PGR Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 This is my first attempt at making a card so please give me your feedback on how I've done. [img]http://img820.imageshack.us/img820/6076/430090.jpg[/img] When this card is activated, discard three cards from your hand to activate one of these effects: -Equip this card to a monster on your side of the field. If the equipped monster is destroyed as a result of battle, send this card to the graveyard to Special Summon the destroyed monster to your side of the field in any position you choose, during your next stand-by phase. - Equip this card to one of your opponent's monsters. During each of your opponent's stand-by phases, the equipped monster loses 500 ATK. When the equipped monster's attack becomes 0, that card is destroyed. -Banish any two monsters from your hand to special summon 1 synchro monster from your graveyard to your side of the field in face-up ATK position. Equip this card to the selected monster. At the end of every turn, reduce the equipped monster's ATK by 500. When its ATK becomes 0, the equipped monster is destroyed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shadowserpent Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Really this is your first card. This is great for a first time. OCG seems really good to me, the image is nice, it actually seems pretty balanced. 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Altαir Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 In the third effect, I presume "Equip it" is referring to the card we're looking at? Um, there's an Equip Card which has basically same effect as the first one, "Ribbon of Rebirth? And it doesn't have the cost. I think this card would work lots better if it were a Quick-Play, and the second effect was like, a permanent 1500 loss. But I don't want to change the effect myself, unless you find it a better idea. All in all, it's a great card, though it's usefulness can be weak, in some areas The third one is amazing. It's balanced, and useful. I like it. I think a 9/10 is good, for it being your first card. You definitely understand the concepts of equality, though the discard 3 cards may be a bit too much to activate it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PGR Posted June 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Nine out of Ten on both of my first two ratings? I guess the card's better then I thought. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel of Silence Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Very good card. Useful effect, picture is great and fitting, not OP'd. 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zen-Psi Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 9/10 I applaud to you my friend, bravo!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Garthfunkle Vii Backwards Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 send this card to the graveyard to bring the destroyed monster back to your side of the field in any position you choose, during your next stand-by phase. simpfly by saying Special Summon words like hit are not ocg proper Remove from play is now "Banish" lower the equipped monster's ATK by 500. When its attack hits 0, the equipped monster is destroyed. lower is not ocg proper as well the equip monster loses 500 ATK. When the equip monster's ATK is 0, the equipped monster is destroyed your ocg is off some but not as bad as some other poeple try this http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Yu-Gi-Oh!_Official_Card_Game http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/243400-official-card-grammar-confusion/ http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=official%20card%20grammar http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=OCG Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 the only thing I'd change is you shouldn't say you can only use it once per duel that's a bit TOO rare shame you're weakening the synchro though, but overall it's very good for an early card 9.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted June 12, 2011 Report Share Posted June 12, 2011 THis is considered Great, but it has Many OCG error which is no problem. You'll learn yourself when you came at RC oftenly I see the potential here Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PGR Posted June 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 12, 2011 Ok, I fixed a few OCG errors and removed the "only once per duel." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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