Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]A generic Xyz monster that will show that Xyz Monster's are not trash! Screw Synchros >,< I meant to put 2000 damage, not 3000, trust the Lore. I didn't feel like going through the hassel to change 1 # in the card effect. [/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center][img]http://img825.imageshack.us/img825/3066/300pxnumber39utopiays11.jpg[/img] [/center][/center] [center][center][spoiler=Lore]3 Level 4 monsters: This card is unaffected by Spell and Trap cards. Once per turn, you can remove 1 Xyz Material from this card to banish 1 card on the field. During your End Phase, remove 1 Xyz Material from this card. When this card has 0 Xyz Material on it, banish it and take 2000 damage.[/spoiler] [/center][/center] [center][center]Rate/Comment [/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azphreal Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 *whistles* Interesting. "0 Xyz Material" should be "no Xyz Materials", I'm pretty sure "Banish" is always caps, and you forgot the semi-colon in the first effect; you put "to" instead. You also forgot the brackets around the [Type/Sub-Type/Sub-Type]. Otherwise, very useful, powerful and effective. I DID notice you did this over YS11-041, "Number 39: Aspiring Emperor Hope"*, as well. There ARE templates you can use around YCM for Photoshop, GIMP and MSE. *I prefer the Japanese name. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center]XD I prefer the Japanese also. [/center][/center] [center][center]Nice call, I did use Hope. I used Paint though lol [/center][/center] [center][center]I knew the Type and so on were missing something, thanks [/center][/center] [center][center]Banish is not supposed to be capitalized [spoiler=Example][url="http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Leviair_the_Sea_Dragon"]http://yugioh.wikia...._the_Sea_Dragon[/url][/spoiler][/center][/center] [center][center]Hope is number 39 just btw [/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BFG Studios Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 im liking what you're saying: I definately like Xyz's better than Synchros On topic: I like the idea... banishing monsters but still being careful not to use all your materials to take damage... seems balanced mind for an ocg fix? [b]3 Level 4 monsters[/b] [b]This card is unaffected by [u]the effects of[/u] Spell and Trap Cards. Once per turn, during your End Phase: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; banish 1 card on the field. When this card has no Xyz Materials: Banish it; take 2000 damage.[/b] The underlined part is optional... it just adds the knowledge of EFFECTS! You can delete it if you want. The sentences you had for removing materials were either once per turn or during your end phase... so I combined them for you for a shorter, yet the same, effect Action limitations come first with a colon and a capital letter at the end... then the cost/action with a semi-colon... then the effect! Hope this helps and I like the card 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]That is not the same effect. The End Phase is auto-trigger on mine, and is not for yours.[/center][/center] [center][center]It is suppose to have a time-limit on it, so it can't terrorize forever. I would hate fighting a 2800 beater immune to Spell/Traps.[/center][/center] [center][center]I would change the underlined content, but that would require a big hassel for a piece of optional text.[/center][/center] [center][center]Thanks for the rating [/center][/center] [center][center]Power to the Ikseez! (Xyz)[/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ascriptmaster Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 3 Level 4 monsters This card is unaffected by[b] the effects[/b] of Spell and Trap cards. Once per turn: you can [b]detach[/b] 1 Xyz Material from this card to [b]target 1 card on the field; banish that target[/b]. During your End Phase: [b]detach[/b] 1 Xyz Material from this card. When this card has no Xyz Materials, banish it and take 2000 damage. Interesting card effect, and quite dangerous to use. You'll only be able to use the effect twice at best, plus it's a ticking time bomb, which could make it really dangerous to use. I mean, it dies in 3 turns at most if you don't do anything, and using its effect makes it die faster. Of course, its ATK and immunity to Spells and Traps is ridiculous and therefore the countdown is needed. Not sure if it's OP'd or not... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]"the effects" is un-needed.[/center][/center] [center][center]I remembered "detach" right after I made it and didn't feel like going through the trouble to change the 1 word.[/center][/center] [center][center]banish 1 card on the field is the same as "[b]1 card on the field; banish that target[/b]." but yours in fancier.[/center][/center] [center][center]The ideal thing for it is to detach and banish a card, then attack. Next turn attack, then banish a card and take 2000 for all the menacing things you just did with 3 Level 4 monsters.[/center][/center] [center][center]Thanks for comment [/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ascriptmaster Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [url="http://www.konami.com/yugioh/articles/?p=2962"]Problem Solving Card Text Part 4[/url] says otherwise about simply saying "banish 1 card on the field". All the effects there (except Magical Dimension, which is special) involve targetting and then destroying. In fact, you always target before the effect goes through, it just wasn't explicitly stated until the new OCG. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]I didn't read the new OCG, and not going to edit the card.[/center][/center] [center][center]Though it is noted for my future cards, thanks.[/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kazekage dragon Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 Well the card is pretty cool and since OCG has already been pointed out I'll concentrate on the card itself. It is very cool and has a great effect. It's nice that it has a self destruct limitation to it so the effect becomes balanced. I'm not sure about the damage you receive though, for me losing the monster is enough but hey it's your card. The image looks cool as an Xyz so that was good on your part. Using three Levels is very good considering the effect and even though I said I didn't like the inflicted damage part, using Prime M Dragon could actually make this ten times better! For some reason I look at this card and just think "Steelswarm." Anyways good job! I really like this card and hope to see more in the future! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]Thanks man that means alot to me.[/center][/center] [center][center]Its nice to see another nice person [/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
drcrisis Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 It just seems this card is too much hassle for how long it stays up and its ATK power and effect power. For some people this card will take 3 turns to get out, maybe more, just for it to last for as long as it took to make it. Idk.. 7/10 for the great pic and idea though Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]If you have seen the other Ikseez monsters, it is semi-easier.[/center][/center] [center][center]Plus, you could first turn set GK Spy, opp atk, summon a guard, then normal summon a monster.[/center][/center] [center][center]Or Normal Summon Goblindbergh, SS a Level 4, and SS Shadow Lizard with its effect.[/center][/center] [center][center]Other ways but there are alot.[/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 the only real problem is it'll lose the XYZ materials WAY too quickly you should have also given it an ability to reattach the materials back on to itself (which would then justify the 2000 burn more) beyond that, everything else is balanced for it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]It can banish a card (2), attack, end (1). Then next turn attack and banish a card (0).[/center][/center] [center][center]For something you can't stop except by Battle, I thought it was a nice thing to sort of balance it out.[/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 right I know it's not easy to kill given 2800 atk, and you only have to watch out for Skill Drain Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]It is totally unaffected by Spell/Trap, I am not 100% sure but I believe since it is unaffected it would prioritize over Skill Drain[/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 no, as if it Skill Drain gets on the field FIRST Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]Then you just wouldn't Summon it XD[/center][/center] [center][center]Rating for this card if you re-post on this topic?[/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 you really want the rating don't you? Well given that was the only problem I found with it, I'll give you the 9.7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted August 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 [center][center]Thanks for the rating.[/center][/center] [center][center]I just remembered, if using the Ikseez mini-archetype, if you used the Sorceror guy to Xyz Summon Diety then he could destroy the Skill Drain and Diety will be fine and dandy [/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 6, 2011 Report Share Posted August 6, 2011 yeah, always the ways to get around the Skill Drain nowadays Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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