Veloco-Crustacean, Terror Of The Depths (My first card for a while!)

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[center]This was an entry to a contest, this is also the first card i've made since my return so i might be a bit rusty![/center]

[center][u][b]Veloco-Crustacean, Terror Of The Depths[/b][/u][/center]

[center][img]http://img64.imageshack.us/img64/1800/4891c.jpg[/img][/center]
[center][b]Card Lore:[/b][/center]
[center][i][i]"Once per turn: You can pay 1000 Life Points; destroy 1 Monster you control, this is treated as being destroyed by battle. If this card is in your Graveyard when your Life Points become 2000 or less; you can Special Summon this Monster in face up Defence Position with 2000 ATK and 2000 DEF until your next Draw Phase."[/i][/i][/center]

[center][i]^[/i]Thanks a lot [url="http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/user/58482-octavia/"]Octavia[/url] for the OCG help^[/center]

[ragnarok1945]

now that is one seriously mutated animal, really well done on the pic

well the monster destruction effect is fine, nothing really wrong with that part

second effect more situational, but it's easy to get it in the graveyard given its weak stats

shame the 2000/2000 stats only last 1 turn though, but it's understandable

[Enma Ai]

I'm not too great with OCG but here is a try at it;

[i]Once per turn: You can pay 1000 Life Points; destroy 1 Monster you control, this is treated as being destroyed by battle. If this card is in your Graveyard when your Life Points become 2000 or less; you can Special Summon this Monster in face up Defence Position with 2000 ATK and 2000 DEF until your next Draw Phase.[/i]

At least, thats how I think it goes, but I'm not an expert or anything lol, but anyway, original effect but I would probably have to see other cards from the archtype (if there is any) to judge the destruction effect, but it seems as of now that 1000 is a lot to pay for it.

It seems like it would be destroyed extremely quickly with the low ATK and DEF, but maybe thats the point. I would probably make it stay on the field a little longer, because if your Life Points are below 2000 you may just need it to pull through lol.

Overall, I like the image and the original effect.

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[size=3][quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1324581672' post='5723514']
now that is one seriously mutated animal, really well done on the pic

well the monster destruction effect is fine, nothing really wrong with that part

second effect more situational, but it's easy to get it in the graveyard given its weak stats

shame the 2000/2000 stats only last 1 turn though, but it's understandable
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Thanks, the main aim was to get it into the graveyard so you could activate the secondary effect. I was thinking about changing how long it would last on the field after being special summoned but i didn't want it to seem overpowered.


[size=3][quote name='Octavia' timestamp='1324581997' post='5723526']
I'm not too great with OCG but here is a try at it;

[i]Once per turn: You can pay 1000 Life Points; destroy 1 Monster you control, this is treated as being destroyed by battle. If this card is in your Graveyard when your Life Points become 2000 or less; you can Special Summon this Monster in face up Defence Position with 2000 ATK and 2000 DEF until your next Draw Phase.[/i]

At least, thats how I think it goes, but I'm not an expert or anything lol, but anyway, original effect but I would probably have to see other cards from the archtype (if there is any) to judge the destruction effect, but it seems as of now that 1000 is a lot to pay for it.

It seems like it would be destroyed extremely quickly with the low ATK and DEF, but maybe thats the point. I would probably make it stay on the field a little longer, because if your Life Points are below 2000 you may just need it to pull through lol.

Overall, I like the image and the original effect.
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[size=3]First, thanks for the OCG help I'll get around to changing it in a second.
The 1000 cost was put in there just to contribute enough in order to the life point reduction in order for the secondary effect to kick in. It wasn't really part of an archetype, but thats a good idea though! I feel it might be a bit too slow for the current game, but if you have a couple of searches in your deck this could be helpful. Like i said i might change the duration of the secondary effect.[/size]

Thank you both for your feedback