>>Jinzen, The Mechanical Nightmare<<

[SushiTheLegend]

[align=center]Okay, I suppose this isn't the most original of cards and the effect certainly isn't the most original either. This is simply a more advanced Jinzo if Jinzo was capable of becoming more advanced. The concept pretty much makes Jinzo needed to even get Jinzen out in the first place and then his effect adapts Jinzo's effect with Amplifier along with a destruction effect that hurts both players, if you add in the strengthed ATK and DEF of the card you have a slightly advanced Jinzo.

 

I'll be honest that some may say this seems quite broken, however I feel the damage to both players makes it very fair to both the opponent and the controller of Jinzen, plus he is an 8 Star and needs to be Tribute Summoned via tributing Jinzo. In addition even though Jinzen allows the controller to still use his/her traps it can still be stolen if done correctly.

 

 

Jinzen, The Mechanical Nightmare

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 1 "Jinzo" on your side of the field. As long as this card remains face-up on your side of the field, your opponent cannot activate Trap Cards. The effects of your opponent's face-up Trap Cards are also negated. Once every two turns by sending your entire hand to the Graveyard destroy every Spell and Trap Card on the field, then inflict 400 points of Direct Damage to your opponent's Life Points for each card destroyed by this effect.[/align]

 

--Post Originally Posted In Card Maker Shinigami's Thread--

[~ Chidori-Kun]

i think its a little overpowered. just by discarding 1 card from your hand inflict up to4000 damage. and if your hand is composed of dark world you could win that turn.

[SushiTheLegend]

True at that I suppose. But if you think how hard the card is to summon in the first place, in addition add the fact that if you did inflict 4000 points of damage you would ultimately kill yourself as well as the opponent and thus end the duel in a draw.

[Guest JoshIcy]

meh it doesnt seem so broken... but i agree with sasukechidori58 dark world monsters would make this card "broken". just add at the end > "Effects that would activate from discarding cards from your hand are also negated." or something similar...

[Saiba Aisu]

I think you did a fine job on the effect and card itself. The image however just looks tacky with that Holo. I could fix it for you, if you like.

[SushiTheLegend]

I have the Non-Holo one so that is fine C_C. Although I don't quite get how DW cards would benefit from this...

[Abstract [Atrocity]]

It's pretty good, although it's close to the new Jinzo evolution. If you don't want this card to be broken, just change "discard" in its effect to "send", so DW's can't benefit from him.

[SushiTheLegend]

The point was that it is supposed to be a Jinzo evolution, lol. But I see what you mean now...I should change that to send.

 

EDIT: Fixed the small OCG errors that were pointed out as well as the ones I noticed while looking things over.

[Lucas Maximus]

Really nice card, well done. 9/10 ^^