crocruler Posted June 6, 2011 Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 [img]http://img19.imageshack.us/img19/4576/183622.jpg[/img] Whenever a level 5 or lower monster is Special Summoned, negate it's effect and banish it, unless its owner pays 1000 Life Points. Whenever a monster is banished by this card's effect, this card gains ATK equal to the banished monster's Level x100. If this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, all monsters that were banished by this card's effect are returned to their owner's Graveyard. This card is unaffected by card effects that target it. changes now added. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Classic Posted June 6, 2011 Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 [center][color="#708090"][font="Century Gothic"][b]Pic is ok. I suppose it's Balanced, possibly leaning towards UP'd, I'm not really sure... Possibly increase its ATK to 2000? Effect is original enough but contains wording issues and OCG error's. OCG/Wording Fix: Whenever a level 5 or lower monster is Special Summoned, banish it, unless its owner pays 500 Life Points. If this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, all monster's removed from play by this card's effect are returned to their owner's Graveyard. Could use some work but nice try ^^ 7/10 [/b][/font][/color][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
This Account is Unplayable Posted June 6, 2011 Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 [quote name='Classic' timestamp='1307383738' post='5260994'] [center][color="#708090"][font="Century Gothic"][b]OCG/Wording Fix: Whenever a level 5 or lower monster is Special Summoned, banish it, unless its owner pays 500 Life Points. If this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, all [b]monster's[/b] removed from play by this card's effect are returned to their owner's Graveyard. [/b][/font][/color][/center] [/quote] Should be plural - "monsters" - not possessive - "monster's". Otherwise, Classic's OCG fix looks about right. As for the card itself... it's not really very good. First of all, I'd be thinking "I have to tribute to get a monster with the same ATK as the monster I tributed?" Seeing as it is an anti-meta card, I wouldn't want to waste a Rai-Oh or Doomcaliber (Or Alius ) for this. Definitely needs a decent attack boost. Also, it's basically completely outclassed by Vanity's Fiend, which prevents any Special Summons at all. Good try though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crocruler Posted June 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 thanks for the advice guys. i'll try and improve it done changes to card and powered it up a bit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
This Account is Unplayable Posted June 6, 2011 Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 Whenever a level 5 or lower monster is Special Summoned, banish it, unless its owner pays 500 Life Points. Whenever a monster is banished by this card's effect, this card gains ATK equal to the banished monster's Level x100. If this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, all monsters that were banished by this card's effect are returned to their owner's Graveyard. OCG fixes right thar. Still, personally, don't see why I should use this instead of Vanity's Fiend, unfortunately I've got no ideas to add to the effect to change that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crocruler Posted June 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 i thought that agaisnt decks that special summon loads of monsters for synchro summons etc, it would be cool, because of the attck boost. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Classic Posted June 6, 2011 Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 [center][font="Century Gothic"][color="#000000"][b]Tristan got the OCG fix. Card is now leaning towards the OP side =P. But its overall better so my rate is now up to 8/10 [/b][/color][/font][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crocruler Posted June 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 [quote name='Classic' timestamp='1307388910' post='5261245'] [center][font="Century Gothic"][color="#000000"][b]Tristan got the OCG fix. Card is now leaning towards the OP side =P. But its overall better so my rate is now up to 8/10 [/b][/color][/font][/center] [/quote] lol thanks :T Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
This Account is Unplayable Posted June 6, 2011 Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 [quote name='crocruler' timestamp='1307388532' post='5261225'] i thought that agaisnt decks that special summon loads of monsters for synchro summons etc, it would be cool, because of the attck boost. [/quote] I suppose, but in my opinion it's inferior to Vanity's Fiend, which is a single Tribute for 2500 ATK and blocks all Special Summons. Also a lot of players will be willing to pay the extra 500 LP for the Special Summons. I'm just saying, if this card had something more that it could give then it'd be better, and more considerable for use over Vanity's Fiend. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crocruler Posted June 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 [quote name='Tristan T. Taylor' timestamp='1307389223' post='5261260'] I suppose, but in my opinion it's inferior to Vanity's Fiend, which is a single Tribute for 2500 ATK and blocks all Special Summons. Also a lot of players will be willing to pay the extra 500 LP for the Special Summons. I'm just saying, if this card had something more that it could give then it'd be better, and more considerable for use over Vanity's Fiend. [/quote] i'm workin at it xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
