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My old E-Hero [Remaking]


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[i]When you control a face up "Elemental HERO Neos": You can Special Summon this card (from your hand). When this card is Special Summoned this way: Both players can Special Summon 1 Level 4 monster from their respective Graveyard. During your third Standby Phase after this card is successfully Summoned on the field: You can add 1 card from the bottom of your Deck to your hand. Then shuffle your Deck. This card gains 100 ATK for each Set card on the field. You can destroy 1 Spell or Trap Card you control: Target 1 Spell or Trap Card your opponent controls; destroy it.[/i]

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When this card is Special Summoned [b]by it's own effect[/b]
During your third Standby Phase after this card is successfully Summoned [b]to[/b] the field:

You can add 1 card from the bottom of your Deck to your hand. <<<That sentence seems like it's got some incorrect... something... But it says " card from the bottom of your Deck " that could be anywhere. I just don't think that it's descriptive enough. Also why did you spotlight the word "HERO"?

In conclusion this seems like quite a valid card. Good work. B)

edit: Oh yeah and I forgot 8/10

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When you control a face up "Elemental HERO Neos": You can Special Summon this card (from your hand). When this card is Special Summoned this way: Both players can Special Summon 1 Level 4 monster from their respective Graveyard. During your third Standby Phase after this card is successfully Summoned: You can add 1 card from the bottom of your Deck to your hand. This card gains 100 ATK for each Set card on the field. You can destroy 1 Spell or Trap Card you control: Target 1 Spell or Trap Card your opponent controls; destroy it.

The mention of shuffling the deck after taking the bottom card probably shouldn't be there. In theory you shouldn't need to, because you shouldn't be using the effect to sneak a look at what's now at the bottom of your deck, and shuffling hasn't been mentioned in the ocg for a while. Neither should it read "Summoned on the field." There's no-where else it can be summoned to. If you mean that it still has to be around when the effect goes off, then it should probably be: "When this card is face-up on the field, during your third Standby Phase..."

On the whole it looks good. Requiring Neos seems a bit too specific. Perhaps make it an E Hero fusion, so it can be used in E HERO decks that don't use Neos, or at least let it use Neos Fusions in case you get it after you fused Neos.
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The pic and name match. Both are good.
I know it's correct but the "HERO" just looks odd to me. Maybe I'm just not used to it yet.
It seems balanced to me, I don't see anything that would break it.
OCG seems good, but Time Psyduck is correct, you don't need the "Then shuffle your deck." in there.
Overall it looks great. 9.5/10
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