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{HZR}[Single]{Xyz} Portrait pf Chaos


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My first proper Xyz (Exceed) with a template.
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2 Level 3 DARK Monster or 2 Level 3 LIGHT Monster

Once per turn, by detaching 1 Xyz Material Monster from this card you can activate the following effect depending on the Attribute of the detached Monster: *DARK - Target up to 2 Monsters on the field, banish the targeted Monster. *LIGHT - Inflict damage to your Opponents Life Points equal to the Xyz Material Monsters Level x500.

Just adding this bit of the effect just to see what yous think..
When there are no Xyz Material Monsters attached to this card, you can pay 1000 Life Points to attach 1 Banished Monster to this card. This effect can only be used once per duel.

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This card cannot be summoned since you need 6 monsters to summon it and you can only summon up to five. Moreover if this card could be summoned by some way it would be terribly under powered.
I would suggest you to change its summoning conditions to 1 Level 3 DARK + 1 Level 3 LIGHT. This way it would be worth Summoning.

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you'd waste 6 monsters on THIS?
This is so many kinds of bad I don't even know where to start...
1) almost impossible to Summon....no, wait...it's IMPOSSIBLE to summon (how on earth can you get 6 monsters out on the field at all?!)
2) the effect where it destroys a monster?...a lot of decent generic synchros have it.. example is Dark End Dragon (but he does it much much better)
2) effect about ATK boost?...a half-assed Ancient Sacred Wyvern
3) ATK and DEF? Even if they were at 5000 both, it wouldn't justify its extremely underpowered effects... because it can't even be summoned.
4) Picture?...it's horrible beyond belief

I suggest you completely redo this, until then, 0/10

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[quote name='Gandorator' timestamp='1319759236' post='5603720']
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you'd waste 6 monsters on THIS?
This is so many kinds of bad I don't even know where to start...
1) almost impossible to Summon....no, wait...it's IMPOSSIBLE to summon (how on earth can you get 6 monsters out on the field at all?!)
2) the effect where it destroys a monster?...a lot of decent generic synchros have it.. example is Dark End Dragon (but he does it much much better)
2) effect about ATK boost?...a half-assed Ancient Sacred Wyvern
3) ATK and DEF? Even if they were at 5000 both, it wouldn't justify its extremely underpowered effects... because it can't even be summoned.
4) Picture?...it's horrible beyond belief

I suggest you completely redo this, until then, 0/10
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Yeh, it looks like you didn't read my other comment about the summoning being a [b]TYPO![/b]

[quote name='HiZOMBIRyouken' timestamp='1319746366' post='5603350']
oh sorry it's was meant to be "1 dark + 1 light" but then i changed it to 3 level 3 dark [b]or[/b] 3 level 3 light, just a typo. but thanks for the comment.
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[s]I know I'm gonna change it now[/s] Edited

[quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1319748434' post='5603425']
hilarious pic

the LIGHT effect isn't too well

unless the LP gain is huge (like 2000 or more) it's not all that practical

it'd be better if you made that a burn instead
[/quote] will do

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[quote name='HiZOMBIRyouken' timestamp='1319759554' post='5603730']
Yeh, it looks like you didn't read my other comment about the summoning being a [b]TYPO![/b]
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well, it's not hard at all to edit your OP and mention it there somewhere, I don't need to read through every comment before commenting myself.
Anyways, all my other points stand. Absolutely nothing original about it,horrible picture and still underpowered. 1 level 3 LIGHT + 1 level 3 DARK is situational as well. Generic "X level N monsters" Xyz are better than this (example: Wind-Up Zenmaines) so this should (naturally) have an effect that's slightly better than a generic Xyz monster's. And it's just a (temporary) ATK boost (would usually be really low) and a generic destruction effect..
Make it more versatile, and since it requires LIGHT + DARK, maybe something Chaos themed (instead of a destruction effect, make it banish)

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[quote name='Gandorator' timestamp='1319761759' post='5603830']
well, it's not hard at all to edit your OP and mention it there somewhere, I don't need to read through every comment before commenting myself.
Anyways, all my other points stand. Absolutely nothing original about it,horrible picture and still underpowered. 1 level 3 LIGHT + 1 level 3 DARK is situational as well. Generic "X level N monsters" Xyz are better than this (example: Wind-Up Zenmaines) so this should (naturally) have an effect that's slightly better than a generic Xyz monster's. And it's just a (temporary) ATK boost (would usually be really low) and a generic destruction effect..
Make it more versatile, and since it requires LIGHT + DARK, maybe something Chaos themed (instead of a destruction effect, make it banish)
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Edited for a banish effect for chaos theme, but still its not a + (that was a typo) its a or, so it can fit into Chaos themed, Dark Themed, and Light themed decks.
btw, i like the pic, because i think for a portrait it shows a bit of chaos which imo is confusion

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[quote name='Infini-Tea' timestamp='1319762328' post='5603855']
Why you still no fix OTK? damage is too much. High than rank 10's 2000 burn even with normal 3s. But then comes Cyber eltanin and it's a one turn shot.
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alright sorry i forgot trying to please Gandorator

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