickly moved behind it and then slashed the Nobodies’ back. “Wow!! It worked!!” Shio said smiling as he watched the Nobody disappear.

Shio noticed Max and Louie walk towards him, after they defeated the rest of the Nobodies. Shio turned and then saw a castle where the smoke was coming from. He rushed towards it, having Louie and Max follow close behind.

They continued their way towards the castle, defeating numbers of Nobodies and Heartless as they went along. They reached the stairs to the front gate and Shio noticed something…or rather, someone.

Shio saw a girl, around his age with raven black hair. She was unconscious and had a bunch of Heartless Soldiers surrounding her. Shio ran towards them and then said, “Fire!” He shot a fire blast from his Keyblade and watched one of the Soldiers disappear, seeing a heart leave the remains of the Heartless. “Back away from her!” he said as he slashed another Heartless.

The rest of the Heartless looked at Shio and crept away slowly, which gave Louie and Max enough time to defeat them.

Shio glanced back at the girl and quickly sat her up. “H-Hey…miss…wake up…” he said nervously.

“Ngh…” the girl said as she awoke. She had steel-gray eyes, which was staring straight at Shio’s dark blue eyes.

Shio smiled and said, “It’s good to see you’re alright.”

The girl’s face turned a little red, when Shio said this. She looked up at him again and said, “W-Who are you??”

“My name is Shio…” Shio said with a smile, as he introduced himself. He moved out of the way and pointed at Louie and Max. “Those two are the ones that helped me defeat the Heartless around you. The duck is named Louie and the dog is named Max.”

Max and Louie smiled and waved a little at the girl.

The girl slightly waved and then slowly stood up. “T-Thank you….for saving me.”

“Eh, don’t worry about it.” Shio said with a smile. “By the way, I never really caught your name…”

“Oh, right…” the girl said as she fixed her hair, putting it behind her ear. “My name is Yenna. Umm…I’m the princess of Radiant Garden…”

Shio’s jaw dropped and said, “Your a princess?!” He really didn’t see this girl being a princess. She dressed normally, like he did…no way she was a princess.

“Umm…yeah.” Yenna said with a smile. “My mom is the queen of Radiant Garden, her name is Kairi…”

Louie and Max turned they’re heads when they heard this. “W-Wait…your mother is Kairi??” Louie asked looking straight at Yenna.

Yenna nodded slightly nodded, in response to Louie’s question.

“So what does that mean, Louie??” Shio asked scratching the back of his head. “Her mom is the queen of this world….and her name is Kairi, what’s the big deal??”

Louie sighed and just face palmed. Max cleared his throat and said, “Remember when we were talking about Sora. Well, Sora’s wife was Kairi, the princess of heart of this world.”

Shio now had a shock look on his face. He turned to Yenna and said, “T-That means…y-you’re the daughter of the legendary Keyblade master, Sora??”

Yenna smiled and then nodded. “Yeah…but I didn’t know him…he was always away when I was little.”

“I-I see…” Shio said with a sigh. He looked back at the front gate of the castle and said, “Yenna, I’ll ask that you please stay here. I don’t feel like you getting hurt right now.”

Yenna nodded and then watched Shio, Max, and Louie run up the stairs to the front gate of the castle.

When Shio and the others arrived at the front gate, they were shocked. They saw a huge Heartless, with four legs and two tusks in the front of his face. It saw them and roared loudly.

Shio gulped and said, “Louie…what is that thing??”

“That would be called Behemoth…” Louie said, remembering what his uncle has said about him, Goofy, and Sora fighting one in the keyhole at Hollow Bastion.

Shio nodded and summoned his Keyblade to his hand and got in a fighting stance. “OK then…let’s get this show on the road!!” he said as all three of them got ready to attack the Behemoth Heartless.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Chapter 9]The Behemoth roared and rushed towards Shio, Louie, and Max. The ground trembled as this huge Heartless ran towards the three.

“Move it guys!!” Shio said as he dodged to the left side of the Behemoth, while Louie and Max moved the right side.

Louie then pointed his staff to the sky and said, “Thunder!!” Soon a lighting bolt stuck the Behemoth, but it didn’t do too much damage to it.

