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Alrighty, I've been thinking of this new idea. This idea is a new Archetype, and this Archetype is called "Half-Brutes" or something. So, as my first post AND card, I'm going to show one of those cards that i've made. Hopefully you guys enjoy this card, as I did. Anyhow, Here's the card! :D
[img]http://img341.imageshack.us/img341/1474/inyuashaelitehb.jpg[/img]
[i][b]Lore :[/b][/i]
[i]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. Special Summon this card only by tributing 1 "Half-Brute" monster in your Deck to the Graveyard. During the End Phase this card is Special Summoned, take control of one monster that your opponent controls. Return the monster when this card is destroyed.[/i]

Sorry it's not in spoiler, figured I didn't have to considering it's only 1 card. Anyhow,
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[quote name='judedudemude' timestamp='1297735493' post='5009583']
pretty good but this is off an anime seires so in needs to e in the [b]pop culture[/b] but snice im a fan of inyusha i wont really say anything to anyone
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Sorry friend, but when the effect, type, etc. isn't related to the anime - It doesn't need to be in pop culture. Anyhow, Thanks! :D

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[quote name='.Inyuasha' timestamp='1297735203' post='5009566']
Alrighty, I've been thinking of this new idea. This idea is a new Archetype, and this Archetype is called "Half-Brutes" or something. So, as my first post AND card, I'm going to show one of those cards that i've made. Hopefully you guys enjoy this card, as I did. Anyhow, Here's the card! :D
[img]http://img341.imageshack.us/img341/1474/inyuashaelitehb.jpg[/img]
[i][b]Lore :[/b][/i]
[i]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. Special Summon this card only by tributing 1 "Half-Brute" monster in your Deck to the Graveyard. During the End Phase this card is Special Summoned, take control of one monster that your opponent controls. Return the monster when this card is destroyed.[/i]

Sorry it's not in spoiler, figured I didn't have to considering it's only 1 card. Anyhow,
[b]Comment/Rate/Rate[/b]
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My opinion of your card is that it is very Over-Powered. The requirement to special summon it (sending a specific monster from your deck to graveyard) is beneficial rather than a draw back because it thins out your deck and sets up your graveyard for further plays. So basically it is a free 2300 ATK Special Summon and on top of that, it lets you steal an opponents monster during the End Phase. That's broken. So I would recommend nerfing it.

Also, your OCG grammar is a bit out of whack. The correct grammar for your card would be:

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from the hand by sending 1 "Half-Brute" monster from your Deck to the Graveyard. During the End Phase of the turn this card was Special Summoned, take control of 1 monster your opponent controls. When this card is destroyed, return control of that monster to your opponent.

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[quote name='Superdoopertrooper' timestamp='1297769439' post='5010139']
My opinion of your card is that it is very Over-Powered. The requirement to special summon it (sending a specific monster from your deck to graveyard) is beneficial rather than a draw back because it thins out your deck and sets up your graveyard for further plays. So basically it is a free 2300 ATK Special Summon and on top of that, it lets you steal an opponents monster during the End Phase. That's broken. So I would recommend nerfing it.

Also, your OCG grammar is a bit out of whack. The correct grammar for your card would be:

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from the hand by sending 1 "Half-Brute" monster from your Deck to the Graveyard. During the End Phase of the turn this card was Special Summoned, take control of 1 monster your opponent controls. When this card is destroyed, return control of that monster to your opponent.
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[b]Over-Powered[/b] I totally agree, now that I look back at this. I'll be thinking on how to fix it, as I don't want to to be OPed. Hopefully, I don't UP it. Anyhow, +Rep is coming your way! (As there is OCG fix AND constructive criticism.) Once again, thanks for the advice/criticism I am now currently thinking. Will update it soon! :D

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[quote name='MechaSanphred' timestamp='1297805524' post='5010891']
I think it is a little strong, and OCG is a bit off. But otherwise, I think this is a good start to YCM as your first card.
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Thanks Sanphred. Always nice to see that someone likes my cards. Anyhow, As my other post says (Replying to superdoopertrooper) I agree that it's a little OPed, and if I should fix OCG before updating card, I will. (As superdoopertrooper showed me it) Anyhow, Thanks again! =3
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[quote name='Deathcore' timestamp='1297808029' post='5010977']
It's based off a show. Even if the effect and type isn't related to the show, it goes in pop culture. That's what I understand anyway.

Basically everyone said what needs to be said, a little strong and bad OCG.
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Well, If this truthfully belongs in pop culture, than I would need someone to tell me how to move posts. :P Thanks for enforcing the other posts though, :D

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This card, I believe, is a good card. It is a little OPed, which has been said. Another thing that has been said is the OCG, it's a little off. The idea of the card and (If it's going to happen) the idea of the archetype is awesome, as i'm interested in things like this. (Cross from humans and other things..:D) I believe, if you get a little bit better on choosing where to post cards, and your OCG you'll become an awesome card maker. For your first card, I believe this is epic. I rate it a 9.5/10. Great job!


[b]Keep it Up![/b]

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