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Lore:This card cannot be normal summoned or set this card can only be special summoned when your life points would be reduced to zero. Negate the damage and reduce your life points to one hundred. this cards ATK and DEF points are equal to a level 8 or lower monster on the field. During your End Phase you may discard a card and gain 100 life points.
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Uh huh
1. the b in Berserker should be capitalize
2. too many stars
3. m in machine should be capitalized in your card's type
OCG fix :This card cannot be Normal Summoned or set. This card can only be Special summoned when your Life Points are reduced to 0. When this card is Summoned you gain 100 Life Points. This card gains ATK and DEF equal to a level 8 or lower monster on the field.

So here's what I think. When your Life Points reaches 0, that's end game for you. I think you can rephrase that line. Perhaps something like
"This card cannot be Normal Summoned or set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your hand or deck when your opponent inflicts damage to your Life Points, greater than or equal to your remaining Life Points. Your Life Points are reduced to 100. This card gains ATK and DEF equal to a level 8 or lower monster on the field."

That can also be adjusted. IMO it'll be better if it's discarded from your hand to reduce damage inflicted so that you have 100 Life Points remaining. Then, only if this card is discarded for that effect, you can special summon it.

Also, you get a wide range of ATK and DEF from that effect. I think it should be special summoned in face-up Defence Position, and gain ATK and DEF of the monster that inflicted damage to your Life Points.

Sigh, now i feel like I talked too much. Make sense of the above. Hope these ideas help you in making better cards.
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