“Cover me Louie!!” Max said as he rushed in and jumped up on the Behemoth’s back. He ran towards the head and was about to hit it, but he was then slammed into the ground by the Behemoth as he shook his head.

Shio saw this and watched as Max was slammed into the ground. “Max!!” he yelled. He glared at the Heartless and then threw his Keyblade at the Behemoth’s tusk and said, “Hey ugly!! Over here!!”

The Behemoth roared and rushed towards Shio, giving Louie enough time to help Max.

Louie ran towards Max and then pointed his staff at him and said, “CURE!!” A few leaves appeared around Max and his wounds were healed instantly. “Alright…just take it easy, buddy…” Louie said helping Max up.

The Behemoth got closer to Shio as he ran towards him. Shio quickly ran and slid under the Heartless’s underside. He smirked and then quickly grabbed the Behemoth’s tail and jumped up onto its back. He rushed and then tossed his Keyblade, making it hit the back of the Behemoth’s head.

The huge Heartless roared and fell down. A loud thud was heard and Shio turned to Louie and said, “Dude! I don’t know how long he’ll be out…help me out!!”

Louie nodded and then ran and said, “Here I come!! Fire!!” He smirked as he saw five fire blasts emerge from his staff, one right after the other. They all hit they’re mark, the Behemoth’s big head.

“Sweet!!” Shio said jumping off the Heartless’ back. He then threw his Keyblade at the Behemoth’s head. “That should be enough to kill that fricken’ Heartless…”

Then both him and Louie saw Behemoth quickly get up. Shio and Louie backed up as the Heartless roared at them.

Shio looked at the Heartless and said, “There has to be…a way to beat him…” Then he saw his Keyblade begin to glow and then saw a small yellow orb next to his feet. He picked it up and said, “W-What is…this??” Then a bright light engulfed him and then he saw Max glow as well. He then saw Max disappear and then the light dimmed and saw in his hand not one…but TWO Keyblades. But the second one was different from his Divine Remnant. This one was blue with stars and half moons, which was called Star Seeker.

Louie saw Shio and his clothes bright red with a few small symbols. He also looked at Shio’s hands and saw two Keyblades. “S-Shio!! That’s what the three fairies gave you!! You’re using Drive Max Forms…that is called Valor form!” he said.

Shio looked at himself and said, “But where’s Max??” Then he heard a familiar voice in his head.

“Shio, I’m right here…” the voice said.

“Max??” Shio asked as he heard Max’s voice in his head. “What are you doing in my head??”

Max chuckled and said, “One of the things that happen when you use the drive forms. Now let’s kick that thing’s butt!!”

Shio nodded and he flipped his Keyblades in his hand and then rushed towards the Behemoth. “Louie…cover me!!” he yelled.

Louie nodded and continued to shoot fire blasts from his staff at the Behemoth’s head.

The Behemoth roared and didn’t see Shio rushing towards him. Shio smirked and then used both of his Keyblades to slash the four legs of the Heartless.

The Behemoth roared again as he fell to the ground and landed on his stomach.

“That’s more like it!” Shio said as he then jumped up onto the Behemoth’s back and began to melee on the back of his head. He continued this until he saw him disappear, then a small heart appeared and rose into the sky.

Louie smiled and said, “Shio…that was awesome!!”

Shio smiled and said, “Thanks!” Then the light appeared again and Shio’s clothes reverted to normal and his second Keyblade disappeared. He then looked next to him and saw Max.

“OK…being in your head…” Max said holding his arms. “Kinda…weird…”

Shio shrugged and said, “Well it was weird having you in my head…” Then he saw Yenna walk over towards them and his face turned a light shade of red.

“Shio!! You’re alright!!” Yenna said with a smile.

Shio glanced at Yenna and said, “Ummm…of course! I am the new Keyblade wielder after all!”

Louie and Max looked at each other and then coughed at the same time, saying, “Swell head!”

Shio shook his head and said, “Well, ignore those two.”

“It’s alright.” Yenna giggled a little. “By the way…this began to glow when I first meet you.” She then pulled out a small necklace with a crown out from her pocket.

Shio looked at it and then saw his Keyblade being summoned up in his hand. He then saw the necklace float into the sky shoot a small light towards the sky, making a keyhole. “What’s that??” he asked.

Max smiled and said, “That is a keyhole. Use your Keyblade to lock it.”

