Rivenroth Posted August 16, 2011 Report Share Posted August 16, 2011 [center]Alright, this is my first time making cards so please be gentle.[/center] [center](I probably went a little overboard with the effects, but... too late for that.)[/center] [center]If anyone notices anything wrong (OCG errors, overpowered/useless cards, bad pictures, etc...) Please give a valid reason as to why you think so, and I will be happy for the feedback![/center] [center]Anyway, Sora No Otoshimono is one of my favorite animes to date, so I figured I'd make some cards... Constructive criticism please? [spoiler=Monsters][/center] [center][img]http://img814.imageshack.us/img814/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard. This card cannot be summoned if 'Uranus Queen Ikaros' is face-up on the field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle while in defense position if 'Tomoki Sakurai' is face-up on your side of the field.[/center] [center][img]http://img13.imageshack.us/img13/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard. As long as 'Hacking Field' is face-up on the field, this card cannot be destroyed by a card effect. While this card is in face-up defense position, increase the ATK of all other 'Fairy' monsters on the field by 200.[/center] [center][img]http://img851.imageshack.us/img851/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard. This card cannot be summoned if 'Awakened Chaos' is face-up on the field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. This card cannot be banished. This card receives piercing damage.[/center] [center][img]http://img7.imageshack.us/img7/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard. This card inflicts piercing damage. If your opponent activates a trap card during your battle phase, this card is changed to defense position and it's controller takes 300 damage.[/center] [center][img]http://img28.imageshack.us/img28/1273/470198m.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard. As long as you control one face-up 'Angeloid Beta' this card cannot be selected as an attack target. This card gains 100 ATK for each 'Angeloid Gamma 2' face-up on your side of the field.[/center] [center][img]http://img191.imageshack.us/img191/4306/470198j.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard. As long as you control one face-up 'Angeloid Beta' this card cannot be selected as an attack target. This card gains 100 ATK for each 'Angeloid Gamma 1' face-up on your side of the field.[/center] [center][img]http://img834.imageshack.us/img834/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard.[/center] [center][img]http://img263.imageshack.us/img263/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard. This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card can only be special summoned by the effect of 'Chaos Realized'. When this card is successfully special summoned, destroy all 'Warrior' type monsters on the field. If 'Sky Master' is on the field when this card is successfully special summoned, destroy all 'Fairy' type monsters on the field instead, except this card and 'Sky Master'. This card cannot be changed to defense position by a card effect. This card is unaffected by spell cards.[/center] [center][img]http://img155.imageshack.us/img155/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]You can only control one 'Eishiro Sugata'. Increase the DEF of this card by 200 for each 'Mikako Satsukitane' face-up on the field. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, no other 'Warrior' type monsters can be selected as attack targets. If this monster attacks or is attacked, once per turn, every two turns, you can increase this monster's ATK by it's original ATK during the damage step only.[/center] [center][img]http://img824.imageshack.us/img824/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]You can only control one 'Judas'. This card can only be tribute summoned by tributing 'Warrior' type monsters. When this card is tribute summoned, destroy all face-up spell and trap cards your opponent controls. This card is also treated as a DARK monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard.[/center] [center][img]http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]You can only control one 'Mikako Satsukitane'. If there is another 'Warrior' type monster on the field, when this attack position card battles, destroy the opposing monster at the end of the damage step.[/center] [center][img]http://img710.imageshack.us/img710/7713/470198z.jpg[/img][/center] [center]You can only control one 'Sky Master'. This card can only be tribute summoned by tributing 'Warrior' type monsters. When this card is tribute summoned, return all 'Master Imprint' cards in your graveyard to your deck, then shuffle your deck. When this card is special summoned, destroy all other monsters you control.