D.A._Sakuyamon Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 [color="#ff00ff"]The Arch-Type I have in mind is that, monsters are curses. When the are summoned, they Attach themselves to any monster on the field even other curses and it's not optional. They will give the monster a curse of some kind. If the monster leaves the field, then die die just like any other equip card.[/color] [center][img]http://img10.imageshack.us/img10/5157/101278c.jpg[/img][/center][spoiler=Lore]When this card is Summoned: Equip it to 1 monster on the field. If there are no monsters on the field to equip to: It's effect is negated. Your opponent cannot declare an attack. The monster equipped to this card cannot leave the field and it's ATK becomes 0. During each Standby Phase: Take 500 points of Damage.[/spoiler] [center][img]http://img560.imageshack.us/img560/2417/101278k.jpg[/img][/center][center][spoiler=Lore]When this card is Summoned: Equip it to 1 monster on the field. If there are no monsters on the field to equip to: It's effect is negated. Your opponent cannot declare an attack. During each Standby Phase: The controller of the equipped monster rolls a Dice; Based on the roll, apply 1 of the following effects; [/center][center]* 1 or 3-The Controller of the equipped monster takes Damage equal to it's Level x300[/center][center]* 2 or 4-Destroy all cards on the field except this card and the equipped monster.[/center][center]*5 or 6-Switch control of the equipped monster.[/spoiler][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 so slowly burn yourself to prevent battle damage it's an interesting effect, 500 isn't really TOO much, so the effect should balance itself 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shelds9 Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 So, you decided to do Curses. I would like to see what else you do with them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mehmani Posted July 26, 2011 Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 Wording/Grammar = 6/10 Creativity = 11/20 Balance = 10/30 Viability = 13/40 40% = D The effect is pretty much flawlessly written, however, there is no Copyright 1996 Kazuki Takahashi clause, correct Set ID or serial number. For this, you receive only a middling mark in the first section. The concept of a curse is a decent one, but you did not expand on it at all. You could have made this card a Union monster, for instance, or jazzed up the concept a bit. You speak of a potential archetype, why not post more support? The good concept saves you from an awful mark. The card is just...not good enough. It's useless. It's far too weak to be used in any meta decks and there are other cards that do what it does better. I felt quite kind today so I gave you 1/3 of the top mark, but on a normal day I would have marked you down a lot more. The card is just too underpowered and not at all viable. Try more next time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted July 26, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 26, 2011 [quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1311720062' post='5389656'] so slowly burn yourself to prevent battle damage it's an interesting effect, 500 isn't really TOO much, so the effect should balance itself 9/10 [/quote] Hmm, okay. Thanks [quote name='shelds9' timestamp='1311720819' post='5389697'] So, you decided to do Curses. I would like to see what else you do with them. [/quote] Yeah, If I decide to go through with them. [quote name='Dт. Михаи́л Ботви́нник PчD' timestamp='1311720906' post='5389701'] Wording/Grammar = 6/10 Creativity = 11/20 Balance = 10/30 Viability = 13/40 40% = D [b]The effect is pretty much flawlessly written, however, there is no Copyright 1996 Kazuki Takahashi clause, correct Set ID or serial number. For this, you receive only a middling mark in the first section. [/b] [i]The concept of a curse is a decent one, but you did not expand on it at all. You could have made this card a Union monster, for instance, or jazzed up the concept a bit. You speak of a potential archetype, why not post more support? The good concept saves you from an awful mark. [/i] [u]The card is just...not good enough. It's useless. It's far too weak to be used in any meta decks and there are other cards that do what it does better. I felt quite kind today so I gave you 1/3 of the top mark, but on a normal day I would have marked you down a lot more. The card is just too underpowered and not at all viable. Try more next time.[/u] [/quote] Bold: Well, I overlooked Serial Number & I rarely if ever go by that clause. Ital: I said "A possible Arch-Type. I never said that I'd go with it. Just the possibility. As for Union, I though of that but ehh I didn't want to go with that. Under: I agree, it's a card that would only work if more cards based around it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted July 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 28, 2011 bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted July 29, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 29, 2011 added a card Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 29, 2011 Report Share Posted July 29, 2011 the 2 or 4 effect seems a bit broken after all, you didn't specify the equipped monster, so any monster would apply Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted July 29, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 29, 2011 Umm..............the equipped monster is specified............. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 29, 2011 Report Share Posted July 29, 2011 "When this card is Summoned: Equip it to 1 monster on the field." No you didn't, you just said a monster on the field Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted July 29, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 29, 2011 [quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1311957352' post='5398591'] "When this card is Summoned: Equip it to 1 monster on the field." No you didn't, you just said a monster on the field [/quote] Even with that being said, theres still the 5-6 roll to switch control, and there are far better nukers [spoiler=Demise][img]http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20071218045254/yugioh/images/thumb/b/b2/Demise%2CKingofArmageddonDR04-EN-SR.png/300px-Demise%2CKingofArmageddonDR04-EN-SR.png[/img][/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted July 31, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2011 Bumps :\ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 1, 2011 Report Share Posted August 1, 2011 [quote name='♥ D.A._Fortune Lady ♥' timestamp='1311972161' post='5399156'] Even with that being said, theres still the 5-6 roll to switch control, and there are far better nukers [spoiler=Demise][img]http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20071218045254/yugioh/images/thumb/b/b2/Demise%2CKingofArmageddonDR04-EN-SR.png/300px-Demise%2CKingofArmageddonDR04-EN-SR.png[/img][/spoiler] [/quote] well how many people still use the Demise card nowadays? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.A._Sakuyamon Posted August 1, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 1, 2011 Anyone who plays rituals Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 1, 2011 Report Share Posted August 1, 2011 yeah but rituals aren't popular anymore, not with synchros everywhere Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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