Varionius Posted July 11, 2011 Report Share Posted July 11, 2011 OK, this are my first cards, so don't be too harsh. [img]http://img641.imageshack.us/img641/5674/447411.jpg[/img] This card can only be Equipped to a Dragon-Type Monster. The Monster Equipped whit this card gains 500 ATK and loses 800 DEF. [img]http://img12.imageshack.us/img12/7084/447411d.jpg[/img] This card can be used to Ritual Summon "Phoenix The Inferno Dragon". You must also Tribute monsters from the field or your hand whose total Levels are equal or to the Level of the Ritual Monster you are attempting to Ritual Summon. [img]http://img64.imageshack.us/img64/5674/447411.jpg[/img] This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell card "Phoenix Fire Spirit". While this card is face up on the field, your Opponent can not activate Spell, Trap cards and Monster Effects. If this card Destroys a Monster card your Opponent's side of the field inflict 1000 Damage to your Opponent's Life Points. [img]http://img692.imageshack.us/img692/5674/447411.jpg[/img] You can Banish 2 Spell or Trap cards from your side of the field to Special Summon this card from your hand. [img]http://img535.imageshack.us/img535/5674/447411.jpg[/img] It is said that this dragon dies every time when the sun sets, and he is reborn every time when the sun rises. [img]http://img29.imageshack.us/img29/5674/447411.jpg[/img] This card can not be Normal Summoned or Set, this card can only be Special Summoned from your hand when there are 3 or more Dragon-Type monsters in your Graveyard. The ATK of this card becomes the number on Dragon-Type monsters in your Graveyard x700. Once per turn, you can remove one Dragon-Type monster from your Graveyard to to banish one Spell or Trap Card on the field. When this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon one Dragon-Type monster except "Water Hydra" from your Graveyard. [img]http://img8.imageshack.us/img8/5674/447411.jpg[/img] 1 Dragon-Type tuner+ 1 Dragon-Type non Tuner This card is also treated as a Spellcaster-Type monster. .When you Synchro Summon this card half the ATK of one face-up monster on the field until the End Phase. When this card is destroyed by Battle and sent to the Graveyard you can Special Summon One LV6 or lover Dark-Attribute Dragon-Type monster from your deck. That monster gains 500 ATK until the end phase. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BFG Studios Posted July 11, 2011 Report Share Posted July 11, 2011 ok, first of... don't double post... I see you learned that the hard way. Secondly, I know these are your first cards... but I see plenty of OCG (Offical Card Grammer) errors, too many for me to bother pointing out: You could just look over your Lores (Card Descriptions) and find a few mistakes yourself. If you still need help with your OCG, i might suggest you ask other users on this forum to give you help or go to the yugioh wikia to look at other real cards and compare your OCG to a real card's OCG. You can see the wikia here: http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Main_Page Lastly, the other thing that doesn't seem right is the balance with these cards. Balance is one of the harder things to achieve... but just take a second to look at your card's Level (# of Stars), Effect (if it has one), and ATK/DEF. Here are some tips: - The effect of "Cave Dragon" is OP'd (Overpowered). If it would be destroyed (by anything?) it is not... that means it stays on the field even if it would be attacked or by battle damage or any card effect. ...Please fix lol - For your Vanilla Monster (Non-Effect, or Normal, Monster), you don't need to capitalize any other words in its Lore other than words you would normally capitalize when having a normal conversation with people. - For your card, "Water Hydra", what is this... I don't even... --- OP'd and/or useless... Sure this ONLY monster cannot be attacked by a monster with 3000 or more ATK, but all other monsters you control can. Plus, even if your opponent gets a 3000+ ATK monster, this card doesn't stand a chance! - For "Sunrise Dragon", A level 4 with 2100ATK and 1600DEF is already OP'd Those are the basics for these cards. And if you're trying to make more Realistic Cards, ask the users around the forum to give you help with giving you tips and OCG fixes; I'm sure someone will help Hope this helps Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 water hydra is boring, needs another effect same goes with Cave Dragon (and its name is uncreative) Dragon Fury Seal is OPed for 1200 atk gain, tune the attack down already 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varionius Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Ok, I've updated the cards. Update Log: [list][*]Changed Cave Dragon to Slumber Dragon[*]Changed Water Hydra and Slumber Dragon's effects[*]Decreased the bonus of Dragon Fury Seal from 1200 to 500[*]Changed Sunrise Dragon's lore and attack[*] (Hopefully) Fixed OcG errors[/list]Hope It's better now. [list][*][/list] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 well now I can't read Water Hydra's effect can you write it out? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varionius Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Updated again: [list][*]Added a textual lore for each card.[/list] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 the problem with Water Hydra is that it's just an atk determining effect, nothing more you should give it another effect Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varionius Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Updated again and again: [list][*]Modified Water Hydra's effect[/list] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 right NOW it's better, so I can rate it at 7.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varionius Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Tnx. i might make more, any suggestions to improve these? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 well let's see more cards first, then I'll give you recommendations Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varionius Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Just added a new card: [list][*]Set The Dragon Warrior Sorcerer[/list] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 just gaining atk is boring for a synchro though, you should give it another effect Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varionius Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Just added an extra effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 also I just noticed you can't have Dragon AND Spellcaster in the card type you need to choose one, then write in the lore it's also treated as the other Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varionius Posted July 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 Updated: [list][*]Changed Set's effect[/list] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 12, 2011 Report Share Posted July 12, 2011 all right, then for that card I'll give you 8.1/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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