This Account is Unplayable Posted June 6, 2011 Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 Whenever a level 5 or lower monster is Special Summoned, banish it, unless its owner pays 500 Life Points. Whenever a monster is banished by this card's effect, this card gains ATK equal to the banished monster's Level x100. If this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, all monsters that were banished by this card's effect are returned to their owner's Graveyard. This card is unaffected by card effects that target it. There's your OCG fix, again. Now it's looking to have an actual use instead of (or even in the same deck as) Vanity's Fiend. Overall, I'd say it's a pretty good card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crocruler Posted June 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 [quote name='Tristan T. Taylor' timestamp='1307389794' post='5261288'] Whenever a level 5 or lower monster is Special Summoned, banish it, unless its owner pays 500 Life Points. Whenever a monster is banished by this card's effect, this card gains ATK equal to the banished monster's Level x100. If this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, all monsters that were banished by this card's effect are returned to their owner's Graveyard. This card is unaffected by card effects that target it. There's your OCG fix, again. Now it's looking to have an actual use instead of (or even in the same deck as) Vanity's Fiend. Overall, I'd say it's a pretty good card. [/quote] YES!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 6, 2011 Report Share Posted June 6, 2011 1st effect I see no use at all because everyone is willing to pay the 500 LP You should make it 1000 instead making it immune to the targeting effects should be fine though, so I'll give this 8.7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crocruler Posted June 7, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2011 [quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1307397561' post='5261687'] 1st effect I see no use at all because everyone is willing to pay the 500 LP You should make it 1000 instead making it immune to the targeting effects should be fine though, so I'll give this 8.7/10 [/quote] change added Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nghtwing Posted June 7, 2011 Report Share Posted June 7, 2011 You don't need to use "whenever" in OCG (I think you shouldn't ) Though, I think you could take out it's ATK-Increasing Effect to make it more balanced (Just My Opinion) ANYWAY, the name is original and the pic is very good It's effect could be a good waepon to combat my Low ATK Set - the Fairy's Party. You got 8.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crocruler Posted June 7, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2011 [quote name='Matheus Mariano II' timestamp='1307464824' post='5263742'] You don't need to use "whenever" in OCG (I think you shouldn't ) Though, I think you could take out it's ATK-Increasing Effect to make it more balanced (Just My Opinion) ANYWAY, the name is original and the pic is very good It's effect could be a good waepon to combat my Low ATK Set - the Fairy's Party. You got 8.9/10 [/quote] thanks, i might remove the atk boost, but i''l wait for more comments Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Exa Posted June 7, 2011 Report Share Posted June 7, 2011 My opinion is that it would be more balanced if you remove the ATK boost, but that's just my opinion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
This Account is Unplayable Posted June 7, 2011 Report Share Posted June 7, 2011 [quote]This card is unaffected by card effects that target it.[/quote] I did fix your last sentence earlier, but you didn't change it, just pointing that out. As for the ATK increase, keep it, chances are you won't get it often anyway, but it gives you a chance to make it a superior Vanity's Fiend. Still rivaled by Vanity's Fiend, of course, but they'd each have their own merit over the other. Good as it is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 7, 2011 Report Share Posted June 7, 2011 [quote name='crocruler' timestamp='1307464197' post='5263713'] change added [/quote] all right, then I'll raise my rate to 9.2/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crocruler Posted June 8, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 8, 2011 [quote name='Tristan T. Taylor' timestamp='1307480072' post='5264493'] I did fix your last sentence earlier, but you didn't change it, just pointing that out. As for the ATK increase, keep it, chances are you won't get it often anyway, but it gives you a chance to make it a superior Vanity's Fiend. Still rivaled by Vanity's Fiend, of course, but they'd each have their own merit over the other. Good as it is. [/quote] grammar change done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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