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Mazaki Anzu

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Mario
[img]http://r20.img-up.net/SuperMariobemm.png[/img]



Yoshi
[img]http://l24.img-up.net/Yoshibpzfr.png[/img]


Kirby
[img]http://l94.img-up.net/Kirbykos3a.png[/img]


Samus
[img]http://n11.img-up.net/Samus0wyk3.png[/img]


Master Hand
[img]http://n70.img-up.net/MasterHandqvo4.png[/img]


-Yeah-
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For a new member, these are pretty good. Though, I would advise giving them more effects, as most of us, myself excluded, don't seem to like Vanilla monsters for whatever reason. You need to work on your OCG (Official Card Grammar) a bit though, MH's effect has a few grammatical errors of both kinds. It would correct it myself, but I haven't made a card in who knows how long.

I give them an 8/10. Keep up the good work.
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[quote name='ZombiePigman' timestamp='1301939825' post='5114145']
For a new member, these are pretty good. Though, I would advise giving them more effects, as most of us, myself excluded, don't seem to like Vanilla monsters for whatever reason. You need to work on your OCG (Official Card Grammar) a bit though, MH's effect has a few grammatical errors of both kinds. It would correct it myself, but I haven't made a card in who knows how long.

I give them an 8/10. Keep up the good work.
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thanks for the feedback. i'm german so english isn't my first language. what are vanilla cards? normal monsters? whats wrong with normal monsters?
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Normal monsters (aka Vanillas here) are usually not all that playable because they have no effect, so without support cards (Equip Spells, Field Spells, Traps, etc.), they are usually useless in playable decks.

I do plan to review your cards, but first, please actually post the images and not the image links. Refer to my first post for how to do that.
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[quote name='FTW (For The Wynn)' timestamp='1301940755' post='5114170']
Normal monsters (aka Vanillas here) are usually not all that playable because they have no effect, so without support cards (Equip Spells, Field Spells, Traps, etc.), they are usually useless in playable decks.

I do plan to review your cards, but first, please actually post the images and not the image links. Refer to my first post for how to do that.
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done but my cards are a bit large
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Indeed they are. Must be because you used something other than usual. Still though, it helps.

Super Mario- In all honesty, he needs higher ATK/DEF and some support cards. Not bad though for a beginning.

Yoshi- Also needs support.

Kirby- I would raise his ATK to 1000 at least. At most, 1500 ATK. He's meant to be a beatstick, but it doesn't work out well with the stats he has. Great OCG though.

Samus- Higher ATK (2500-2800) would be great. So would a little support.

Master Hand- "Special Summoned or Set" should just be "Special Summoned". Otherwise it is pretty decent, especially first turn.

Overall, I'm impressed by your grasp of English, as your English from a secondary language is better than most people with English as a primary language. What this really needs are more support cards (as if you didn't notice that).
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[quote name='FTW (For The Wynn)' timestamp='1301942289' post='5114212']
Indeed they are. Must be because you used something other than usual. Still though, it helps.

Super Mario- In all honesty, he needs higher ATK/DEF and some support cards. Not bad though for a beginning.

Yoshi- Also needs support.

Kirby- I would raise his ATK to 1000 at least. At most, 1500 ATK. He's meant to be a beatstick, but it doesn't work out well with the stats he has. Great OCG though.

Samus- Higher ATK (2500-2800) would be great. So would a little support.

Master Hand- "Special Summoned or Set" should just be "Special Summoned". Otherwise it is pretty decent, especially first turn.

Overall, I'm impressed by your grasp of English, as your English from a secondary language is better than most people with English as a primary language. What this really needs are more support cards (as if you didn't notice that).
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thank you =3
to mario: i gave him so low atk and def in order to make my opponent underestimate him and then i will activate the support cards
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here are some i made

[img]http://img845.imageshack.us/img845/7862/392009.jpg[/img]


[img]http://img861.imageshack.us/img861/7862/392009.jpg[/img]


[img]http://img845.imageshack.us/img845/1685/392009g.jpg[/img]

i'll make more later

whoops, i accedentally used the wrong mario! effect should be: for every mario or peach on the field, mario gains 100 ATK points. PLZ COMMENT ON HOW I COULD MAKE THESE BETTER
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if you want to post cards you should post your own thread

for the owner of this thread:

if English really is your secondary language, your good for a beginner
your English isn't bad, and your OCG isn't as bad as some of the others

i like it, but in terms of the card itself, it can be a bit buffed
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A "wow" for a first-timer.

In Master Hand, it says 500 points. I'd say it's 500 ATK and DEF. Also, put the lore (effect) on the bottom of a card so that we can fix OCG and comment but it's not required though.

8/10! I'd expect a good future in Custom Cards! Keep it up!
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