♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 11, 2011 Report Share Posted July 11, 2011 [center][center]New Archetype that, unlike most of my archetypes, is not about Synchros, but about Exceeds. Their all Beast monsters. Not Beast-Type monster but Beast monsters. I.E. Beast-, Winged Beast-, and Beast-Warrior-Type monsters. All have 1000 or less DEF. [b][u][size=4]Newest Card[/size][/u][/b] [IMG]http://i52.tinypic.com/mkvdz5.jpg[/IMG] [i][size=2]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 Level 4 "Frier Geist" monster from your Graveyard. While this card is an Xyz Material, you can detach this card to negate the Xyz Summon of a Rank 5 or lower Xyz Monster, and destroy that monster. If you do, this card is Banished. [/size][/i][/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center][hr] [Spoiler=EN001-005] [Spoiler=EN001] [img]http://i54.tinypic.com/9st3lj.jpg[/img] [i][size=1][size=2]If you control 1 other "Frier Geist" monster, you can Special Summon this card from your hand. Once per turn, by sending the top card of your Deck to the Graveyard, you can Release 1 "Frier Geist" monster to add 1 Beast-Type monster with 1000 or less DEF from your Deck to your hand[/size].[/size][/i][/spoiler] [Spoiler=EN002] [img]http://i55.tinypic.com/10ehipv.jpg[/img] [size=1][i][size=2]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can add 1 "Frier Geist" monster in your Graveyard to your hand. If that monster is Summoned this turn, its effect(s) are negated[/size].[/i][/size][/spoiler] [Spoiler=EN003] [img]http://i51.tinypic.com/kb37ea.jpg[/img] [size=2][i]2 Level 4 Monsters This card gains 300 ATK for each of its Xyz Materials. When a Level 4 monster is destroyed by an opponent's card (either by battle or by card effect), you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to add that card to your hand.[/i][/size][/spoiler] [Spoiler=EN004] [img]http://i53.tinypic.com/2pzd946.jpg[/img] [i][size=2]When this card destroys a monster by battle, you can send up to 2 cards from the top of your Deck to the Graveyard to Special Summon 1 "Free Fawn Token" (Beast-Type/EARTH/Level 1/ATK 500/DEF 500) for each sent card. During your End Phase, destroy all "Free Fawn Token" you control.[/size][/i][/spoiler] [Spoiler=EN005] [img]http://i53.tinypic.com/20kzpsy.jpg[/img] [size=1][i][size=2]If this card is destroyed by battle, you can add 1 "Frier Geist" monster from your Graveyard to your hand. Then, you can Banish this card in your Graveyard to return 1 "Frier Geist monster in your Graveyard to your Deck[/size].[/i][/size][/spoiler][/spoiler] [Spoiler=EN006] [img]http://i54.tinypic.com/2ynpbp4.jpg[/img] [size=1][i]2 Level 3 Monsters [size=2]Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to send the top card of your Deck to the Graveyard and destroy 1 face-up Level 6 or lower monster. While this card has no Xyz Material, you can Tribute this card and 1 other face-up monster your control to add 1 Banished Level 5 or lower Beast-Type monster to your hand[/size].[/i][/size][/spoiler] [Spoiler=EN007] [img]http://i52.tinypic.com/2ihq81t.jpg[/img] [i][size=1][size=2]While this card is in your Graveyard, you can Tribute 1 face-up "Frier Geist" monster you control to return this card to the top of your Deck. When this card is sent directly from your Deck to the Graveyard, Special Summon it. Then, when this card is removed from the field, Banish it[/size].[/size][/i][/spoiler] [Spoiler=EN008] [img]http://i51.tinypic.com/jzyyoj.jpg[/img] [i][size=1][size=2]When this card is Summoned, send the top card of your Deck to the Graveyard. When this Xyz Material is sent to the Graveyard, the Xyz Monster this card was attached to gains 1000 ATK until the End Phase[/size].[/size][/i][/spoiler] [/center][/center] [center][center][b][size=4]EN009[/size][/b] [/center][/center] [center][center][img]http://i56.tinypic.com/15mza77.jpg[/img] [/center][/center] [center][center][size=2][i]2 Level 3 Monsters Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to reduce the ATK of 1 monster on the field by 1000, until the End Phase.[/i][/size] [/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted July 11, 2011 Report Share Posted July 11, 2011 Fair enough for me. Mill + adding seems great Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 11, 2011 Trojjan Added. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Rai Posted July 11, 2011 Report Share Posted July 11, 2011 I really love the idea of it. Reminds me almost of Gladiator Beasts, but that's not a bad thing. Trojjan is abusable everywhere and is a great playable card. Makes Xyz Control decks more playable. Tigger is a great card. It'll probably be used for the fact it's a 1900 beater and makes instant Xyzs once you make another Level 4. Its effect is nice too, but probably won't be the first thing people will use Swaan is cool. Equeste for Frier Geist. Random comments: 1. Does the name mean anything? 2. Do you have the link for the Swaan image? I'd love it if you could post it <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 11, 2011 Lol thanks :3! Frier Geist is german for free spirit. According to translate anyways. And I'll pm you the image when I get a chance ^^. Most monsters in this deck will be beatsticky btw. Not all but most. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Gazzelle added Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 now that I'm back I can finally rate this, LLD strange for the Gazalle I'm unsure if you want to put restrictions on the tokens yes they only last 1 turn, but 1 turn is usually all you need 9.3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Bump~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 15, 2011 Buuuuump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Rai Posted July 15, 2011 Report Share Posted July 15, 2011 <3 Craane's image. I must have it along with Swaan :3 Gazelle seems good. A good splashable card that can get out Formula with Glow-Up or something. Craane is good but it seems slow. I would have preferred that it searched when it was Normal Summoned just for a little more speed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 16, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 16, 2011 :3 Thanks! I'll make some changes then when I make my next few cards. I'll pm you the images for Swaan and Craane :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 16, 2011 Report Share Posted July 16, 2011 so this means it'll be part of a set in here? