Halo Set

[Lt Gravemind]

I'm relatively new here, so I wasn't exactly certain where the compromise was between the parody and realistic forums when attempting to create fan cards that could be put to fair use in an actual game. To be safe I simply created the thread in this forum. Thus I present to you what I have so far in my Halo card set, criticism welcome and encouraged. The set will be split into two parts, the UNSC and the Convenant.

[spoiler=United Nations Space Command]

[spoiler=Marine]
[img]http://img12.imageshack.us/img12/9096/411100z.jpg[/img]
The image for this card was acquired from this location: [url=http://browse.deviantart.com/?q=Marine%20halo&order=9&offset=24#/d2fuyky]Marine[/url]
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[spoiler=Orbital Drop Shock Trooper]
[img]http://img64.imageshack.us/img64/319/411100.jpg[/img]
The art for this card was created by Bungie artists as concept art for the game Halo 3: ODST and then released to the general public as far as I am aware. If there is anything to contradict this, please let me know.
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[spoiler=Flame Trooper]
[img]http://img705.imageshack.us/img705/319/411100.jpg[/img]
The art for this card was created by artists at Ensemble studios for the game Halo Wars and released to the general public.
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[spoiler=Spartan-III]
[img]http://img689.imageshack.us/img689/319/411100.jpg[/img]
The image for this card was acquired from this location: [url=http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=&section=&global=1&q=halo+noble#/d2xh43c]Spartan-III[/url]
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[spoiler=Spartan-II]
[img]http://img155.imageshack.us/img155/319/411100.jpg[/img]
The image for this card was acquired from this location: [url=http://browse.deviantart.com/digitalart/?q=halo&order=9&offset=240#/d21ckj1]Spartan-II[/url]
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[A.Prime]

1) Do not use fake types!! Soldier=Warrior
2)Your OCG is good... but you need a little work on it...

examp.
1st card:
This card gain 100 [b]ATK[/b] and lose 100 [b]DEF[/b] for every [b]Warrior[/b]-[b]T[/b]ype monster on the field exept[b] this card[/b].

Now do you get it?

Nice 1st try! 7/10

P.S. if you need tips about OCG (Official Card Grammar) just PM!

[Knight of Emotion]

Dam fake types! If your going to redo it just make them warriors....some errors on grammer and stuff but...since this is your first try this isn't all that bad...I've seen a lot worse.

Also one of the Errors is for the Spartan II. Idk if you use the term "Upon Being Summoned". but "When this card is Special Summoned or Synchro Summoned." Good ideas though.