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Atem Gravekeeper's King
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This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Special Summoned except by Tributing 2 "Gravekeeper(s)". For every monster Tributed for this card's summoning, you can destroy a card on the field up to that number. The Summoning of this card and it's effect cannot be negated while "Necrovalley" is face-up on the field. X is equal to the number of "Gravekeeper(s)" in your graveyard X 700

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[color=#1C2837][font=tahoma, arial, verdana, sans-serif]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing at leased 2 "Gravekeeper's" monsters you control. When this card is Special Summoned, you can destroy cards on the field equal to the amount of tributed monsters used to Special Summon this card. The Summoning of this card and it's effect cannot be negated while "Necrovalley" is on the field. Increase the ATK of this card by 700 for each "Gravekeeper's" monster in your Graveyard.[/font][/color]
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[color=#1C2837][font=tahoma, arial, verdana, sans-serif]I think this is the correct OCG[/font][/color]
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[quote name='ProDizine' timestamp='1299472489' post='5057230']
[color="#1c2837"][font="tahoma, arial, verdana, sans-serif"]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing at leased 2 "Gravekeeper's" monsters you control. When this card is Special Summoned, you can destroy cards on the field equal to the amount of tributed monsters used to Special Summon this card. The Summoning of this card and it's effect cannot be negated while "Necrovalley" is on the field. Increase the ATK of this card by 700 for each "Gravekeeper's" monster in your Graveyard.[/font][/color]
[color="#1c2837"][font="tahoma, arial, verdana, sans-serif"]
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[color="#1c2837"][font="tahoma, arial, verdana, sans-serif"]I think this is the correct OCG[/font][/color]
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Thanks for help. i really appreciate it.
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I believe the correct OCG is:

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Special Summoned except by Tributing 2 "Gravekeeper(s)". For [b]each [/b]monster Tributed for this card's [b]S[/b]ummoning, you can destroy a card on the field[s] up to that number[/s]. The Summoning of this card and it's effect cannot be negated while "Necrovalley" is face-up on the field. [s]X[/s][b]This card's ATK[/b] is equal to the number of "Gravekeeper(s)" in your [b]G[/b]raveyard [b]x[/b]700[b].[/b]

Very well done for one of your first tries. I can see a lot of effort in it. I believe there should be a comma in it's name after "Atem". It would make it look better. Otherwise, great! The only other problem is the way you posted it. To post properly:

1. After you generated your card in the cardmaker, click it.
2. A code appears below it. Copy and paste it into the thread. And you're done!

Very nice card overall, although a little UP. To fix it, you could either raise the defense or heighten it's attack gain. It would be amazing if you did all that and added an extra effect for creativity. For now, 8/10. Well done!
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[quote name='MechaSanphred' timestamp='1299534024' post='5058690']
I believe the correct OCG is:

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Special Summoned except by Tributing 2 "Gravekeeper(s)". For [b]each [/b]monster Tributed for this card's [b]S[/b]ummoning, you can destroy a card on the field[s] up to that number[/s]. The Summoning of this card and it's effect cannot be negated while "Necrovalley" is face-up on the field. [s]X[/s][b]This card's ATK[/b] is equal to the number of "Gravekeeper(s)" in your [b]G[/b]raveyard [b]x[/b]700[b].[/b]

Very well done for one of your first tries. I can see a lot of effort in it. I believe there should be a comma in it's name after "Atem". It would make it look better. Otherwise, great! The only other problem is the way you posted it. To post properly:

1. After you generated your card in the cardmaker, click it.
2. A code appears below it. Copy and paste it into the thread. And you're done!

Very nice card overall, although a little UP. To fix it, you could either raise the defense or heighten it's attack gain. It would be amazing if you did all that and added an extra effect for creativity. For now, 8/10. Well done!
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Thanks for the help just started like 2 days ago haven't got the full spectrum on how to post but thks for the feedback
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