Daft Punk Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 [img]http://img13.imageshack.us/img13/6435/377922.jpg[/img] [spoiler=Lore]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower DARK monster from your Graveyard. Once per turn, you can tribute 1 DARK monster on your side of the field to destroy 1 card on your opponents side of the field. During battle between this attacking card and a Defense Position monster whose DEF is lower than the ATK of this card, inflict the difference as Damage to your opponent.[/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 first card in that OCG, sure youre great at card making. well balanced and sure its lot of great in it ,give you A for your first card Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sorin Markov Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 no ocg, great job for a newb why did you put Kazuki Takahashi name as the creator of your card? The Creator of your card is you. 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daft Punk Posted March 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 [quote name='Sorin Markov' timestamp='1299860760' post='5066672'] no ocg, great job for a newb why did you put Kazuki Takahashi name as the creator of your card? The Creator of your card is you. 9/10 [/quote] Meh, I was making the card and, well, I just decided to put that, since all of the real cards have it, I decided "Why not". Besides, I think it's fairly obvious that I made the card. Oh, and Thanks for the rate. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beefman Posted March 12, 2011 Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 If you want to make the effect shorter, you can change the last sentence to: "This card inflict Piercing damage." Check Cyberdark Horn, it works Well, this is a very good card, and for a first, I'm amazed. Well done at everything. 9.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daft Punk Posted March 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 [quote name='MechaSanphred' timestamp='1299893581' post='5067470'] If you want to make the effect shorter, you can change the last sentence to: "This card inflict Piercing damage." Check Cyberdark Horn, it works Well, this is a very good card, and for a first, I'm amazed. Well done at everything. 9.5/10 [/quote] Meh, I'm looking at it as we speak, and it looks...weird. I like how it looks better with the longer effect. Also, thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stan Alda Posted March 12, 2011 Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 [quote name='MechaSanphred' timestamp='1299893581' post='5067470'] If you want to make the effect shorter, you can change the last sentence to: "This card inflict Piercing damage." Check Cyberdark Horn, it works Well, this is a very good card, and for a first, I'm amazed. Well done at everything. 9.5/10 [/quote] The phrase "Piercing Damage" was only used once in the TCG. The original phrase is correct. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beefman Posted March 12, 2011 Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 [quote name='Jaeger' timestamp='1299897181' post='5067571'] The phrase "Piercing Damage" was only used once in the TCG. The original phrase is correct. [/quote] I know, it was just a suggestion to make it shorter, but he can do what he wants. It was not meant as criticism. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted March 12, 2011 Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 Pretty darn awesome. But just one thing: Make it LV 8, then it's Trade-Inable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daft Punk Posted March 13, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2011 [quote name='Darkplant' timestamp='1299911514' post='5067986'] Pretty darn awesome. But just one thing: Make it LV 8, then it's Trade-Inable. [/quote] Thanks. Will make that change ASAP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheFireFox Posted March 13, 2011 Report Share Posted March 13, 2011 [quote name='Sorin Markov' timestamp='1299860760' post='5066672'] no ocg, great job for a newb why did you put Kazuki Takahashi name as the creator of your card? The Creator of your card is you. 9/10 [/quote] i do that sometimes too its just to make the card look more realistic like it was made by the actual guy who created yugioh Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beefman Posted March 13, 2011 Report Share Posted March 13, 2011 [quote name='TheFireFox' timestamp='1300036316' post='5071275'] i do that sometimes too its just to make the card look more realistic like it was made by the actual guy who created yugioh [/quote] If you post here, you must rate the card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Holly and the Ivy Posted March 13, 2011 Report Share Posted March 13, 2011 99% No OCG, great effect, great choice for ATK and DEF points. Only problems are the name and circulationGreat job, your much, much better than I was when I started. PM me if you want to see what I mean. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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