Perigros Posted August 4, 2011 Report Share Posted August 4, 2011 [img]http://img840.imageshack.us/img840/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img155.imageshack.us/img155/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img148.imageshack.us/img148/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img26.imageshack.us/img26/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img718.imageshack.us/img718/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img585.imageshack.us/img585/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img585.imageshack.us/img585/7350/463101j.jpg[/img] [img]http://img546.imageshack.us/img546/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img812.imageshack.us/img812/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img221.imageshack.us/img221/9703/463101mc.jpg[/img] [img]http://img405.imageshack.us/img405/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img854.imageshack.us/img854/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img847.imageshack.us/img847/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img30.imageshack.us/img30/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img577.imageshack.us/img577/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img839.imageshack.us/img839/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img26.imageshack.us/img26/7582/463101u.jpg[/img] [img]http://img707.imageshack.us/img707/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img20.imageshack.us/img20/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img594.imageshack.us/img594/8990/463101.jpg[/img] sorry about the lack of pics, but i didn't see any i liked, and i'm not a very good artist here's three cards i forgot to post. one of them is key to bringin the deck together. it will seem extremely cheap at first, but take into account just how difficult it is to get onto the field. [img]http://img7.imageshack.us/img7/7582/463101u.jpg[/img] [img]http://img233.imageshack.us/img233/8990/463101.jpg[/img] [img]http://img233.imageshack.us/img233/9038/463101q.jpg[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Glogatha Posted August 5, 2011 Report Share Posted August 5, 2011 well, decent Effects, balanced, minor Ocg but too many to fix...'7/10 P.S nilla's (normal monsters) are most known for their pics, so there's really no point of having them here... where'd you look for pics? overall, without pics theyre still unfinished, so they belong in written cards...sorry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 5, 2011 Report Share Posted August 5, 2011 [center][center]I agree, Written Cards would be perfect to start in, instead of making pictureless cards. | Name | Level | Attribute | Type | Effect ATK/ DEF/ | Name | Type | Type of Type | Effect[/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center]Use these to write your Written Cards. For the Spell/trap, Type of Type meaning (Counter, Continuous, and so on) Type is Spell or Trap[/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TJP12409 Posted August 5, 2011 Report Share Posted August 5, 2011 While yes these are still written cards, they are good cards nevertheless and have plenty of potential. HOWEVER, the OCG is in need of some repairs. Namely: Crane & Eagle: What that effect would do is something better than regular piercing damage (btw the ocg is being changed so that piercing is a legal term). Lets say Crane's ATK was less than a defense position monster's DEF, the difference would be dealt to both you and the opponent even though your ATK was lower. The effect should say "If the ATK of this monster is higher than the DEF of a defense position monster..." before the rest of the effect. Finch: "crad" should be "card" Gull: Because it has no effect, It should be a normal monster Pelican: Union monsters equip TO other monsters, they don't equip other non-union monsters. Also you might want to look up a real life union monster to see the full union OCG. Quail: No problems with the OCG here, but this card is WAY too overpowered. As long as it makes it past 1700 ATK it will be difficult to beat without using spells or traps. I suggest making it a level 5 monster, staring at 1600 ATK and only gaining 400 ATK per attack. Just water it down a bit, it is way too overpowered for a level 2 monster. Roadrunner: "Selsect" is "select" , "activate one of these effects:" is "activate one of the following effects:" , and each of the effects should have a bullet or hyphen before them: -blahblah -blahblahblah Swift: Why have it attack directly when its effect involves attacking monsters? It seems a bit pointless.... Wren: This is what a union monster does (for the most part at least)! Remember to check out the full Union OCG. Now that I realize why you made your pelican a "union" I know I can tell you that it does not have to be a union monster to have that effect. Overall: attack and defense when referring to the stats is ATK and DEF and "may" is an old term and can be replaced with "can". Final suggestions: FIND PICS! Make spells/traps that work with them specifically. Other than the fact that they are all birds, the archtype has no relevance to one another, come up with something that relates to all of them as an effect. Final score: 6/10 Needs Improvement: This has some potential, but its not quite there yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nkschlosser Posted August 5, 2011 Report Share Posted August 5, 2011 I believe just like you that this set has potential. HOWEVER that said all the names of birds are good at first but when you have that many they bacome kinda annoying. just so you know. My final score is five out of ten. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Perigros Posted August 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 5, 2011 thanks for the ideas guys, i'll take them into account and make the set better based on your advice. I totally agree about the pics, i just need a little time to draw them up. Don't really think pics of actual birds is the way to gowait, i just remembered as to why i had different effects. It's mainly to power-up one card i forgot to post (the key of the Jetwing Deck), which i will add in a second, but also because one single effect is too easy to plan around. the opponent figures it out, and then they know your whole strategy. this deck doesn't really come together until i make some spells and traps to help them, like they did with blackwings in a sesne. i started with monsters, and now I'm going onto making spells and traps to get them together.just posted the key card for this set... goin on to fix certain effects and some minor details... like pics. I'll make a new post as soon as i update these and have some helpful spell and traps to bring with them., but the spells and traps might take a while. Ideas for monsters always come to me quicker than others for some reason.Upon inspection of Thermos, i realized that even despite his difficulty level to get on the field he is still terribly overpowering. currently fixing the problem and altering certain effects to make the deck come together. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nkschlosser Posted August 5, 2011 Report Share Posted August 5, 2011 Thank you for making that clear..... my thoughts on your series went to six instead of five just now. It will probably get better when you post the spells and traps. Also ty for respondin to our posts so quick. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Perigros Posted August 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 5, 2011 no problem, thanks for you guy's help. Effects, Spells, and Traps comin along great. deck mainly seems to focus on dealing damage through usage of piercing damage and Direct attacks, with quite a few special summoning and a few effects for monsters to stay around for longer usage. Example: Jetwing Owl Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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