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 16, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 16, 2011 Updated. Cammel Added. @ Rag: Yep gonna be a big set. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 16, 2011 Report Share Posted July 16, 2011 "When this card is sent directly from your Deck to the Graveyard, Special Summon it." That kind of makes this a little TOO easy to summon exactly what do you plan to do with it that made you give that effect? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2011 Easy Xyz Material. But, it's alright, it gets banished after it's removed from the field after being SS. Bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varionius Posted July 17, 2011 Report Share Posted July 17, 2011 Very nice, cool effect. 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wrathos Posted July 17, 2011 Report Share Posted July 17, 2011 These cards seem balanced enough. Interesting work. I have to say, the art you've found is amazing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2011 Bump~ Dinggo Added and Goose Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 18, 2011 Report Share Posted July 18, 2011 Goose's effect is meh personally I see it little more than a watered down and continuous version of Shrink, nothing more 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted July 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 28, 2011 Bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted August 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 3, 2011 Bump. Idk if the spoiler of Goose will work for you guys (it didnt work for me) so instead I left it out of a spoiler. New card added. Nibblers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mehmani Posted August 3, 2011 Report Share Posted August 3, 2011 [i]Wording/Grammar = 7/10[/i] [i]Creativity = 18/20[/i] [i]Balance = 25/30[/i] [i]Viability = 30/40[/i] 80% = B+ [i]Well done! You have received the joint second highest rating of all time on Alfred's reviewing scheme! Although you are tied with Noel Vermillion, you still receive a like for your efforts. Now, to the review-cave.[/i] Your grammar is...interesting. Again you combine titbits of Japanese OCG with mostly English OCG, however, both are used accurately. You don't use the new OCG, but as that has only been released for a short while I can excuse you a little for that. However, you got all the little realistic details right - serial numbers, Editions, correctly written Set IDs and for once on YCM, you used the Kazuki copyright clause. These counterweight your OCG flaws and leave you with a solid mark in the Wording & Grammar section. In terms of creativity, you did very, very well. The archetype has Lightsworn, D.D. and classic Beast influences. You clearly thought a lot about ideas when making this archetype, and the creativity adds to the realism overall. The name, the pictures (I never, ever mention cosmetic details but I have to credit you for how well you chose them), the consistency of the effects - the archetype took several wonderful concepts and fine-tuned them to inches away from perfection. For that, you take home an absolutely fantastic score in the Creativity section. In terms of balance, you did really well - again, you clearly thought about balance properly when designing the archetype, and it shows a lot. It gives the Xyz a bit of flair. It is a fast archetype and a great Xyz engine, but it lacks a punch, a real offensive power. You could power up the Xyz monsters a bit, for instance. For that, you drop a couple of marks. Viability sort of mirrors that - this archetype is definitely playable in its own deck, but it lacks real power. It is a great Xyz engine, but the archetype Xyz monsters just can't cut it. It's viable, but not brilliant, so you drop a couple of marks there. Overall you did very well. You just need to give the archetype boss monsters more power. Nothing else is an issue. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Rai Posted August 3, 2011 Report Share Posted August 3, 2011 Ahhhhhh, cute nibblers. Seems alright, but 1900 ATK for instant revival and some pretty decent destruction too seems overkill. I wouldn't suggest changing the effect because it's perfectly fine but reducing to perhaps 1700 would help even things out there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 3, 2011 Report Share Posted August 3, 2011 quite good pic for Nibblers don't really see anything wrong with the effect, but why Rank 5 or lower? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted August 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 3, 2011 Wow~ I actually scraped something above a "C" from Mikhail! Nice~! I'll definitly work on the strength of the Xyz's a bit. Thanks again for the comment Mikhail~. Cursed: Thanks (: Glad you like~. I could go with a lower ATK. I'm definitly keeping the effect as is, but I'll lower the ATK. Rag: Well, I haven't seen anyone use Rank 5 in an efficient and consistant method except Ravenous Black. If anyone were to Xyz Summon anything stronger, there's always Bottomless or Solemn. Also, I was shooting for something more creative (I made this after reading Mikhail's comment on my Mist Valley Support) and since I haven't seen any cards mention Rank yet, I figured I could create a card that not only detatches itself, but also specifically targets Xyz Monsters based on Rank. Thanks for the comments! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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