Shio nodded and spun his Keyblade a few times in his hand and then pointed it towards the keyhole and saw a small light stream went into it. As it went in, a lock sound was heard.

Louie smiled and said, “Now we locked the keyhole in our first world!!”

“Does that mean you have to leave??” Yenna asked.

Shio scratched the back of his head and said, “W-Well…I’m sorry. But I promise we’ll be back.” Then he saw Yenna hand him a small star like charm. “What’s this??”

“It’s called a Wayfinder. It’s a lucky charm, it’ll keep you safe.” Yenna said with a smile.

Shio nodded and said, “Thanks Yenna…”[/spoiler][/spoiler][/center]

[Super Chaos Sonic]

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[Frybread002]

Boo! No fair, you stole my idea!
(my fan-fic is like 5 topics below this one )

I like it. You really should keep it! If anything, I think your fan-fic is WAAAY! better than mine.


P.S. Let's have a little contest here, shall we friend? Who can get the most popularity. How about it?

[Super Chaos Sonic]

I saw your fan fic. I wanted to write a KH one ever since.

And thank you. I'm glad your enjoying my fic.

Sure I guess. I'm game for a contest of popularity...

[Frybread002]

Oooh...Is that hesitation I sense...kekekekek...Just don't forget the project my pals and I are planning...kekekeke...

[Kōsuke Ueki]

Don't try and do this without the rest of your group, Frybread. We're all in this together for this contest. Do you have a planning team, Chaos?

[Super Chaos Sonic]

@Swift: Planning team as in..what exactly??

[Kōsuke Ueki]

For this fic, of course. Do you have other users help you with this fic in terms of chapters?

[Frybread002]

Booooo[size="3"]oooooooooooo!!!!![size="1"]!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![/size][/size] Don't support my enemy!!! If we're in to win it, then support me! Regarding the my fic, you always give me the cold shoulder [size="1"]why!?!?!?[/size]

Booooo[size="3"]oooooooooooo!!!!![size="1"]!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![/size][/size] Don't support my enemy!!! If we're in to win it, then support me! Regarding the my fic, you always give me the cold shoulder [size="1"]why!?!?!?[/size]

[Super Chaos Sonic]

@Swift: Yeah I got a planning team. Me, myself, and I. XD
Yeah, no...the only one getting these ideas is myself.

@Fry: Aww, don't be like that. I think your fic is pretty cool ^^

And just for future refernces...Shio is wielding his keyblade like Ventus does.

[Frybread002]

favoritism, favoritistm, favortism...

[Super Chaos Sonic]

Though Fry, I wouldn't have thought of making a fic with journal entries. I assume you got the idea from 358/2 Days?? Cause if you did, that is 'effin awesome

[Frybread002]

BWAHAHAHAH!!! VICTOR-...erm...[size="2"]umm...[/size][size="1"]yeah...maybe I did...just a little...[/size]

[Super Chaos Sonic]

[quote name='Frybread002' timestamp='1298056499' post='5016673']
BWAHAHAHAH!!! VICTOR-...erm...[size="2"]umm...[/size][size="1"]yeah...maybe I did...just a little...[/size]
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Well like I said, interesting idea for that. ^^

On a different note, I just got Re:Coded today ^^

[Kōsuke Ueki]

You BETTER not spoil anything about it. Frybread didn't play it yet. Isn't that right?

[Super Chaos Sonic]

Won't spoil it. Besides, I won't be making many Re:Coded references...BBS on the other hand...maybe just a few.

[Kōsuke Ueki]

Frybread hasn't even finished the game yet, so let's hope Frybread doesn't read something involving Birth By Sleep at all in any of these chapters.

[Super Chaos Sonic]

All I did was put was a small hint of their existence in one of the chapters in Olympus.

[Frybread002]

Actually, during your prolouge, you've pretty much given my a complete synopsis of the game. TSA made a big mistake by actually telling me the connections between both games. What he didn't know however, was the infomation that I already acquired from trailors, reviews, and gossip. If anything, just the though still ticks me off. Speaking of which, TSA, did you carried out your final penalty yet?