[/center] [center][img]http://img850.imageshack.us/img850/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]You can only control one 'Sohara Mitsuki'. Increase this monster's ATK by 100 for each 'Tomoki Sakurai' in your graveyard. If 'Umi' is face-up on the field and 'Tomoki Sakurai' is not face-up on your side of the field, destroy this card.[/center] [center][img]http://img88.imageshack.us/img88/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]You can only control one 'Tomoki Sakurai'. If you control at least one 'Fairy' type monster other than 'Sky Master', this card cannot be selected as an attack target, or by your opponent's card effects. If 'Eishiro Sugata', 'Mikako Satsukitane' and 'Sohara Mitsuki' are on the field, this card can attack your opponent directly.[/center] [center][img]http://img804.imageshack.us/img804/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card is also treated as a 'Fairy' type monster while face-up on the field or in the graveyard. This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card cannot be special summoned except by the effect of 'Restoring the Queen'. When this card is successfully special summoned, destroy all 'Fairy' type monsters on the field except this card. Once per turn, you can destroy up to two face-up attack position monsters your opponent controls. You cannot use this effect the turn this card is summoned. You cannot conduct your battle phase the turn this effect is activated.[/center] [center][/spoiler][/center] [center][spoiler=Spells][/center] [center][img]http://img707.imageshack.us/img707/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]You can only activate this card when there is a face-up 'Angeloid Chaos' on your side of the field. Send one face-up 'Angeloid Chaos' from your side of the field to the graveyard and special summon one 'Awakened Chaos' from your hand.[/center] [center][img]http://img809.imageshack.us/img809/7811/470198v.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Activate only if there is a face-up 'Master Imprint' on the field. Destroy all face-up 'Master Imprint' cards on the field and gain life points equal to the number of each card destroyed x600.[/center] [center][img]http://img571.imageshack.us/img571/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Equippable only to 'Angeloid Zeta'. The equipped monster is not affected by your opponent's spell or trap cards.[/center] [center][img]http://img705.imageshack.us/img705/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]This card cannot be destroyed by a card effect. This card is destroyed if there is no face-up 'Angeloid Beta' on the field. 'Fairy' type monsters, other than 'Angeloid Beta', cannot be destroyed by battle while in defense position.[/center] [center][img]http://img153.imageshack.us/img153/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Activate only if a 'Warrior' type monster you control would be destroyed by battle. The targeted monster is not destroyed. (Damage calculation is applied normally)[/center] [center][img]http://img833.imageshack.us/img833/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Return one banished 'Angeloid Beta' to the owner's hand and draw one 'Paradise Song' from your deck.[/center] [center][img]http://img18.imageshack.us/img18/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Can only be equipped to 'Warrior' type monsters or 'Sky Master', and only if there is a face-up 'Fairy' monster on your side of the field other than 'Sky Master'. Increase the equipped monster's ATK by 250. Declare the name of one 'Fairy' monster other than 'Sky Master'. All monsters with the same name as the declared monster have their ATK increased by 300.[/center] [center][img]http://img690.imageshack.us/img690/4157/470198l.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Increase the attack of all face-up 'Fairy' type monsters you control by 200 for every face-up 'Warrior' type monster you control. Increase the attack of all 'Warrior' type monsters by 300 for every face-up 'Fairy' type monster you control.[/center] [center][img]http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Equip only to 'Angeloid Gamma 1' or 'Angeloid Gamma 2'. Increase the equipped monster's ATK by 500 and decrease it's DEF by 300.[/center] [center][img]http://img195.imageshack.us/img195/4157/470198l.jpg[/img][/center] [center]You can only activate this card if you have one 'Angeloid Alpha' and one 'Angeloid Beta' face-up on your side of the field. Destroy one 'Angeloid Alpha' you control and special summon one 'Uranus Queen Ikaros' from your hand.[/center] [center][img]http://img163.imageshack.us/img163/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]While this card is face-up on your side of the field, your opponent cannot negate the attack of any 'Machine' type monster you control.[/center] [center][img]http://img807.imageshack.us/img807/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Activate only if you control one face-up 'Angeloid Beta' and one face-up 'Angeloid Gamma 1' or 'Angeloid Gamma 2'. Banish one 'Angeloid Beta', and skip your opponent's next battle phase.