plz comment this

[Leirondo Essen Darron]

[img]http://img705.imageshack.us/img705/2097/342464.jpg[/img]
plz comment this/help me get better

[Face McShooty]

please post the effect under the card so people can correct your OCG (original card grammar)
in terms of level/ATK and DEF, its UP'd (underpowered)

[Leirondo Essen Darron]

Effect:
When this card is summoned you can send one spell,trap to the graveyard to have this card the following effects:
*if send spell card this card gains 1000 attack if attacked.
*if send trap card you can gain 1000 life points.
When this card is destroyed you can send two spell, trap cards to the graveyard to special summon this card.

2000/2500

also got this one:

INVINCIBLE IRE OF RA
LEVEL:7
LIGHT-TYPE MONSTER-WARRIOR-[EFFECT]
When this card is summoned you can put one counter on this card MAX:3 for each turn this card goes in battle.When this card has 3 counters on it you can special summon THE WINGED DRAGON OF RA excluding the summoning conditions.
att1000/def2000

and this one:

INSUPERABLE OF RA
Level:4
LIGHT-TYPE MONSTER-WARRIOR-[EFFECT]
You can special summon 1 level 4 or lower monster that has RA in it's name,destroy that monster at the end phase.

[:bcoe]

[[When this card is summoned, you can send one spell,trap to the graveyard to have this card the following effects:
*if send spell card this card gains 1000 attack if attacked.
*if send trap card you can gain 1000 life points.
When this card is destroyed you can send two spell, trap cards to the graveyard to special summon this card.]]


Here's what I would do:
Once per turn, during your Main Phase, you can remove from play 1 spell or trap card in your Graveyard to activate one of the following effect.
Spell: When this card is attacked, it gains 1000 ATK. This effect applies until your opponents next End Phase.
Trap: Gain 1000 Life Points.
When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can discard 2 spell or trap cards from your hand to special summon this card from your Graveyard.

I think its a well balanced card. Your OCG is a bit off tho, it can be hard to know where the costs come from (i.e. hand or field).

[AsterikcAde]

Find a better pic for this card, the effect isn't bad and I don't usually care for OCG but I suggest you clean up the wording a bit. Since you're a new member, I won't go that hard on ya. 6/10

[Leirondo Essen Darron]

[quote name='AsterikcAde' timestamp='1298851494' post='5039736']
Find a better pic for this card, the effect isn't bad and I don't usually care for OCG but I suggest you clean up the wording a bit. Since you're a new member, I won't go that hard on ya. 6/10
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but i like it the photo and 6/10 came on! i think it good also thanx if you can give me nore detail i will a love that!