Demigod Dragon of Ra

[Heatherlee]

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Demigod Dragon of Ra
Card Lore: This card cannot be normal summoned or set, this card can only be special summoned by removing from play 3 face up monsters on your side of the field, this cards attack and defense points become the same as the total of the tributed monsters attack and defense respectively. Once per turn, you can send 1 face up monster you control to the graveyard to destroy 2 monsters on your opponents side of the field. If this card where to be destroyed you can send 1 other card on your side of the field to negate this cards destruction. When this card leaves the field, your opponent gains 3000 life points.

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[Yang Xiao-Long]

Looks like a good card for a new member; the pic is good and the OCG has a few errors, most of which are just mere capitalization errors.

OCG fix:

"This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 3 face-up monsters on your field. This card's original ATK and DEF are equal to the total respective ATK and DEF of the monsters used for this card's Special Summon. Once per turn, you can send 1 face-up monster you control to the Graveyard to destroy 2 monsters on your opponent's field. If this card is were to be destroyed, you can send 1 card on your field to negate this card's destruction. When this card is removed from the field, your opponent gains 3000 Life Points."


Now, my OCG is probably a bit off, so I'd wait for someone who's more experienced with OCG to come along and fix it.

This card can be OPed (overpowered) and UPed (underpowered) stat-wise. If you use monsters with low stats, this card will get a relatively low ATK and DEF, and vice-versa in regards with if you used monsters with higher stats.
Seeing as how this card is a Level 10, I'd say, in my opinion, that the two effects involving sending 1 card from your field are balanced. However, I'd lower the monster destruction for the first of the two to just 1 monster. Being able to destroy 2 monsters regardless of Level at the price of 1 card is OPed, so I might recommend either adding what Level monster(s) you're gonna be able to destroy, or just changing it to 1 monster you can destroy.
The Life Point gain for your opponent makes this a risky card to play. Either lower the Life Point gain by a couple 1000, or just take it out all together.

This is still a good card with quite the potential imo.
Since you're new, I'll rate this card 7/10
It's a good card, but it could be better. Just try again and again, and you should do fine in regards to making some good cards ;D

[Yogg-Saron]

Demigod = Half-God, half-human::half-immortal, half-mortal. Some good background info always helps cards out, even if the OCG and effect aren't completely up-to-par. Some questions you should answer would be; what makes it a Demigod? What or who did Ra mate with to form the Demigod?

A sub-par card with good background info can make it excellent in my books.

Not a fan of ratings but here it goes: 5/10; Include some background!

[iShaun]

OCG is out but nice idea for a card 6/10