[/center] [center][img]http://img14.imageshack.us/img14/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Select one face-up 'Angeloid Alpha' or 'Uranus Queen Ikaros' on the field. - If 'Angeloid Alpha' was selected, the selected monster can attack up to three times this turn, and can attack your opponent directly. Each successful attack decreases the ATK of the monster by half of the monster's original ATK, until the End Phase. - If 'Uranus Queen Ikaros' was selected, decrease the monster's ATK by 900 until your opponent's next end phase. The selected monster can attack your opponent directly this turn.[/center] [center][/spoiler][/center] [center][spoiler=Traps][/center] [center][img]http://img831.imageshack.us/img831/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Activate only if an effect is activated that would destroy two or more cards on the field. Negate the effect and select one of the cards that would have been affected. Destroy the selected card.[/center] [center][img]http://img580.imageshack.us/img580/8593/470198.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Activate only if a face-up 'Angeloid Beta' you control is selected as an attack target. Negate the attack, destroy the attacking monster and end the battle phase. You cannot conduct your next battle phase.[/center] [center][img]http://img835.imageshack.us/img835/3366/470198q.jpg[/img][/center] [center]The control of 'Fairy' type monsters cannot be switched.[/center] [center][img]http://img805.imageshack.us/img805/9720/470198g.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Can only be used when a monster's effect to destroy a card is activated. Negate the effect and destroy the effect monster. The controller of that card takes 600 damage.[/center] [center][img]http://img193.imageshack.us/img193/7356/470198i.jpg[/img][/center] [center]Activate only when your opponent selects 'Angeloid Delta' as an attack target. Negate the attack and destroy both monsters.[/center] [center][/spoiler] Thanks to Shattered Sky for OCG corrections![/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Glogatha Posted August 16, 2011 Report Share Posted August 16, 2011 *Giggle* Uranus Queen anyways These are nice, some pics could be better due to fuzzyness(i.e.Defience), plus lots of reliance on other cards... Heres some new ocg for you too... When this card attacks a defense position monster, inflict the difference... new ocg: This card inflicts Piercing damage remove from play new: Banish now reviews. since this is a set, it'd take a while to review them all...so I'll give you an overall review Wow, for a newbie, you have great Ocg! :3 With new types, and heavy reliance, it would be pretty easy to get a usless hand, but, if you managed to get a few good cards, it could be pretty good too, theres an overall weak ATK for LV 4s. I think you have potential, keep it up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivenroth Posted August 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 17, 2011 [quote name='Shattered Sky' timestamp='1313515217' post='5447559'] *Giggle* Uranus Queen [/quote] I was really hoping no one would laugh at that... Haha, oh well. [quote name='Shattered Sky' timestamp='1313515217' post='5447559'] These are nice, some pics could be better due to fuzzyness(i.e.Defience), plus lots of reliance on other cards... [/quote] Defiance specifically was my bad, i took a bad snapshot and was too lazy to change it... And I put heavy reliance on the majority of the cards because I personally don't like being able to completely stomp people with 3 cards, even if it would give me a huge disadvantage. [quote name='Shattered Sky' timestamp='1313515217' post='5447559'] Heres some new ocg for you too... When this card attacks a defense position monster, inflict the difference... new ocg: This card inflicts Piercing damage remove from play new: Banish [/quote] Thanks for the OCG :3 But how exactly would I write Chaos' effect? She grants piercing to whomever attacks, so would I say 'This card receives piercing.' ? And thanks for having faith ^.^ I'll make the proper adjustments to the cards a little later on. Would you say any other of them are fuzzy or have bad pictures? Aside from Defiance they all look fine to me, but what do I know right? Thanks for the feedback! : D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nightmare Moon Posted August 17, 2011 Report Share Posted August 17, 2011 [font=arial, helvetica, sans-serif][size=3]Hey dudett, welcome to YCM. And I'm LOVING the cards!! ^^ Although, you shouldn't use Fake Types. I'd suggest making the Angeloids, Fairy-Types. And the Downers, Warrior-Types to straighten them out. Just letting you know.