[Super Chaos Sonic]

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@Frybread: Well, the ending to the prologue, I kinda made up...sorry if this fic is kinda ruining most of the KH series for ya...^^;

[Frybread002]

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@Frybread: Well, the ending to the prologue, I kinda made up...sorry if this fic is kinda ruining most of the KH series for ya...^^;
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Wha-... YOU SON OF A B****!!!

Sorry, it's like the only cool one liner I think of from a movie.

It's cool. If anything, that pretty much debunks what I was thinking of. (BTW, the last chapters are kinda lacking. It's missing that UMPH!! part)

[choasshadow]

cool

[Super Chaos Sonic]

[quote name='Frybread002' timestamp='1298597653' post='5032554']
Wha-... YOU SON OF A B****!!!

Sorry, it's like the only cool one liner I think of from a movie.

It's cool. If anything, that pretty much debunks what I was thinking of. (BTW, the last chapters are kinda lacking. It's missing that UMPH!! part)
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UMPH!! part...how exactly?

@Choasshadow: Thanks ^^

[Frybread002]

Hahahaha!! So that's the role that Yenna plays eh?

Alright friend, I wanna apologizes for delaying my post. It was just that I wanted to wait for about a month before I made it, that way before it's on the first page again, people would still have a chance to look at it (meaning, as I make this post, it's still technically "alive")

okay! Time for my crituqe!!

Do you recall how I said it's missing that "UMPH!" Well, I'll be honesty man,I personally felt like the story was a bit rushed and that I wasn't able to really connect with the characters. If anything, I can totally respect you doing most of the things that Sora and friends did in the games, but just with your characters. Heck, isn't that what fan-fiction is about? HECK!! That's what the role-play we're both in is about. To tell a story that was made by fans for fans. With that being said, the real major problem I personally face, was just how dull and empty all the characters were. Like, if anything, my favorite chapters were actually the first two chapters. Where Shio and Ryuusaki were on Destiny Islands, just hanging out and having light sparing matches. Something me and one of my friends do in real-life (with one of us being serious injured of course!) So at that moment, that was an actual moment I could relate with Shio and Ryuusaki. Them being friends.

But when Ryuusaki's personality did a 180 and just completely changed. The fic started to went down-hill for me. Now, don't get me wrong, the real major problem was that everything was just too rushed for my taste. Like, what made me drawn to the begining of the first game, was that everyone (Sora, Riku, and Kairi) had all had the mutual feeling of wanting to explore and find new places to discover and were sick of staying on their lsland. However, when they actually found out that there was much deeper meaning to wanting to get away from their home, they slowly but surely dragged into the realm of Kingdom Hearts. How that ties in with your fic, I truely felt like you were in a hurry to get to each chapter and get it done, leaving the reader with no time to really feel anything towards the character.

Now, in REVERSED/[i]rewake[/i], I personally like Shio because he's more fleshed out and I can actually interact with him via. Akira. However, the problem I seriously hate in the role-play, was how little attention Shio had. Like, if anything, I'm personally am beating myself up for not being able to include Shio without ignoring him and furthering Akira himself. With that being said, when the "Finished Product" does come, I'm more than willing to plan with you about Shio's future development in the role-play. Like, one of my characters, will be on Hallow Bastion and with that enough, I'm already thinking that he's connected to Yenna and eventually, that character (I'm not sure if I can reveal his name just yet, so I'll call him "Don.") he runs into Shio that way. But that's just something off the top of my head.

[center][b][u]Closing Comments[/u][/b][/center]

If you are able to completely re-do the series and put more life into each chater and take your time telling the story. I would more than willingly by an advid reader. With that in mind, can recall when I said something like "This fic is waay better than mine!" ? Well, what I mean by that, is that your fic has the possibility to actually tell a story. In my fic, it was only about various journal entries by various characters in the role-play. So I personally couldn't tell a story through that. In short, your fic has the possibility to be considered a far bigger success than the role-play we're currently in. Heck, even though it took 4 guys to bring it to you guys (the fans of the series), it is only able to get soo far because of the dedication we, as the Staff are willing to put in, and how willing the Fans are going to contribute.

P.S. Congrats, I'm personally am thinking about putting you on the planning committe for the sequel. Would you accept?

[Super Chaos Sonic]

Thanks for that. I'll try and use some of what you said in writing the next chapter.

And, yes of course I'd accept!