Mechanic Armature - Pheobe

[Minzy]

Lemme know whatcha think!
[img]http://img855.imageshack.us/img855/5253/96018.jpg[/img]

[Home Slice]

First of all remember to capitalize Normal Summoned, Special Summoned. For the first line I think it should say "This card can not be Normal Summoned or Set." Also change "Once per turn send 1 LIGHT monster on your side of the field to the graveyard to remove 1 monster on the field from play." to "Once per turn you can send 1 LIGHT monster on your side of the field to the graveyard to banish 1 monster."
Also the pic is over used :l try to find one that is less common around here.
IMO this card is a little underpowered since you tribute most of your light monsters by summoning this and banishing your opponents cards the last part of the effect is pretty useless unless you are facing an opponent with a solid light deck, except when yoor these could be wrong but this is an improvement from the originalu get a full field. Without that it would only do 300 points of damage.
But if you look at it another way this card can quickly clear your enemies field so it could be OPed in a way. Maybe nerf the card by making it not aloud to attack directly. Or you could nerf ATK to 2200 then make the tribute 2 or even 1900 with a tribute of 1.
Note: I am not great at OCG so there may be more mistakes

As a final rate I give you a solid 6/10. Maybe make this card a little more exciting if you ever decide to edit this card

[おジャマ・キング]

This is great. Just change "tuen" to "turn". 8/10

[Minzy]

[quote name='Home Slice' timestamp='1308427765' post='5293231']
First of all remember to capitalize Normal Summoned, Special Summoned. For the first line I think it should say "This card can not be Normal Summoned or Set." Also change "Once per turn send 1 LIGHT monster on your side of the field to the graveyard to remove 1 monster on the field from play." to "Once per turn you can send 1 LIGHT monster on your side of the field to the graveyard to banish 1 monster."
Also the pic is over used :l try to find one that is less common around here.
IMO this card is a little underpowered since you tribute most of your light monsters by summoning this and banishing your opponents cards the last part of the effect is pretty useless unless you are facing an opponent with a solid light deck, except when yoor these could be wrong but this is an improvement from the originalu get a full field. Without that it would only do 300 points of damage.
But if you look at it another way this card can quickly clear your enemies field so it could be OPed in a way. Maybe nerf the card by making it not aloud to attack directly. Or you could nerf ATK to 2200 then make the tribute 2 or even 1900 with a tribute of 1.
Note: I am not great at OCG so there may be more mistakes

As a final rate I give you a solid 6/10. Maybe make this card a little more exciting if you ever decide to edit this card
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1. Like I said, this is my first time making a card on this site in a while. In fact, it's over a year. So sorry about the overused picutre. Haven't seen any to compare it to.
2. It's overpowered AND underpowered?
3. I've never heard of or seen ANY card use the term "banish", only remove from play.

[Home Slice]

Its overpowered if you look one way and underpowered if you look the other but IMO its more OPed.
Banish is in the new OCG thus making it correct

[Time Psyduck]

It's not bad at all. It may be slightly weak for three tributes - perhaps up the ATK to 2600-2700, or make it two and drop the ATK. It's not OP'd, because it's a -3 to bring out, it's effect is a 1 for 1 that requires you to summon something, and unless the deck swarms to ridiculus lengths (in which case other cards may be the problem) the burn is probably only going to hurt other LIGHT decks. However, I'd suggest making the monster you remove have to be face-up - it gives your opponent the option to set stuff to get around the effect.

The ocg is changing. From July, it's being made clearer, with regards to costs and conditions and such. They're also introducing a few new terms, such as banish for remove from play.

Old ocg: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 3 LIGHT monsters you control. Once per turn, you can send 1 LIGHT monster you control to the Graveyard to remove from play 1 monster on the field. During your End Phase, inflict 300 damage to your opponent for each LIGHT monster on the field.

New ocg: Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. Must be Special Summoned by Tributing 3 LIGHT monsters you control, and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. Once per turn: You can send 1 LIGHT monster you control to the Graveyard; Banish 1 monster on the field. During your End Phase: Inflict 300 damage to your opponent for each LIGHT monster on the field.

[Minzy]

mmk, thanks for clearing that up everyone Guess I'm stuck in the old OCG ways haha :3 I'll edit it with the correct terms now and I'll try and find a new pic.