[/size][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivenroth Posted August 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 17, 2011 [quote name='ハネクリボー' timestamp='1313551969' post='5449400'] [font=arial, helvetica, sans-serif][size=3]Hey dudett, welcome to YCM. And I'm LOVING the cards!! ^^ Although, you shouldn't use Fake Types. I'd suggest making the Angeloids, Fairy-Types. And the Downers, Warrior-Types to straighten them out. Just letting you know.[/size][/font] [/quote] Thanks for the Welcome and compliment ^.^ and I appreciate your input. [s]However, unless I'm mistaken of course, Divine monsters, fake types, or anything of the sort, are all allowed in this subforum.[/s] [s]If I decide to post these in realistic after I'm finished making everything for them, and if there's no clarification as to whether[/s] [s]fake-types are allowed or not (I'm not entirely sure on the circumstances.) I will change them to Machine-type that are also treated as Fairy-type.[/s] [s]But for the time being, Angeloids remain Angeloids, and Downers remain Downers.[/s] Actually, forget that. [s]Making alterations right now.[/s] Fixed, sorry if I was being a jerk. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivenroth Posted August 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 18, 2011 Fixed the OCG. (Most, if not all) Added Concentrated Blast, Demeter, Angeloid Zeta, Hide 'N Seek and Our Differences Aside. Fixed Defiance picture. (If you can think of a better name for Hide 'N Seek or Our Differences Aside, please suggest it.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivenroth Posted August 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 18, 2011 Bump...? C'mon guys, feedback and ratings? Would be lovely! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivenroth Posted August 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2011 Added Judas, Targeting Optics and Sniper Training. Still waiting on some ratings... >_> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivenroth Posted August 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 20, 2011 GoGo Gadget Bump? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KurogamiXXI Posted August 21, 2011 Report Share Posted August 21, 2011 Hmm, I'm not fond of cards that rely on several other cards too much (without any searching capabilities), so useless draws will happen too often. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivenroth Posted August 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 21, 2011 [quote name='KurogamiXXI' timestamp='1313894589' post='5458339'] Hmm, I'm not fond of cards that rely on several other cards too much (without any searching capabilities), so useless draws will happen too often. [/quote] Yes well, I'm still adding cards and, since you brought it up, deck search cards would probably make everything more playable so I will add some next time I make more cards for the set. In any case, thanks for the reminder! Anything else you could add? I'd really appreciate it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tomoki Sakurai Posted December 22, 2011 Report Share Posted December 22, 2011 Epic cards...bump? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Travie Posted December 22, 2011 Report Share Posted December 22, 2011 The OCG is way off. For instance; graveyard = Graveyard. However, OCG isn't all that important to me. For me and a fair few other members it's about the creativity and effort that goes behind the cards effects. I did a little bit of reading up on the anime. Your effects do relate to the characters somewhat, however, you sacrificed balance within the effect and therefore sacrificed the realism. I see you have potential, more so than a lot of the members in pop culture. If you are [u]really[/u] serious about making cards then I recommend going through the Yu-Gi-Oh! Wikia. (Google Yugioh Wikia). Read up on different card effects and see what makes them balanced. Click external links for combos and tips on what cards can be used to contrast another and take in the OCG while reading it. What I used to do and still do is this; if you're unsure, look at several cards and see how they're written and compare it to yours. If Konami has put the word 'graveyard' as 'Graveyard' that is the correct OCG. I would recommend looking at cards from 2010-2011 though, no older then that as OCG has changed over time. The only thing OCG really serves is adding to a cards realism. Visiting this site's TCG section and having a look around can't hurt either. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rivenroth Posted December 23, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 23, 2011 Wow, I just noticed this got Necroed, from the depths of f***ing hell I might add. xD @Travie: These were my very very very first cards, I've gotten much better with my OCG. I do plan to remake these cards, whenever I feel up to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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